Reviewer: AurorGirl101
Date: 02/04/07 13:05
Chapter: Are You Brave Enough?

I really liked that. Not only did it make you think about what Ron, Harry and Hermion ego through, it makes you think about your own life a little bit. ARE you brave enough to get to know a new person? Are you brave enough to open your heart? To stand by someone, when you think they could be wrong?

You did very well on your first try for poetry!!

AurorGirl101 of the Knight of the Turnip Table.


Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, AurorGirl. I'm glad you liked the poem, and yeah, the basis was inspired by Harry, Ron, and Hermione, but I left it vague and didn't use any times because I wanted it to apply to ANYTHING, even the real world.

I'm thrilled that you read that into the poem, and thank you once again for the comment.

~Megan

Reviewer: wendelin the wierd
Date: 01/15/07 11:21
Chapter: Are You Brave Enough?

Hey Megan!

Let me start off by saying how much I appreciate your house unity. This short poem really reflects on your house spirit as well as that of the characters. Gryffindor is proud to have a brave lion like you.

I think you captured the mood this challenge was trying to convey perfectly. This whole poem in fact has this questioning sort of air, as if asking the reader ifhe is brave enough and yet you manage to keep it non-aggressive. The words you use although simple are beautifully chosen and help the poem to really flow.

Now I shall proceed to give you line by line critique or rather two lines by two lines critique-

To enter a world that you barely know:
Are you brave enough?


I love the way you describe their entry to Hogwarts. Almost every child goes through this on their first day of school so it really pulls in a reader and helps the reader relate to these lines. Out of the trio I think it describes Harry the best since Ron and Hermione have both been in touch with magic before but Harry has never come in contact with it. Another angle of looking at it is Harry’s entrance to the magical world. Which did you mean? It must have been strange to be suddenly thrust into a new world like that and learn so many new things you have never learnt before.

To make friends with him or her:
Are you brave enough?


I am guessing this is the first time Harry and Ron meet because we know in cannon that Harry and Hermione met much later on. So I am confused who the ‘her’ in ‘him or her’ is? Is it Hermione? On the other hand if you were speaking in general I think that there must be many canon instances where this would fit. On the other hand, the insecurities that come along with making a new friend is really powerful here. Well done!

To face your fears and help a friend:
Are you brave enough?


These are such powerful lines and I can think of so many moments in cannon that are perfectly suited for this. The mountain troll in first year…the fire…Ron and his spiders…the list goes on and on. I really love the rhythmic beat and feel there is to this whole poem. The lines all have a fixed number of syllables in the beginning.

To stand by him in times of doubt:
Are you brave enough?

To stay together through troubled times:
Are you brave enough?

To stay together through troubled times:
Are you brave enough?


Is it just me or do these describe the time in ‘The Chamber of Secrets’ when everyone thinks that Harry is the heir of Slytherin? Anyway, to me this is what truly reflects the Gryffindor spirit. So yes, these lines definitely conveyed the most in the whole poem. It definitely takes courage to stand by someone when they are being humiliated or spoken against. And to take the plunge shows daring and the recklessness that we Gryffies often show and definitely an important quality. I should think that you have included that rather well to capture just the right feel in this poem.


To fight the creatures of fear:
Are you brave enough?


To confront the dark unknown:
Are you brave enough?


These lines did mange to show strong emotions but here the rhythm was off. Maybe if it had the same beat as the rest of the poem? Also, combining the two paragraphs seems like a good idea here. You should get something like this-

To fight the creatures of dark unknown
Are you brave enough?

It holds the same meaning as the above four lines and yet gives rhythm to the poem.

To remain united and together until the end:
Are you brave enough?


What a perfect ending to this lovely poem! It raises the most important question of all, that of unity and undying loyalty.

Overall, I must say that this whole poem was nicely written (even if it could use some improvements in flow) and for a first-time poetry author it was a very good job. Well done!


Author's Response: Hey, Wendelin. First off, thank you for the beginning compliment; I do love this House so much! And secondly, wow, what a lengthy review! Yay!

Thanks so much for all the comments and critiquing, Wendelin. Considering this was my first fan fiction poem, it really helps in lending some insight on how to improve in future endeavours.

I did, purposefully, keep a lot of lines very vague, but you were definitely right in picking up the allusion to the Chamber of Secrets storyline. The entire poem was thought up in thinking about Harry, mostly, and those lines were focussed on the adventures of the trio in CoS.

They rhythm was, actually, entirely unintentional, but I, now, see what you mean in how those few lines don't flow as well as the rest of the poem. I appreciate your pointing it out to me.

And the ending. I'm very glad you liked it, as it's definitely my favourite part of all of this (short) poem. It's an indefinite stretch that can span anything and everything, and really hits on the trio and their feelings in the last two books. (As a matter of fact, those two lines came in before anything else, other than the repetitiveness of "Are you brave enough?")

Once again, thank you so much for the wonderful review. Considering how much I admire your own work, it means a lot.

~Megan

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/15/07 10:35
Chapter: Are You Brave Enough?

Great poem! I love it. The repetition here is perfect. Usually repetition comes across as boring or too repetitive, but here it works well, fluently.

This was your first attempt at fan fiction poetry? It puts me to shame...

This may be short, but it sure isn't sweet....it's deep and provacative.

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

(How can you only have one review?! Just a suggestion: sometimes adding excerpts of the poem into the summary helps - I dunno why, I just heard it somewhere. You should definitely have more reviews for such a great poem.)

Author's Response: Hello, Euphrates. First off, thank you so much for leaving a review for this lonely little poem. (I didn't think about adding some excerpts; that might help.)

I'm very glad that you liked the poem, and yes, it was my first attempt. I'm glad to hear you think it works, especially considering how good your writing is.

Again, thank you.

~Megan

Reviewer: hogwartsduchess
Date: 08/14/06 12:00
Chapter: Are You Brave Enough?

Excellent job! A challenge well met. I think you did an excellent job. I never read poetry fics but you did great!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I've never read any poetry fics, and this is the very first time I even attempted trying to write one. Again, thanks! ~Megan

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