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Name: Raven Pendragon (Signed) · Date: 11/12/06 14:46 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope you liked it :o)

Name: emoprincess26 (Anonymous) · Date: 08/22/06 23:51 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
I read this story just a little while ago, and then I had gone to find PILLOW FIGHT! because MuggleMunkey recommended it...and here I find that it's the same author! I can't believe I didn't connect the dots! But it was an excellent story. I've only just started reading Hermione/Snape stories, but this one was so sad!!!!


Author's Response: Oh I'm so glad you liked this story! Thank you for your kind words! And how sweet of MuggleMunkey to recommend me! I like Hermione and Snape together (when she's an ADULT definitely) and she's the only one I trust with him!! I think they need eachother, even though they are both incredibly stubborn!!!! Thanks so much for reviewing!

Name: iristigerlily (Signed) · Date: 08/16/06 23:56 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
Well done, and a good (if bitter) ending :)

Author's Response: So glad you liked it! xxxxx

Name: Fading (Signed) · Date: 08/16/06 16:31 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
So powerful! I love:

And yet she had held tightly, her delicate fingers locking around his wrist, ignoring the pleading look in his eyes. Her gaze had held his for a long moment, and then she raised his arm and slowly but firmly pressed her lips to the mark.

A chilling, sad ending as well. I loved it!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it!! I'm so thrilled you liked the part where Hermione kissed Severus' arm. I think that's the only way in which she could have got through to him that she forgives his past (I don't think he would have believed it if she just told him). Thank you so much for reviewing! xxxxxxxx

Name: Shriekingshack (Signed) · Date: 08/15/06 20:42 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
that was soooo sad! *sob*
i am the biggest serveus snape fan you will EVER meet and that story was wonderful. thank you so much!
sequel?? PLEASE???

Author's Response: Oh I'm so glad you liked it!! I love Snape too, he's so misunderstood! I wrote this to give myself a breather from my series which I started writing, which is called 'Peppermint' and is also a Severus Hermione fic. It will have 5 chapters, and I've got a couple still to complete. I abandoned it for a while, but I'll get it going again, and hopefully I can get it finished soon! I hope you'll enjoy it!!! Thank you so much for your kind words!! =) xxxxxx

Name: weasleychick92 (Signed) · Date: 08/14/06 20:31 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
Ahhh!!!! No happy endings! Usually, I hate Hermione/Snape pairings, but this was well done. I feel sorry for the old git.

Author's Response: I feel sorry for him too! I actually hate sad endings - they make me so upset! But when I wrote this, I couldn't picture them getting back together. Not to worry, I think Snape went on to marry an airhostess and now has seventeen children.

Name: Lendou (Signed) · Date: 08/14/06 16:55 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
ah come on. Let that greasy Snape at least let Hermionne give him some hair cleansing tips. Get them back together.

Author's Response: Unfortunately Hermione has relocated to the Costa-del-something-or-other in Spain, and has, as yet, no intention of returning. Don't worry though, Buckbeak's looking after her.

Name: RedheadedWeasley (Signed) · Date: 08/14/06 15:26 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
Well phooey . . . something happened to all of my nice words . . . oh well, here I go again. I'll just start from where the other one leaves off.

How dare she speak to him in such a way? How DARE she….

As odd as this is going to sound, this line is almost an over reaction for Severus. I know, I can't believe I just said that either! I imagine him as being more surprised than anything at the way Hermione is speaking to him. While I am sure that she has quite candid with him since they seemed to have had some sort of relationship going on, I doubt she ever crossed the line and screamed uncontrollably at him.

‘Who am I kidding?’

This sentence seems a little too informal for Severus. His speech is typically more formal than most and I think that is one of the reasons he can be such a hard character to write. I can imagine him saying this if he is utterly and completely downtrodden (which we find out later that he is) but at the same time, it is still a little too common for Severus.

Rereading the last lines again makes my heart break all over for our poor Potions Master. You really did a splendid job in expressing the emotions of an emotionalless man. And I think I just made up my own word there.

Author's Response: Hehee! I'm glad you enjoyed my reply =), and my correspondence with Hermione was actually the first time that I've owled a message before. I don't recommend it though - the bloody bird's beak nearly ripped my fingers to pieces.
You're completely right, Hermione has never crossed the line or screamed at Severus before, which is why she 'gasped at her own rudeness/ was afraid to look at him' etc. So I think she's really taking a big risk by flaring up like this. I think it's her way of showing just how much this means to her, if she's willing to put everything on the line like that.
It's interesting that you commented on the ''Who am I kidding?' line. When I was writing the story, I was at one point going to change his words to 'What am I trying to prove?' or something much more formal, because I thought that this would sound much more like the type of thing that Severus would say.
The reason I kept it so informal was because I think that this is the exact point in the story at which Severus 'breaks down' if you like (but not in a dramatic, all-over-the-place kind of way). He isn't Severus anymore, and there isn't a barrier between what's inside his heart and what's inside his head. So that's why I purposely kept that wording. Also, and this is probably a bad thing, I'd grown quite accustomed to the words so I just got used to them and didn't look at them objectively.
But now, reading it again, I see exactly what you mean, and I can see how you would think 'Severus would never say that!' What's more, now I think about it, 'kidding' probably isn't even in his vocabulary! So how can a word that I've just shoved in his mouth, and that he probably doesn't even know exists, express what he's feeling?! Ah me, I think it's just bad judgement on my part.
Oh my god, does all that just sound like arty-farty nonsense? Hehehehee!! I hope there's some sense in there somewhere! (Men in white coats approaching)
And if that hasn't bored you to tears, let me tell you about my childhood....

Hehehee! Thank you so much for taking the time to reply back, I really appreciate it! And don't be silly - of course emotionalless is a word. Peeves just told me.
So it must be true.
Only, he said that there's a 'z' in there somewhere.

Name: RedheadedWeasley (Signed) · Date: 08/14/06 15:19 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
First, I have to say, that is the best author response I have ever read! Absolutely brilliant. I must go read your other Severus/Hermione story. They are my most favorite OTP. So much in fact that I am writing my own story about them, so, I realize what a struggle it can be to keep our wonderful Potions Master completely IC. My story is entirely from his POV as well *sigh*

As I said in my previous review, there were really only a few small things that caught my eye and made me wonder.

"How dare she speak to him in such a way? How DARE she…"

Name: HermionePotter (Signed) · Date: 08/14/06 11:41 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
Amazing... so... depressing. I imagine this in a flat in Hogsmead, though the reason why escapes me. Severus lost her... for good this time...

Author's Response: Yes =) I can totally see them in a flat, with him storming out and then realising too late that he wants to be with her. It's funny, I hate it when stories have a sad ending because it makes me upset! But when I wrote this, I thought that it would probably be a better ending this way! xxxxx

Name: RedheadedWeasley (Signed) · Date: 08/14/06 11:02 · For: If You Walk Out of that Door
This was really well done. You managed to give us an entire backstory in a short one-shot. That is hard to do and you did it beautifully. There is one plot point that I'm a little confused on. At the beginning of the story you say they are on the top of a bell tower. I am assuming that the tower only has one way up it. Most towers are too narrow to allow for two staircases. Severus was on the stairway when he was realizing how much he loved her, so we knew that Hermione didn't go down the stairs. I am also assuming that they are at Hogwarts, so we know that Hermione couldn't Apparate off the tower. So, my question is, where did Hermione go?

I absolutely loved the idea of Hermione forcing Severus to allow her to look at the Dark Mark on his forearm. That was a great idea and wonderfully written. Its one of those things that you read in someone elses story and say to yourself, 'now why didn't I think of that?' I must also commend you for keeping Severus mostly IC. There were a few lines that I was iffy on, but the emotions were perfect for him. You did a very good job on this story and while I hate the ending I love it at the same time! It makes your story different and very angsty and it's great! Good job!

Author's Response: You're so so kind! I'm really thrilled that you liked it =) I actually started this story to give me a breather from 'Peppermint', another HermioneSeverus fic that I was in the middle of writing at the time. I still haven't finished it...but I've completed and posted 6 other stories (mostly HarryDraco) in the meantime! I should really return to Peppermint at some point. Thanks so much for your 'Where on earth did Hermione go?!' comment. You know, to be completely honest, I had no idea whatsoever!! So I took the liberty of owling the lady in question and she had a very interesting explanation. Apparently, right after Severus left, she walked to the window to spend a few moments contemplating the situation, when Buckbeak flew right past! I mean, what are the chances of that?? So she told him everything that had just happened (it turns out that Buckbeak is fluent in English - the only reason he hasn't spoken in any of the Harry Potter books is because he was suffering from a rather nasty bout of laryngitis) and the hippogriff told her to forget the ungrateful Potions Master and come to Spain. So she jumped on his back and they soared away. Well fancy that! And here I was thinking that she's pining away in a derelict house somewhere. Hmmph. Some people. Not even a postcard. Hope that clears up your query! Thank you so much for your kind words, I'm so glad you liked my story! I would really love to hear which sentences you thought were iffy, because I really try hard to keep Snape especially in character. Sometimes when I read my stories over and over I can't really criticise it objectively, so I'd LOVE to hear which bits you thought didn't sit very well. Dear me, you must be in a coma after that lengthy explanation! I'll send Madame Pomfrey round ;o) heheheheeee xxxxxx

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