Reviews For The Morning Breaks
Reviewer: tc015
Date: 04/27/08 21:12
Chapter: Mists of the Future

This was very interesting. I love how you described the way the prophecies are recorded.

Where did you get the idea for Stonehenge being the Hall of Prophecies? It's cool that you took a famous Muggle landmark and gave it significance in the Wizarding World. I'd like to hear more about that.

It's interesting that he needs to summon the spirit into the orbs. I always thought that the spirits just arrived in orbs; it's interesting that you need to put them in the orbs. I wonder why the spirits would only come in the morning though. Maybe most prophecies are made then or during the night.

I love how Henry has to go through the wardrobe to get to the place to transport the orbs. It reminds me of Narnia, when they went through the closet to get Narnia. Narnia is a magical land, and that room is where the prophecies go the Department of Mysteries, another strange and magical place. The magical chest that Henry puts in the orbs in reminds me of the Vanishing Cabinet for some reason.

Overall, this fic was very interesting. The Hall of Prophecies is such an interesting place, and I liked reading about it.

~ Teresa

Reviewer: LadyAlesha
Date: 08/18/06 15:55
Chapter: Mists of the Future

Hey Mar! *huggles* I’ve been sitting in front of an empty screen for nearly ten minutes now… Badger chats are really distracting, but I promised you a review and I will finish it!

I love your story. It’s certainly different, but I especially like the quiet uneventfulness of it. The whole story has a tranquility about it that makes it even more beautiful. It’s just a normal day for Henry and Isabelle and you show that in your story. And while I’m on the subject, I absolutely adore Henry as a character. Even though your story is quite short he seems interesting and you show quite a few facettes of his character.

The job of the Gatherer is a lovely idea. I can just imagine all those imprints of different seers hovering over Stonehenge waiting to be collected. It’s a nice thought that there’s enough magic in Stonehenge to draw the imprints to it, it’s the perfect place for the prophecies to be collected. The only thing I would have liked to know about the job of the Gatherer that you didn’t tell us was how a wizard gets the job. Are they selected? Do they have to apply for it? I’m not sure how you could have incorporated that into the story, but I would have liked to know it.

Henry sleepily rubbed the head of the Snidget, eliciting a small coo from the bird and letting the bird know that Henry was getting up. The use of the same word this close together makes the sentence slightly awkward to read, maybe you could just put ‘it’ instead of ‘the bird’ the second time you use it?

You did a good job creating the position of the Gatherer and what life is like for them. I loved this little insight you gave us into the life of Henry and Isabelle, they are both interesting characters that I would really like to see again.

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 08/01/06 7:01
Chapter: Mists of the Future

Hello, Mar! Another great addition to your collection you’ve got going here. Nothing really to pick about in particular; it flowed really well. You set the scene early in the one-shot, with the mention of the Snidget. I also liked the mention of Stonehenge, it again drew the story into the past and gave it more of that Magical air. Most people know about Stonehenge, and some of its history, so that’s a great point.

I didn’t really, as I said before, have any big nit picks, just one small thing. “That Unspeakable would then pull the memory of the prophecies out of his mind and deposit it into one of the largest pensieves in the world, to be forgotten and lost. Unless someone dared brave the dangers of a sea full of prophecies. ” The first sentence if quite long, and the second sentences appears to have just been cut off from the first one, as if you’ve tried to make the one long sentence into two. I’m not sure how to fix it myself, I’ll leave that up to you and your beta. Another petty pick, this time British Style – In your summary, you’ve spelt ‘realise’ the American way :). My favourite line of this would have to be “Only three wizards in the world had the knowledge and power to be able to navigate those seas. ” It adds mystery to the fic, and leaves me wondering – Who? Great Fic! ♥

Reviewer: Trozzle
Date: 08/01/06 4:14
Chapter: Mists of the Future

Wow!I've always wondered about prophesies, they seem so mysterious.It was very interesting to read about how they go to stonehenge to be collected. Please write a sequel, because I want to find out more about prophesies!

Reviewer: Nymfadora_Lupin
Date: 08/01/06 4:10
Chapter: Mists of the Future

Another wonderfull story from you!!!! The three wizards are Dumbledore, Voldemort, and..... right?

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