AHHHHHHHH I love love love LOVE this story!!!!!
awesome....nicely written and has a feel good storyline!!! keep it up!
Aww cute story.
this is sooooooooooooadorable!!!!!!!!!!!!
good writing is made of awkward moments, and yours are great!
That was so sweet. Bravo
great story!!! i liked it very much!!! i agree with harry about ginny!!!;)
hehe harry's such a lovable prat here. great story
Wow! This story was really touching! It had a great plot. You always seemed to make everything fit. Keep up the good work!
yay!!!!! good story, i love this pairing
i'm not a huge fan of harry/hermione, but this story was very well written thats for sure!
'Harry, you prat,' by Croyez.
Croyez shows a different, less typical view of the often dubbed "delusional" ship of Harry/Hermione. Croyez shows a fic that is not canon in any way (aside from characterization, but we'll get onto that), yet is still believable to a certain extent.
I say to a certain extent, because while everything is very well explained, it is a one-shot, and therefore the feelings Harry experiences for Hermione move very quickly - too quickly for real life.
However, the subtle change of emotions is done well, especially for average length one-shot. We see Harry progress from seeing Hermione as a best friend, to a possible girlfriend throughout the fic, though, thankfully, without some awful cliché ruining the fic.
Croyez generally has characterization nailed, an aspect rarely seen in romance one-shots. However, as with every story, there are kinks.
Harry, while at first glance seems to be in character, proves otherwise when studied more closely. Take particular note of this quote;
[i]“I–you know I wouldn’t lie about this, especially now that I know what you and Ron were talking about. Honestly, Hermione, I would have never meant to hurt you,” he sighed again, feeling frustrated, “I mean…I don’t feel the way you think I do about what you said. It was odd–and a shock–but then I thought about it and…well, it just felt…right. I–argh…I don’t know how to explain it, but I just…sort of like the idea…of you and me…”[/i]
This, spookily, is a mirror image of how many of us would see Ron professing his love to Hermione; stuttering and stumbling over his words, along with the oh-so-famous red ears. But it is not Ron that says this, it's Harry, who is usually in control of his words, and, when around girls (think Cho Chang) prefers to say nothing at all, bringing out those dreaded awkward silences.
Ron seems to be in character - thankfully, Croyez seems to have taken note of what many other Harry/Hermione shippers seemed to have missed; Ron DOES like Hermione, there's no denying it. Unfortunately, I was rather surprised at how quickly Ron was forgotten. What with Ginny having a key role through the fic, note one thought was spared for Ron by Harry, a rather worrying thought, as Harry has always cared deeply for the feelings of others, again, shown well in this fic. Although the small scene between Ron and Harry was absolutely perfect, I'd have liked to have seen Ron being at least thought about later on in the fic.
The aspect of Ginny is done perfectly. I have to admit, I was surprised to find that she was in the fic, as many Harry/Hermione authors tend to make her, no pun intended, magically disappear, there by giving Harry and Hermione to shack up with out feeling guilty, which as we all know, would not happen.
Although Harry's feelings for Ginny are slightly OOC and contradictory to HBP, they do fit in nicely with the story and flow very well with the whole underlying debate - Hermione or Ginny?
The best part of this fic, however, was the very last paragraph. It has that simple beauty and wisdom to it that every author tries to capture, but rarely manages. But Croyez does manage it, and word perfectly, mimicking the style of Jo Rowling at the end of HBP.
All in all, when told that the review must be for a non-canon romance, I automatically picked Harry/Hermione, thinking that you couldn't get more non-canon than that. Croyez, however, has proved me drastically wrong, showing how, even in canon; there is still room for a little romance between Harry and Hermione.
~Evie/ dumbledorefluertwins/ apollo13
SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! ENCORE! ENCORE! ENCORE! ENCORE!
do you hear that? that's your fans (or just me, whichever) that this nedds to CONTINUE!!!!!!!! please? for me? ~puppy dog pout~
Miss Bookworm Malfoy
I really like your story but it is awfully similar to what happened to me... I was in Ginny's place and it really hurt...but nonetheless, great story!! :)
very very good!!!!
L.O.L that was Great!
LOVELY! I don't do Harry/Hermione ships usually, but this one was nice and felt right! : >
P.S *I dont like Ginny very much.*
Harry, who I normally don't think about much, was adorable!!
That was great a bit sappy but still good. You should of mentioned something about Ginney spotting them and getting upset or summit.
not the best.