Reviewer: Mudblood428
Date: 12/04/05 15:57
Chapter: Chapter 5

Hey! Finally getting a chance to pop over and review! Okay, first off, I'm in love with Oliver Wood, so you get an automatic 10 for bringing him back ;). I also think love-struck!Ron and Affectionate!Harry are wonderful. You really have a novel idea for a story here - sports narrative with romance! On the side of constructive criticism, draw out your transitions a little bit more - we've been jumping from one scene to the next at a fairly quick pace, which works wonderfully with Quidditch, but doesn't give us enough time to identify with Ron and his feelings for hermione. Teeny tiny critiques aside, you have a great talent for writing and I look forward to chapter 6! Keep it up!!

Reviewer: Jenn_Weasley
Date: 08/31/05 11:43
Chapter: Chapter 5

OK - that's my favorite chapter so far. Go Gryffidor!!!!! You've got my two favorite ships in early - very good! I'm enjoying your story and will be waiting for the next chapter. Thanks!

Reviewer: Jenn_Weasley
Date: 08/31/05 11:40
Chapter: Chapter 4

Harry is such a sweetie. I agree with one of your previous reviewers. Combining chapters to make them longer would be good. I enjoy your writing and would love to read more each time. Good job!

Reviewer: Jenn_Weasley
Date: 08/31/05 11:32
Chapter: Chapter 3

Poor Ginny! My leg hurts just thinking about it. You were original to let Ginny get hurt and not saved by Harry (even though he gave a great effort). Thanks!

Reviewer: Jenn_Weasley
Date: 08/31/05 11:27
Chapter: Chapter 2

Yay Oliver!! I love him! I'm glad you put him in your story. Onto Chap 3...

Reviewer: Jenn_Weasley
Date: 08/31/05 11:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

Nice first chapter. I liked the dialogue - it seemed very genuine. Off to read the next chapter!

Reviewer: Sakula
Date: 01/06/05 18:50
Chapter: Chapter 5

I really like this story! Good Job! I love how Oliver came back for a while!

Reviewer: x0brassybabii
Date: 12/28/04 11:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

Good story. Has great potential. I think someone already said it but Harry, Ron, and Oliver are all in character really well. Keep updating!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot. Chapter four is up!

Reviewer: Loki MM
Date: 12/11/04 14:02
Chapter: Chapter 2

Another good chapter, if they are a bit short and could probably be combined. All in all, though excellent --- Harry,Ron, and Oliver are all in character. Though, you spelled "purple" "purplr" once. Otherwise, however, I can't offer too much criticism! Cheers!

Author's Response: thanks, glad you like it! Yes, the chapters are a bit short, but so is the story. But I thought it was a little too long to make it a one-shot.

Reviewer: Loki MM
Date: 12/11/04 13:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

All in all, a very good chapter one. Good discription, good characterization, and some action --- very good. Um, there is one small matter you should know about, however -- Lee was in Fred and George's year. ANd I hate to be nitpicky but you have a "him team" where it should be"his team". Other than that,a story with good potential and an excellent start! PS Thanks for reviewing Confessions! Cheers!

Author's Response: thanks! Also, I realized the Lee thing after I submitted, but then I thought, well, JKR never actually said Lee was in their year, I don't think (sorry if I'm wrong). They could have been friends with someone from a lower year. :)

Reviewer: The_Immortal_Trumpet
Date: 12/10/04 17:18
Chapter: Chapter 2

This story looks like it has a lot of potential. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks, it's great to hear I'm doing well!

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