Reviews For A Dream Deferred
Reviewer: PheonixFlamesForever
Date: 05/26/08 12:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

"Her name was Jessica Stuart, and she had been a forgotten Gryffindor girl."

This is one of the best openning lines I have ever read. It immediately engaged me in the story. I already know Hermione's story and the other Gryffindor girls, but not Jessie's.

"Jessie didn't even hear the rest of what Hermione said. She only answered dreamily, "Oh yes, I'll come," when Hermione asked again if she would attend, and absently said, "Goodbye," when Hermione uncertainly told her that "she really had to be going, Ron was waiting." "

Unfortunately, this paragraph seems a bit messy and I had to read through a couple of times before grasping the whole concept of it.

The flashbacks in my opinion are a fantastic way of showing Jessie's attachment to the past, remembering all those times which she spent with Lupin. They could've been over used but they fitted in perfects at different points in the story.

" "Godric, Jessie Stuart!" she cursed herself out loud. "Why is his memory still haunting you? Why does your heart still do that funny little skipping thing whenever you think of him? You baby, can't you just forget? "

I think that this little passage seems a little dramatic for an otherwise believable story. Perhaps if she was just thinking it or talking about it in a conversation with a friend it would seem a little more realistic.

But overall, a very enjoyable read and I really liked it.

Pheonix Tears / PheonixFlamesForever

Reviewer: huffpuff94
Date: 02/06/08 16:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really want to know what her boggart was!

Reviewer: huffpuff94
Date: 02/06/08 16:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

"From his first class with them, the infamous Boggart Class, she'd fall head-over-heels into a schoolgirl crush with himů" Didnt we all

Reviewer: Trueillusions1
Date: 08/03/07 17:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really liked this story. It always makes a good story when you used real life experinces, at least thats what I think.

Reviewer: DragonPhoenix
Date: 04/10/07 5:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

now i didn't really read the story but i needed to comment on your bio- u sound incredibly like me- im only 14 but i also bare a striking resemblance to hermione (uncontrollable brown hair and dark choclate brown eyes not to mention an absolute addiction to books, though not quite as organised) i enjoy musicals though i obtain no favorites in particular- i am not emo or goth but i love emo music and goth styles (though i do not dress in them i still adore them) i love panic! at the disco and some other more emo ish bands such as my chemical romance, AFI, hawthorne heights just to name a few. my favorite movies being remarkably like yours in being lord of the rings, pirates of the caribbean, and pride & prejudice. though i prefer the older ABC version at that and think the book is slightly better.in addition to all these remarkable similarities my few male freinds do not seem to realise im of the oppisite gender as well- im amazed at our similarities so far and i havent eaven met you.

DragonPheonix at your service

Reviewer: travelgirl
Date: 04/08/07 6:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

very nice. Childish infatuations...seem funny after a time. I remember this one time...well anyway. It reminds us all of of little bit of childhood.

Reviewer: I_LUV_MOONY
Date: 04/04/07 18:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ahh! That was really sweet! I usually don't read OC stories but I really liked that one. Keep it up!

Reviewer: scottishlikecho
Date: 03/03/07 7:25
Chapter: Chapter 1

loved this story, it was very sweet. but what was her boggart? xxx

Reviewer: hpfreak101
Date: 02/02/07 16:38
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great story. Thank you for including the poem!

Reviewer: HPwizzzard
Date: 11/06/06 20:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very good. You stayed true to Remus/Tonks but you didn't leave Jessie miserable. And we can ALL relate to the schoolgirl crush, can't we, girls? I'm putting this one in my faves.

Reviewer: HPwizzzard
Date: 11/06/06 20:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very good. You stayed true to Remus/Tonks but you didn't leave Jessie miserable. And we can ALL relate to the schoolgirl crush, can't we, girls? I'm putting this one in my faves.

Reviewer: Midnight_Panthora
Date: 11/03/06 12:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

please continue to write more i really like it or was that the end. Im adding this to my favourites

Reviewer: Chris_04
Date: 08/09/06 13:25
Chapter: Chapter 1

:) That was so sweet :) I really liked it :) Nothing else to say, but good job :)

Reviewer: A House Elf
Date: 08/09/06 13:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

I forgot to ask! What was that boggart?

Reviewer: A House Elf
Date: 08/09/06 13:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh, I loved it! I was so scared you weren't going to be faithful to Remus and Tonks, but you were! I really enjoyed this. And you didn't leave poor Jessie heartbroken. I applaud thee. Wonderful story.

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 08/09/06 12:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

I think that a very cute story. It was sappy at parts, and funny at parts. I'm glad that Jessie was able to over come her crush, and even work up the courage to go meet up with everyone. :) I really like how her attention went to Seamus at the end. :)

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