Eeep, you finally updated! You've made my day!!
So...it isn't Ron? Or has he dyed his hair? Hmm... The plot thickens. I'm curious to see where this story is going!
And what about Harry? Gone? My life is over! =(
Please update soon, you are such a fabulous writer I can't even try to describe how much I like your writing! It makes me feel all happy! =D Can't wait 'til next chapter!
Omg Thats great :D I wanna find out who they are... but i got a hunch!
How can you even think of not continuing with this story?! It's the best!!
I had a feeling it was Ron... wow, a policeman?? It kind of fits him though, if he'd choose to pursue a muggle career. Anyway, I liked the characterization of him, three years after he was rejected, I felt so sorry for him! =(
And I just have to say, your song... it was beautiful. The lyrics were so good, so Hermione, and you could really see how she feels inside. If only this were a movie, and you could actually hear Hermione singing!
This chapter was so great, even though it was short! PLEASE continue with this fic, please! =)
Keep writing or not?? DEFINITLY!! I am enjoying this, and VERY curious to see where its going! Keep on writing.
Very slow start - It could use rework to better tie into an ending. I'm not too sure I'll come back to the story - I really don't know who the characters are at this point in the story. So, if I don't know who they are, then what do they have in common with me? You need to work on hooking the reader into the story - Your hook is missing the barb.
On a positive note (I do hope I'm not too critical) I think your tempo is very good for the genre.
Okay, just one question. did Hermione tell them that her name is Hannah, or is that just the nickname?
You filed it under Harry/Hermione, yet neither of them are in here, Who are Hannah and Gina?
Good descriptions - but there was too much, and at times it bored me. Other than those things, the story was good!
great stuff, but slightly confusing. Looking forward to the next chapter
Wow, this chapter was amazing! It was after all only an introduction, and not much H/Hr-romance, but your writing was so good that I didn't care!
I just have to ask you something... while reading, I was constantly reminded of the story "Crestfallen" by coven. Have you by any chance read it? Cos it's the same kind of plot... and Hermione's shop is called the Book Nook... Not that I mind, it's one of my favorite stories, and now this one is too =D I was just curios.
I love what you've got going here! You've really got a way with words, you're so talented! Pleeease update soon, I can't wait! =)
Author's Response: I haven't read it, no. But this is a very overdone plot anyway, and I'm very sorry I stole the name of the bookshop.
Next Chapter... YES! Glad youre adding to it, though if that is the case I wouldnt mark this story as "Complete". So let me guess, the POV is that of Hermione, the man that forces himself on her is either Krum or Ron, and Harry walks in to witness the kiss, and turns tail for good. Hermione, all destroyed after the incident, leaves the wizarding world, disguising as a muggle under the assumed name of Hannah. God Im good if Im right.
See you next chapter I hope. You should post on fanfiction.portkey.org, people seem to update much quicker there. Half the stories that are in progress on here have been completed forever on portkey. Just thought Id let you know, I hit portkey everyday =D
Author's Response: You are very very good my friend..... too good. Is it marked as complete? I dunno, i only just got back from three weeks in England.
Yay! Is that women ment to be Hermione... ??