NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOo!!!!!!!!!!!! The suspense is killing me! GReat cliff! Keep up this great writing and update soon pleaz!
-chrissy
Love it, Love it, LOVE IT!!!!! keep writing!!!
"love the cliffy" said dripping with sarcasom
r u kidding me? no more? i hate cliff hangerss!!!
well anyways amazing story!!!!!
Good story! I love it so far, write some more! Quick!
I just finished reading ur story! I luv it! Very evil ending, I hope no one dies, I won't be able to take it! lol It's also romantic of course. Update soon!
gggggggrrrrrrr evil cliffe! COME ON, I'm dying here!
ahhhhhh need to read more!!! thanx for putting me in your authors note! ;)
It feels like there's a chapter missing here that explains how Harry wound up at the graveyard. And Voldemort spends way too much time explaining himself. This slows down the really strong lead-up you had coming into this chapter.
Very nice! Hermione falls for the kind of trap that usually gets Harry - a very clever twist. And who among us ever really trusted Viktor Krum? Well done!
Nice ensemble piece - you capture the feel of these four old friends hanging out together quite well. I especially like how you handled Ron: Grown up, but still a bit spastic. :) I didn't really buy Harry's declaration of love, though - it's just too abrupt, and you don't give us enough insight into how he arrives at this conclusion. All in all, though, a good chapter.
A. Harry would never turn down a request for help from Hermione. B. Hermione would never (at least not as of book 6) say someone "didn't have the balls" to do something. This chapter strains the limits of credulity. The ring is a nice touch, though, and helps make sense of your mention of French in the first chapter.
Have you seen "When Harry Met Sally"? You're probably too young, but this scene has a lot in common with the one where Sally cries on Harry's shoulder after her ex gets engaged. Still lots of proofreading mistakes ("a sleep" instead of "asleep"), but your dialogue captures Harry and Hermione's voices well. Since dialogue is always harder to write than narration, that's a pretty good accomplishment.
Okay, pretty interesting. So Viktor's back on the scene, eh? Interested to see what you'll do with that. BTW, it's "announced" not "enounced".
