Reviews For The Third War
Reviewer: mrsdan
Date: 07/04/07 10:11
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

OMG!!! She CAN"T DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Why'd you do that???????

Author's Response: Sorry! I had to for the sake of Benji - my plot bunnie. ~Evie

Reviewer: voldyvolvol
Date: 07/04/07 8:26
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

This was a great chapter. This is one of the first fics I stumbled into on the website, and I've been stuck to it since. :)

What I liked
-Character development of Jamie and Lily. It really shows how much they have grown in a short amount of time.
-Character development of Sirius, showing his independence of trying to do things himself. His character is a lot like Ginny's.
-The kids finding Ginny behind the mirror. I thought that was a great moment where they told Ginny that they were sorry.

Areas of Improvement
- You can't kill of Lily!!!!!! I know that this one is a bit of a joke, but you just can't kill her off!
- You could have shown a little more of Harry's point of view of the battle.

Otherwise, this chapter was really good! The cliffie is evil, but that's okay. It's all good anyways. :)

Author's Response: **Huggles** **Gives TWO cookies** ~Evie

Reviewer: baby b
Date: 07/04/07 6:09
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

EVIL you can't kill her she's only 11! Plz hurry and update i need to find out what happens she can't be dead i refuse to admit it! Harry has been throu too much to lose his daughter at the end

Author's Response: LOL. I'm typing the next chapter up as fast as possible!! ~Evie

Reviewer: DragonFlower90
Date: 07/04/07 4:41
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

Omigosh!! What happened did Harry grab her foot? is she lost? oh update soon please the suspense is killing me.

Author's Response: ... you'll see... you'll see... ~Evie

Reviewer: heartachin4harry
Date: 07/04/07 0:19
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

Ah!!!!! Lillian!!! I loved this chapter! It was great! Poor Sirius, poor Ginny, poor Harry, poor every good person in there! I loved Lillian running after him, that was so graet. UPdate oson!

Author's Response: I'll try!! **Huggles** ~Evie

Reviewer: ginny505
Date: 07/03/07 23:13
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

wow, i just discovered this story, and have been reading it for like 2 hours now, and this is really good. i like ur character developement, and the parts before about the world after the living was really cool. i really want you to add a new chapter soon bc i really want to kno whats gonna happen to lily. i really hope that she doesnt die, but i guess since she fell thru the veil, she will.
keep up the good work :]]

Author's Response: aw, **huggles** ~Evie

Reviewer: TheBlackSister
Date: 07/03/07 22:22
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

OOOH... you better update soon! I LOVE IT!

Author's Response: Thnx. ~Evie

Reviewer: dreamer478
Date: 07/03/07 21:44
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

wow! really good chapter! poor voldemort (not really) i liked that you used dumbledore's pocket watch as the horcrux and i like that the kids seem to be completely unafraid of the death eaters. i only have one question...will you explain later why those kids are the seven special kids who could have gone throught the veil? i am very curious about that. anyway keep updating! i want to know what happens to lillian

Author's Response: They can go through the veil because of the phropecy - but Bella didn't say all of it... that's all I'll say for now... **Gives... half a cookie...** ~Evie

Reviewer: Hilary
Date: 07/03/07 21:10
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

Wow! Another amazing chapter! I really liked the action and despite what you said about war scenes I think you actually did very well. You could have made it more descriptive and easier to understand where the kids where and what happened to Ginny. However, I really liked where you took the story and how you drew several parallels to the first battle in the ministry in Harry's 5th year

Author's Response: **Gives cookie** Thank you so much! ~Evie

Reviewer: TheBlackSister
Date: 07/03/07 21:07
Chapter: Chapter 16, The Potion

OH MY GOSH! This is very much like Bella! And they can't talk to any spirits, so nobody can help them. YOU ARE SO CLEVER!

Author's Response: That's debateable! Thanx! ~Evie

Reviewer: SingingBird
Date: 07/03/07 19:39
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

Oh no!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! She didn't die did she? Oh I hope not! Great chapter, I can't wait to read more! :)

Author's Response: You'll find out soon enough. :D ~Evie

Reviewer: Dorky Dorcas
Date: 07/03/07 17:35
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

OMFG lily is SO brave u can c y see was put into gryffindor!!

(oh god/merlin i'm crap at reviews sorry but i'm gonna try k)

what i liked:
i've always like james and lily's personality, i think they've both got a lot of harry in them which is cool, i think sirius is a bit more like ginny though IMO. and what d'u mean u cant write battle scene i think ur really good at it. i honestly luv ur battle scenes, i think there very creative, a lot better than my'n anyway which go on for ages and ages until u jus giv up from bordem. i abosultly LUV the ending too, VERY dramatic and i can't wait to c wat happens nxt.

what i did'nt like:
umm, i dunno really, i think maybe u could have done more when voldemort tortured sirius like put him in mungo's or killed him off, i dunno why i think this though coz he's one of my fav charecters LOL!! i suppose that wouldent be a practical idea though with only 2 chaps left :sniff:

how i think u could improve:
err...i got a bit confused with where each person was, i knew that harry and LV where in the room with the veil but i wasnt sure where the kids got to but that might b coz it's late and i'm a tad tired.

sorry this is a rubbish review but like i sed earlier, i tried and it's late i'll try and write another (and hopefully better) one nxt time

Peace and Luv,
Dorky Dorcas
^_^

Author's Response: **Gives cookie** Good review! They're all in the room with the veil. ;) ~Evie

Reviewer: Phoenix 86
Date: 07/03/07 17:28
Chapter: Chapter 23, Utter Darkness

firstly, i feel stupid for getting my days and hours crossed in my last review. secondly, good chapter. now there has to be a wait to find out her fate. well, keep 'em coming.

Author's Response: LOL. Thank you!

Reviewer: Noel Weasley
Date: 07/03/07 16:39
Chapter: Chapter 1, The Offer

cool! but due to JKR recent whatever things, she has said the Tonks was in Hufflepuff, not Ravenclaw, but the length of this says that it was before that, so, yeah. good start! :P :D :P

Author's Response: Yeah, sorry about that - it was before I found out she was a Puff. :o ČEvie

Reviewer: heartachin4harry
Date: 07/01/07 16:51
Chapter: Chapter 22, Back Through the Veil

Great chapter, I loved it! Harry has to survive, he..he just has too. That's how the story goes, right? Please tel lme that's how the story goes. Actually, no don't tell me, I want to read about it. The next chapter better get validated quickly! Great chapter, I loved it!

Author's Response: Thank you! I wouldn't have told you anyway, because I'm mean like that. :p ~Evie

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 06/19/07 7:07
Chapter: Chapter 1, The Offer

CAN I JUST SAY AS NOT ONLY A FRIEND TO EVIE, BUT AS A READER OF HER GREAT WORK, IF YOU HAVING NOTHING NICE TO SAY ABOUT HER WRITING, DON'T SAY IT. IT IS NOT CALLED FOR AND IF YOU DO FEEL SUCH A NEED TO BAG IT, TRY GIVE A REASON. PLEASE.

On a nicer note to you, Evie, well done. Beautiful as always :)

Author's Response: LOL. Listen to her! ~Evie

Reviewer: lily_potter13
Date: 06/18/07 19:51
Chapter: Chapter 22, Back Through the Veil

OMG NOOOO I DONT WANT IT TO END ITS GETTIN GOOD PLZ I BEG U KEEP WRITING ITS SO GOOD

Author's Response: Or- whatever, just stop posting. :p ~Evie

Reviewer: lily_potter13
Date: 06/18/07 19:51
Chapter: Chapter 22, Back Through the Veil

OMG NOOOO I DONT WANT IT TO END ITS GETTIN GOOD PLZ I BEG U KEEP WRITING ITS SO GOOD

Author's Response: or quadruple post

Reviewer: lily_potter13
Date: 06/18/07 19:51
Chapter: Chapter 22, Back Through the Veil

OMG NOOOO I DONT WANT IT TO END ITS GETTIN GOOD PLZ I BEG U KEEP WRITING ITS SO GOOD

Author's Response: Or triple post

Reviewer: lily_potter13
Date: 06/18/07 19:51
Chapter: Chapter 22, Back Through the Veil

OMG NOOOO I DONT WANT IT TO END ITS GETTIN GOOD PLZ I BEG U KEEP WRITING ITS SO GOOD

Author's Response: Try not to double post.

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