I liked this a lot. The organization of the piece was flawless, as were the motives of each of the tres-Slytherin characters. The ending was perfect.
:D Of course he would be asked to stay! I really like your portrayal of "Slytherin politics"! The hierarchy and traditions make for a great fic, and I enjoyed your portrayal of the various characters and their relationships and places in the hierarchy!
I like it I really like it but more could be addedto it but it's really,really good!!!
hmmmm...I like it!! very interesting!!
Author's Response: Hi, Taylor, Thanks! - SIW
This was really interesting. I loved how you set up the in-house politics. And of course, Sevy was going to win. He's always been the smart one. :D Anyway, I really enjoyed this. You did a great job with it.
Author's Response: Hi, Sly Severus. Well, I'm glad you approved. It was a fun story to write. It's canon that Severus is magically gifted, so of course he's going to win, right? Thanks so much for reading and commenting. - SIW
I quite enjoyed this fic. We are reading fics about certain houses in the Susan Bones' Book Club (SBBC) on the forums, and currently we are reading about Slytherin. And youf fic is up for discussion this week! Congratulations!
I especially liked how you carried on so many characters at once. The heirarchy is completely possible, and how you have all the students of different years playing off each other is very well used.
I espeically liked this line:
Severus remained quiet; he was always watching the dynamics between the pure-bloods to see where their weaknesses lied. Knowledge was power. I felt that was particularily in character for Snape, for the most part he was your best character. Although I'm not sure if he'd be embarassed by the snogging, I see him as standing there and coughing to get their attention or something... but then again, this is 13-year-old Snape... But I just don't see him phased by such things.
I liked the reference to Exploding Snape, that made me laugh. As did Andromada- Was the Hufflepuff Ted Tonks by chance? :)
Lucius seems rather OOC as well, and again, I have to consider that he's a *coughhornycough* teenager, but I don't see him as one that would almost literally beg his girlfriend to kiss him. I see him as being the more dominant one in the relationship, and just... well forcing it.
There was quite a bit of snogging going on all around really. That seemed a bit weird to me, but maybe because we don't see the trio ever having snogfests on the Hogwarts Express. And other than their encounters with Draco... they don't really venture out to check on other people. So the fact that the Slytherins might have an unspoken rule that they get the two carriages at the back (like how the prefects had the carriages at the front) could be very possible. Plus, your fic is Marauder era so maybe those traditions wavered out between times.
A rare smile passed over his lips. He had been asked to stay.
Excellent touch, again, so IN character for Snape. PLUS I love how you've given us a background on how he started creating spells of his own, what spurred him on and how he got access to other texts that would have different informaion than what the standard school texts provided. Excellent work over all.
Author's Response: Thanks, pandafan81. Although I played with the canon ages a bit, I really enjoyed creating the possible Slytherin hierarchy.
To me, Snape would watch the others before committing to anything himself, since he wants to be aligned with those who have true power. I do think Snape would have been embarrassed by walking in on Bellatrix, who was straddling her boyfriend with his hands on her arse. It was a bit more than innocent snogging, and it was completely unexpected.
Lucius complained and pulled Narcissa to him my winding his hand around her long, blonde hair. She may have liked his show of dominance; however, I do think she has/had quite a bit of power over him. She wouldn't want to be caught snogging because it's not very lady-like or proper for a Black -- wizarding royalty. Lucius isn't going to force her to do anything because she won't break up with him.
Slytherin house using the last two carriages might have been how it was done in past eras. In the present, groups of students of the same House could have bordered the train early and laid claim to certain compartments or entire carriages. It is possible Harry doesn’t realise it because he usually gets on later, so we don't see it in canon.
I'm very happy you liked the story, and I appreciate the time it took to write such a detailed comment. Thank you. I'll have to check for the link in the forum. - SIW
This was pretty good, I liked it. This is one of the rare times that I pulled myself out of the Romance section, and I think it was a good idea :D
Author's Response: Hi, Hermione Potter! I know what you mean. Sometimes a gen fic is a nice change to write and to read. Thanks for giving it a try. -SIW
Wow loved the story, sort of a "how I got into the IN crowd".
Author's Response: *laughs* That's an excellent alternative title, ArwenEvenSatr. Thanks for reading. - SIW
hey, i really really liked this. the plot line is simple but so original, and it really fit the slytherins. are you in slytherin house? you probably could be...such an underhanded and secret knowledge of the inner workings....hmmm... sorry. i'm in slytherin house. but, anywho, i loved how snape didn't trust his 'equals', but instead almost spyed on rabastan and regulus so he would stand a better chance of being accepted. yay! and when will you update 'However Far Away'? that's one of my favoritest words. and no, i don't care that that word isn't real.
Author's Response: Hi, totally obsessed. Yes, I'm definitely a Slytherin. *smirks* I'm glad you liked this story. As far as HFA goes, it takes a lot to write a chapter for that story. I'm obsessive about editng, and I can't post it until I feel it's 'right'. I hope it's worth the wait. *hugs* - SIW
Author's Response: Thanks! - SIW