Reviews For Thrice Defied
Reviewer: MarauderWannabe
Date: 08/17/06 12:28
Chapter: Chapter 2-One in a Million

OMG! I love the passwords! I really want to know more about the Firewhiskey incident, anyway is Luna going to be related to Luna Lovegood? Anyway UPDATE soon! Pretty please with sugar on top?

Author's Response: i guess i should tell you all! well, yes my luna is related to harry's luna! very closely! in fact you'll get to see how close in the last chapter of my story- which is a little while from now! you lovedthe passwords? yay! firewhiskei will be in a few chapters-and you'll love! thanks for the fab review!

Reviewer: LillysOfTheValley
Date: 08/11/06 12:49
Chapter: Chapter 1-Aboard the Hogwarts Express

Hey! This really is a brilliant story! YAY! I love it!

THis line was simply HILARIOUS and PHENOMENAL!


The four Marauders walked down the crowded corridor, occasionally hexing a Slytherin (James), chatting up a girl (Sirius), reciting incantations (Remus) or giggling uncontrollably for no obvious reason (guess!). A few doors from the empty compartment theyd unofficially declared their own, James stopped abruptly in front of an extremely pretty (and extremely annoyed) red-haired girl.

I was rolling all over the chair laughing like a loony bin in a playplace or something! I love it! UPDATE SOON!

Author's Response: Hey thanks ever so much! if you love my story as much as i love yours then yay! and did you really laugh like that? again yay! update will come soon! very soon!

Reviewer: LillysOfTheValley
Date: 08/11/06 12:49
Chapter: Chapter 1-Aboard the Hogwarts Express

Hey! This really is a brilliant story! YAY! I love it!

THis line was simply HILARIOUS and PHENOMENAL!


The four Marauders walked down the crowded corridor, occasionally hexing a Slytherin (James), chatting up a girl (Sirius), reciting incantations (Remus) or giggling uncontrollably for no obvious reason (guess!). A few doors from the empty compartment theyd unofficially declared their own, James stopped abruptly in front of an extremely pretty (and extremely annoyed) red-haired girl.

I was rolling all over the chair laughing like a loony bin in a playplace or something! I love it! UPDATE SOON!

Reviewer: sweet_harry
Date: 08/07/06 13:47
Chapter: Chapter 1-Aboard the Hogwarts Express

wow. lily's violent . TIGHT!

Author's Response: hello and thanks sweet_harry! i wouldn't call her violent personally but i s'pose you could say that! just wait for the next chapters!

Reviewer: MarauderWannabe
Date: 08/07/06 12:25
Chapter: Chapter 1-Aboard the Hogwarts Express

I love the beginning part where they forget Peter! It is so typical Marauder. Still wondering how Peter was one..... Also love James checking out Narcissa in front of Lily. Wonder what would have happened if James married her instead of Lily....DUN DUN DUN Draco Potter. Sorry got off topic anyway AMAZING fic!!

Author's Response: thank you soooooo much! that's my favourite too! update soon! read the next one which is really funny too!

Reviewer: RupertsPheonix
Date: 08/07/06 7:49
Chapter: Chapter 1-Aboard the Hogwarts Express

A flashback would be great, I love reading and writing them! Just please make sure to do it (the flashback) in italics, as that's the proper way and a lot of authors forget that... Anyways, this was a great first chapter! There's a lot of promise here! Update soon!! =) --RP

Author's Response:

Author's Response: thank you! update will come soon and the flashback (in italics!) will come in later chapters( please read it)! any part you liked best? just to know? thanks again, lots, lots,lots!

Reviewer: WeasleyChick32
Date: 08/06/06 22:23
Chapter: Chapter 1-Aboard the Hogwarts Express

lol love your story!!!


Author's Response: Weasly chick32! my second review! whoo hooo! love my story?thank you! second chapter up soon!

Reviewer: Fly to Dawn
Date: 08/06/06 20:22
Chapter: Chapter 1-Aboard the Hogwarts Express

It's been ages since I've read a Lily/James story, but this was quite good. It had a lovely touch of the Marauders, and I liked the way you wrote Sirius.

A few nit-picks:
"What are we gonna do now?
"Gonna" might be too American, and also remember that Lily and James lived a few decaded ago..and Americanisms weren't so popular then!
Overall the dialogue seems quite American...but nothing too severe.
I'm not an expert on James Bond, but I was wondering if the movie existed in 1967/1968. Does it? (I'm a bit curious)
Also, Narcissa is five years older than Sirius, and I'm assuming that (Lucius) Malfoy is the same age as Narcissa, or older.
The Peter incident was a nice touch of humour, but to remind you, Peter wasn't just a wimp who tagged behind the main three Marauders...so I'm hoping he gets more action soon. (It's a cliche that most L/J authors wade into, so I think you'd want to avoid that)

Lily took a deep breath. James was pleased to see how easily he got on her nerves. Someday shed see how that was the foundation of a healthy relationship. Hopefully.
This was my favourite line throughout this chapter - I think it portrays Lily and James' relationship nicely.

Well done!

Author's Response: Hey! you're my first ever review! thanks ever so much! so anyway i can assure you that i'm 100% english and english kids use gonna all the time! now i wasn't born in 1967 so i can't offer an opinion but try to imagine the story is slightly more modern. james bond, well, i just thought it would be funny! and itmight have been there at the time! narcissa is a minor character in this story-james uses her as a way to get back at lily! peter is a slight wimp in the story but he gets some action don't worry-especially in the end! thank you so much and keep on reviewing!

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