this is extremely well written! very descriptive with the emotions. i hope i can take a few tips from this to improve my writing. good job!
I really liked the ideas behind the story, but you could of added a bit more to the end of the story to complete the scenario.
this is a rly good story! one of my favs!!
WRITE MORE!!! it is soooo sweet and sooo sad and, again, soooo awesome.
i hope you continue!!!
WRITE MORE!!! it is soooo sweet and sooo sad and, again, soooo awesome.
i hope you continue!!!
this story is amazing. it is so well written and the detail you give is great. it really is fantastic.
wowww that was really really good!! could you give me some ideas for story! fantastic!
I have just read the whole story and really love your rich descriptions. I think it's great that you have tackled the issue of bullying and I hope at least one person who has read your story stands up for someone being bullied whether at home, school, college or in the workplace. I would love you to write a story about purebloods (racism). Congrats.....keep going!
gymjules
omg this is one of the best stories i wrtote, i was all emotional when i read about dumbledore dieing, but this really gets you emotionally i was actually crying i felt like hugging hermione cos i felt so sorry for her... amazing story
Good stuff, I loved the simplicity...it didn't go on for ages just to get them together.
I thought it was great!
First of all, that was amazing. Truly. I don't know where you live, but I'm going to find out so I can come and steal your talent for writing. Normally I'm not a teary sort of person, but just now, I almost cried. Incredible
You really are a good writer. You should write more.
you honestly made me weep, I too used to be treated like that. Your writting is so beautiful. Run with your gift.
That's really powerful writing. You have a knack for making the reader feel the emotions of the characters, and I can also picture the scene really clearly in my mind. Bravo.
that was an awesome story! i love it! write some more!
That was good I hope wirte another story soon!!!!
3 words, I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!! The scene with the boy made me emotional.Wow, that was great! I mean, really great, as great as great can be, lol. I am BEGGING you to write a sequel! If you did, my life would be complete. Lol.
~hermoninny
aww! that wos so sad but very cute!!!!!
luved it