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Name: Rose Nym (Signed) · Date: 02/10/11 18:50 · For: Chapter 1
This is great! One of my favorites of my favorites. Everybody who's read Harry Potter should read this, it's that good. This was chilling in a subtle way, and I enjoy that quality in fiction, especially in short stories. The first time I read this, I could see it as Lucius and Draco, but reading it again I don't think it's them. I've been forced to think very very hard about the Malfoys as I'm writing a fanfic about them, and I think that while being a Death Eater was extremely important to Lucius, he was also not the type to talk about it very much, especially to his son. I think this is about the Notts--I find them pretty interesting and unexplored characters, especially after J.K. Rowling said that Theodore is the son of an elderly widowed Death Eater. I picture them as being if possible, more serious and snotty than the Malfoys, but less ostentatious. Thanks for a thought-provoking story!

Author's Response: You think someone is more snotty than the Malfoys! Wow, that's pretty impressive. Thanks for the very kind review. :)

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 07/15/08 18:07 · For: Chapter 1
I think I've already read this quite a while ago, it's very well written, we see the other side of the coin as it were. I wondered about how all the children would know Harry's name, but also, how did they all know what he looked like that first day in Diagon Aleey and on the Hogwarts Express? I mean his hair often hid his scar so how did everyone know him? I still haven't worked out the answer to that one. Anyway, another great fic.

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Name: ravenclawslostdiadem (Signed) · Date: 05/30/08 20:39 · For: Chapter 1

Author's Response: Thank you.

Name: sayiansirius (Signed) · Date: 11/17/07 16:08 · For: Chapter 1
Your summary drew me to this story and I enjoyed it very much. I found it odd that Death Eaters would really tell their children the story about how the Dark Lord was destroyed; and even more oddly: the child is willing to listen over and over! Quit interesting indeed and it made a great story.

I think another thing that this story enjoyable is that even though it’s meant to be “dark”, like a father telling his son a terrible story, there’s still that connection between father and son. It’s sweet to see a father telling their child a bedtime story…even if it is about the Dark Lord. :] I love that you kept that connection through the story and even increased it by the kiss on the forehead. You did a very excellent job on that. Usually when we think of Death Eater and son, we think the father doesn’t care much about their son; they just want them follow in their footsteps and serve the Dark Lord.

It was lead by a very crazy old wizard, Albus Dumbledore.

I think this is a very funny line. I can really imagine one of them flinching at the name Dumbledore and getting a tad angry. In addition, now the little child will grow up thinking Dumbledore was a crazy old wizard and will enter Hogwarts with that thought.

*imagines young Draco playing with Death Eater’s children at the playground and them talking about ‘crazy old Dumbledore’*

Very nice addition.

I also find it rather comical that the father uses large words such as “eluded” and the Fidelius Charm. Poor child must be staring at him with wide eyes, not knowing what all the blabberjabber means.

Overall, excellent job, Elle. Comical and fluffy, but with a hint of mystery.

Author's Response: Thanks, KC. :D

Name: smilesand (Signed) · Date: 09/11/07 6:14 · For: Chapter 1
Wow.Very good!I luff it!

Author's Response: Thank you.

Name: tatjanablack (Signed) · Date: 07/15/07 7:46 · For: Chapter 1
Once agian I enjoyed reading it. I have not read this story before, and today I thought I should. I must say this was a very orginal story and idea.. I have not read that kind of story before. ^^

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Name: Ron x Hermione (Signed) · Date: 07/10/07 20:57 · For: Chapter 1
Elle, amazing work. The thing that drew me to this story out of your amazing list was this summary--- when you said evil Harry Potter, it just seemed interesting.

“It’s not a good story, my son. We lost.”

“But he’ll be back, and next time, we’ll win.”

I love this. I like how you tell the story while the characters are speaking--- it's a very good start to the story, and I adore it. I admire how you allowed the Death Eater to tell the story; even though they lost, I like how you still took the bold move to allow a 'dark' side to tell the story. Also, the way you've created your own final battle/ending to what really happened to the Dark Lord and Harry all those years ago. Very good work, especially by the way the father has told it--- you didn't use the characters or any words, just his telling/story of it. I like how he threw in his own advice and points of view into the story.

Why would wizards chose to live in fear of something that is lesser than them when they could simply dispose of it?

I thin that, here, you need 'choose' instead of 'chose'.

. . . Harry Potter, born the James and Lily Potter . . .

I think that instead of 'the' you need 'to'.

No one knows who it was, but it was he who led our master to the evil child, and its disrespectful parents.

I love this. The way you created this illusion between the child and his storyteller was brilliant--- especially how we, the readers, know who that was. Good work.

“And on that day, I will be the proudest father in the world.”

Aw, what a sweet ending! I really enjoyed this story--- it was short and sweet. That's really good to see that nice moment between the two.

I like the illusion you've created between the two characters. Who were they? They could have been anyone from two nameless OCs to Lucius and Draco. To see Lucius and Draco getting along for once is nice, even if he, Draco, is young. I love it when a reader is left with a cliffhanger or confused.

Good work, Elle. Very enjoyable plot.

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review, SPEW buddy. I'm glad you enjoyed this. I was just hit with idea watching The Philospher's Stone. McGonagall said every child in the wizarding world would know his name. I started thinking about what Death Eater's would have to say on the topic.

Thanks for pointing out the errors, I'll try to get those fixed up soon.

Again, thanks so much for the review, Lindsey!

Name: miss_potter_obsessed (Signed) · Date: 07/09/07 10:13 · For: Chapter 1
It's great!! Great ideas, great writing!! It's just amazing!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Name: XhayleeXblackX (Signed) · Date: 07/05/07 18:21 · For: Chapter 1
I really liked this. It was creative, and I could understand the way he told the story. Good Job.

Author's Response: Thanks for another lovely review! *huggles*

Name: MJ_Padfoot (Signed) · Date: 06/29/07 16:20 · For: Chapter 1
Wow! This is just breath taking. I love it! I began reading it and I was literally sucked into it. ~MJ

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Name: R_Ravenclaw (Signed) · Date: 05/19/07 13:31 · For: Chapter 1
wow that was really good. It kind of makes you see things from the other side. I think this probably would have been how the Death Eaters would have 'educated' their children. Very well written, and good job.

Author's Response: Thanks so much. It was inspired by the PS movie, when McGongall said every child in their world would know Harry's name. I wondered how the children of Death Eaters would feel about him, so this story was born.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the review!

Name: VeniaTaint (Signed) · Date: 01/16/07 7:45 · For: Chapter 1
YAY! This story demonstrates fairly well what 'the other side' seels about 'Potter'...it was fairly well written, though not as in depth or as elegant as your other fics. Still quite good though! Ohh, before I forget, I've got another fic up (it's a song fic) and I think you'd really appreciate it for what litle it's worth...if you could take a lokk and review, I'd really appreciate!
~the Tainted One
I think you could really expand on this, maybe by doing this same storyline from the point of iew of all our Slytherin favorites: the first time each snake came to hear the name Harry Potter, and thier opinions on the matter before they were prejiduce...I think it might be interesting for you to try.

Author's Response: Thanks for for the review.

Hmmm...it might be interesting to explore the Slytherins as they first learn about Harry Potter and the Dark Lord. We know how most of the Gryfindors reacted. *contemplates*

Name: Hedwig with a quill (Signed) · Date: 11/28/06 17:51 · For: Chapter 1

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Name: LovelyxLena (Anonymous) · Date: 11/10/06 17:00 · For: Chapter 1
Oh you never even mentioned the Malfoy's in this did you? I just envisioned it that way.. Haha

Author's Response: Actually, I wasn't thinking of the Malfoys at all when I wrote this, although most people take it as them. I don't see Lucius telling Draco this story when he was that young. I never envisioned Draco as knowing much about the Dark Lord until he was nine or ten and he had to told things before he started Hogwarts. I mean, I'm sure he was told that he was a pureblood and better than everyone else since birth, but I really don't believe the Dark Lord came into play until later. That's just my take on it. I was thinking to the Notts when I wrote this.

But it really doesn't matter. Everyone is free to think of this as any DE father and son they like, including the Malfoys. That's why I didn't name the characters.

Anyway, I'm really glad that you liked it.

Name: LovelyxLena (Anonymous) · Date: 11/10/06 16:58 · For: Chapter 1
Wow, this was great. I love how you got all the facts straight intead of trying to add more for excitement or entertainment. Also the way you have ferret boy talk about Voldie and the way he acts after he is told the story.. Ahh it's all great!

Author's Response: :D Glad you liked it.

Name: HeRmYgInS (Signed) · Date: 11/07/06 21:10 · For: Chapter 1
OMG that was truly genius

Author's Response: *takes bow* Thank you, Thank you.

Seriously, thank you for the review. It's always nice to hear that someone likes my work. :D

Name: Bane of Severus (Signed) · Date: 11/03/06 15:51 · For: Chapter 1
I really liked it, good job. It's all perspective. that is one of the most important things to make a story work.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yep, the whole story is about perspective. I think it's important to look at things from the DEs perspective. It's not something we've ever seen in the books.

Thanks again for the review!

Name: some_kinda_superstar (Signed) · Date: 10/30/06 2:32 · For: Chapter 1
I loved it. This is the first story I have ever come across that described the war from the Death Eaters' POV. Brilliantly written, well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and I'm glad that you liked it. I think there should be more stories from the Death Eater's POV. I really don't think they're that bad. They're just on the opposite side of a war, which makes them all appear far worse than they really are. At least, that's my opinion. Thanks again for the review! :D

Name: TheMadMugggle (Signed) · Date: 10/29/06 19:31 · For: Chapter 1
Original Idea and well written. I hope you write many more.

Author's Response: See below. :D

Name: TheMadMugggle (Signed) · Date: 10/29/06 19:31 · For: Chapter 1
Original Idea and well written. I hope you write many more.

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. I was really very pleased with myself when I thought this one up. I had never read anything like it either. Thanks so much for the review! :D

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