Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 08/13/08 18:21
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

This was beautiful. You're such a talented writer. xD

Author's Response: Thank you!!

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 12/29/07 5:15
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

I forget how I found this story. Through joybelle423, somehow. I am glad to have found it – I wish you could see me smile! I suppose it happened the way my mind wanders, from topic to topic, by association?

In any matter, that’s exactly the opposite of Christian’s thoughts. I liked the very human qualities he had to his thoughts – does Bill appreciate Fleur the exact way hr would have? Doubtful. But he doesn’t appreciate her in unique ways. I did love that, because we do think that about our things. That was a nice touch.

Although, for all the professing he did of Bill only loving her for her looks (or rather, questioning. He was at least noble enough not to assume that about him. Another smile for you), he did concentrate on her hair and her eyes a lot. I would have loved to have seen a little more of her expressions, her tendencies. Perhaps even the moments that detract from beauty, such as bitching and ugly mannerisms. Like picking one’s nose >.> I’m sure, as her best friend, he would have seen that… once or twice? In any case, he does concentrate on her superficial looks more than he does her emotions. Buuuuuuut, you do mention them, so yay! for you.

Did he realize how to tell if she didn’t like something? Her nose would wrinkle in disgust. Oopsies. –swaps ? for ., and deletes .- Hee. It’s like some warped form of punctuation-maths.

“How are you?” She asked in French. This is just a Word typo. I wonder why it does that. In any case, it should be a lowercase s.

“I missed you,” she blurted out. See, Fleur means “flower” in French, right? And I adore Clemence Posey, too, and she’s just… breathtakingly beautiful. Perfect. And yet… fragile? Something about the colour of Fleur’s hair & her doll-like features in the books suggests the strength, and yet fragile quality akin to… silk. Until there’s a loose thread :). And then, even still, it unravels with some sort of elegance, lol. Like throaty demands to Molly in HBP, lol. Blurted seems a little … unladylike of Fleur. And, in keeping with what I said earlier up, perhaps Christian can acknowledge her lack of composure. Sigh. Where’s Real Life Christian when you need him? –snaps fingers for a besotted boy of her own-

But obviously, aside from the nitpicking, I did love it. I loved the devotion. I loved the care he took with describing her, and the obvious pain. I loved the drama, and reference to the Dementor. It is all a bit of a rush that leaves you woozy, isn’t it? A brilliant description, in magic terminology. I kept envisioning the wedding party mixed with DH’s wedding, and I could picture yours. Some cute edits, like Viktor lurking in the background or coming over for a dance would be cute. And, come to think of it, you were almost spot on with the date! Other than that? Nothing else I can add. I really liked reading it :).

Author's Response: Ahhh! Thank you for this review! It was amazing --> really made my day. Thank you for the suggestions, I changed them all, and really loved them! Thanks again!!! :]

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 12/29/07 5:13
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

I forget how I found this story. Through joybelle423, somehow. I am glad to have found it – I wish you could see me smile! I suppose it happened the way my mind wanders, from topic to topic, by association?

In any matter, that’s exactly the opposite of Christian’s thoughts. I liked the very human qualities he had to his thoughts – does Bill appreciate Fleur the exact way hr would have? Doubtful. But he doesn’t appreciate her in unique ways. I did love that, because we do think that about our things. That was a nice touch.

Although, for all the professing he did of Bill only loving her for her looks (or rather, questioning. He was at least noble enough not to assume that about him. Another smile for you), he did concentrate on her hair and her eyes a lot. I would have loved to have seen a little more of her expressions, her tendencies. Perhaps even the moments that detract from beauty, such as bitching and ugly mannerisms. Like picking one’s nose >.> I’m sure, as her best friend, he would have seen that… once or twice?

Author's Response: :]

Reviewer: ashka
Date: 09/01/07 10:10
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

Just beautiful.

P.S. You called Fleur's son TRISTAN!!! I officially love you for that!

Author's Response: Haha, I love the name Tristan! Thank you!

Reviewer: mysticmemories
Date: 06/13/07 17:00
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

aww...I thought that this was going to end in a sad way....but YAY!! all the way to happy endings. Girl, u've made my week! you're an awesome
auther-ess (is that how u say it?) and please, never, ever, EVAH, stop writing!!

Author's Response: :D Thank you!

Reviewer: BloodRayne
Date: 06/09/07 7:04
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

My god. That was beautiful. Stunning. Amazing. You're an amazing writer, Keri.

The way he described his love for Fleur was unimaginable. I didn't think one could talk about love so much and in so many different ways!

I love the way you compare things. That part when you compared the golden snitch to her hair when the sun hits it just right was lovely.

The last part...it almost made me cry. It was just so hopeful and happy, yet at the same time, a bit sad. I like how their children are close, for it is a little ray of hope.

It was simply beautiful, Keri. I could go back and quote all of the lines I absolutely adored, but I would probably highlight the whole story. Christian's love for Fleur shone through. It was clear and beautiful, and I could feel it. I could feel his frustration and sorrow and anger. Simply gorgeous.

-Hadeer

Author's Response: :D Thank you Hadeer! That was a lovely review. *Made my day*

Reviewer: Ritter
Date: 05/17/07 17:34
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

wow, very nice story *Sniff*, it's very true. You really are an excellent writer, keep up the great work.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: greeneyes
Date: 05/17/07 17:27
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

This story was so cute!

Well, for a most of it, it was positively heartbreaking, but the end was lovely!

I think you were very creative to invent this whole character and have him fit in so well with canon. I loved that.

Christian was unimaginably believable. He had all of the right qualities--loyalty, patience, curiousity, friendliness, etc, but I'm glad you gave him some undesirable ones too--slightly insecure, anxious, and a little bit dramatic, but that made the story more exciting.

Great job! You're an awesome writer!!


Author's Response: *hugs* Thank you, Jordan!!!

Reviewer: girl_in_love
Date: 03/21/07 6:38
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

wow!!!i usually don't check out 'other pairing' fics but this was too good to resist!wow again!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 12/22/06 13:41
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

I really like Christian. It was fun to see how he evolved through the story. I'm really glad he learned from his mistakes, and ended up happier with the wife he met later then he would have been with Fluer. It was fun to see how the children interacted and how he learned from his mistakes. Thanks for a great story. I was really crying when Fleur met him at the wedding. That was such a great moment, and probably my favorite of the story. I'm glad that he never forgot Ginny and what he warned her of.

Author's Response: Thank you Cyns! *Grins*

Reviewer: Her_mi_o_ne 16
Date: 10/01/06 14:54
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

I love this story!!!
My favourite line is "I'm glad she didn't wait too long, I thought as I scooped up Catherine with one arm, and wrapped the onther around Elisabeth. I'm glad I didn't wait too long."
VERRRRRRY good.
A+

Author's Response: Thank you! I love that line too!

Reviewer: x_lily_evans_x
Date: 09/27/06 8:25
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

i loved this story! It was nice and flowing, and you protrayed the feelings of your main character brilliantly.

Author's Response: Thank you! :D

Reviewer: tc015
Date: 09/12/06 18:57
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

One word - beautiful. You could really relate to how Christian was feeling. It had a great flow. I loved the ending. The message of the story was perfectly potrayed. Overall, a truly meaningful story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: ginnyp_harryp
Date: 09/09/06 20:43
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

llloved it!
specially the end!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: mightypatronus
Date: 08/17/06 12:25
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

Interesting and very well developed... I like how you brought an OC into the story, and managed to get all of his feelings and hopes down in just one story.

If you ever have a spare moment, take a glance at my story, "Child of the Raven."

Author's Response: Thank you! I will.

Reviewer: LilysLove
Date: 08/13/06 12:27
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

Great job! Thanks so much for letting me help with this story... I LOVE IT! :] You did such an awesome job!
-michelle

Author's Response: Thanks for Beta-ing it! I really enjoyed working with you!!

Reviewer: GWeaz
Date: 08/11/06 12:18
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

Yay! I glad that it is finally up on the site. Excellent job. You really did a wonderful job in expressing his emotinal development throughout the story. Anyway, I just wanted to give you a formal review!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: diary_girl
Date: 08/10/06 17:18
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

aww! That was awesome!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Stormbringer
Date: 08/10/06 9:31
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

I think this story was excellent. Instead of feeling happy for Bill like I do in HBP, I feel angry at him for taking away Christian's happiness/love. I also liked the fact that this story had a moral.

Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :)

Reviewer: 90glassslippers
Date: 08/10/06 0:19
Chapter: Don't Wait Too Long

Awesome!


Author's Response: Thank you!

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