Hey! Finally getting a chance to pop over and review! Okay, first off, I'm in love with Oliver Wood, so you get an automatic 10 for bringing him back ;). I also think love-struck!Ron and Affectionate!Harry are wonderful. You really have a novel idea for a story here - sports narrative with romance! On the side of constructive criticism, draw out your transitions a little bit more - we've been jumping from one scene to the next at a fairly quick pace, which works wonderfully with Quidditch, but doesn't give us enough time to identify with Ron and his feelings for hermione. Teeny tiny critiques aside, you have a great talent for writing and I look forward to chapter 6! Keep it up!!
OK - that's my favorite chapter so far. Go Gryffidor!!!!! You've got my two favorite ships in early - very good! I'm enjoying your story and will be waiting for the next chapter. Thanks!
Harry is such a sweetie. I agree with one of your previous reviewers. Combining chapters to make them longer would be good. I enjoy your writing and would love to read more each time. Good job!
Poor Ginny! My leg hurts just thinking about it. You were original to let Ginny get hurt and not saved by Harry (even though he gave a great effort). Thanks!
Yay Oliver!! I love him! I'm glad you put him in your story. Onto Chap 3...
Nice first chapter. I liked the dialogue - it seemed very genuine. Off to read the next chapter!
I really like this story! Good Job! I love how Oliver came back for a while!
Good story. Has great potential. I think someone already said it but Harry, Ron, and Oliver are all in character really well. Keep updating!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot. Chapter four is up!
Another good chapter, if they are a bit short and could probably be combined. All in all, though excellent --- Harry,Ron, and Oliver are all in character. Though, you spelled "purple" "purplr" once. Otherwise, however, I can't offer too much criticism! Cheers!
Author's Response: thanks, glad you like it! Yes, the chapters are a bit short, but so is the story. But I thought it was a little too long to make it a one-shot.
All in all, a very good chapter one. Good discription, good characterization, and some action --- very good. Um, there is one small matter you should know about, however -- Lee was in Fred and George's year. ANd I hate to be nitpicky but you have a "him team" where it should be"his team". Other than that,a story with good potential and an excellent start! PS Thanks for reviewing Confessions! Cheers!
Author's Response: thanks! Also, I realized the Lee thing after I submitted, but then I thought, well, JKR never actually said Lee was in their year, I don't think (sorry if I'm wrong). They could have been friends with someone from a lower year. :)
This story looks like it has a lot of potential. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks, it's great to hear I'm doing well!
