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Name: Nagini Riddle (Signed) · Date: 11/25/12 20:37 · For: Myrtle Watches
Wow. Rarepair central. :) I laughed so much! Great job.

I also love your username! That series of books has been one of my favorites and I absolutely live the ridiculous name Telemain came up with for the trigger word in order to melt those pesky wizards. Teehee! I always found it interesting how different authors portray wizards...

Anyways, great job! ~Nagini Riddle

Name: madera (Anonymous) · Date: 07/19/07 23:55 · For: Cedric Haunts
This story is a treat. I like to read stories that are just fluffy and fun. Don't get me wrong - angst has it's place too, but this was really nicely done! :D

Name: Everlasting (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 3:35 · For: Myrtle Watches
Haha, i loved this! very creative and original, great job. i loved how it's from myrtle's point of view =]

Name: pheonixflame (Signed) · Date: 04/12/07 13:01 · For: Myrtle Watches
How very interesting and well written!

You took a new - and nice - spin on Myrtle. I particularly enjoyed the second chapter, where she says "Well done, Cedric" and giggles for days because it seemed like he spoke to her. Cute. :] And in both chapters, the whole "I like your chest" thing is really amusing. It seems very like Myrtle.

And even though Cedric doesn't actually say much, since it IS Myrtle POV, I think you wrote him pretty well. He seems like the courteous Hufflepuff Jo meant him to be: he's polite, his bow, and his charming smile. Good job!

I liked the idea for this story - no one ever considers the thought that Cedric may come back as a ghost and be with Myrtle. The only thing though is the layout of the chapters. It's a tad confusing going from a fic a few years into the past, to one back in Harry's 4th year.

Otherwise, I really enjoyed this fic! :]


Name: Ron x Hermione (Signed) · Date: 02/27/07 17:10 · For: Cedric Haunts
I think that you have a very interesting plot going on here.

Myrtle commenting on Cedric's chest is priceless. It made me laugh! *giggles still*

Great job! I really like it so far!

~Lindsey :)

Name: Aldebaran (Signed) · Date: 10/14/06 14:04 · For: Cedric Haunts
OMG Mindy! That's a great pairing. I read the summary and the first thing that struck me was that I would like this. I loved Cedric and wept when he died, so it's good to see that he and Myrtle (whom in the Portuguese translation had my name and was therefore loved by me) are actually happy. A total 10/10. I loved the part where she says that he has a nice chest and "he too turned silver". Just perfect.

Author's Response: Haha! Thanks! Yes, Myrtle's little slip of the tongue... "You have a very nice chest..." heh. Thanks for reviewing, Marta!

Name: draco_lover147 (Signed) · Date: 10/14/06 12:22 · For: Cedric Haunts
very nice. I love fluffy stories but this doesn't have much fluff and i still enjoy it.

Author's Response: Meh...fluff...normally I am very bad at writing actual romantic moments. This is downright fluffy for me. The most I can go without grossing myself out is the occasional kiss...but I prefer to let the reader imagine Cedric and Myrtle's death together. ;) Thanks mucho for your review!

Name: draco_lover147 (Signed) · Date: 10/14/06 12:22 · For: Cedric Haunts
very nice. I love fluffy stories but this doesn't have much fluff and i still enjoy it.

Name: ginevra715 (Signed) · Date: 09/28/06 21:20 · For: Cedric Haunts
I love this story. The characterization of the ghosts is so perfect...like how they turn silver when they blush and their 'pearly fingers wove together'. Yay for people whose first fics are about Myrtle!

Author's Response: Yeah, yay for Myrtle fics! heheh. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: wishiwereaweasley (Signed) · Date: 09/20/06 21:23 · For: Cedric Haunts
This was a charming fic! There isn't much about Myrtle out there, which I think is a shame because there's so much that can be done with her. So kudos to you for taking her on.

I really liked the beginning of this fic, the set up. There's some nice imagery, and a lot of well-written phrases. For example:

Sighing, the sixty-something-year-old ghost of a fifteen-year-old girl glided out of the toilet bowl (allowing a wave of water to wash onto the floor–not as if anyone would care, since there was no one to see it) and over to the tarnished mirrors that hung over the cracked sinks. This is a really long sentence, but it's not clumsy at all. You use parantheses and hyphens to break it up instead of commas. Not to mention the picture it presents. Unhappy ghost, older than she looks, splashing water in a decrepit bathroom.

But it wasn’t what Myrtle had wanted from life (or death). This is a slightly humorous reminder of her situation and I liked it. Another sort of the same thing from later on is: She was trapped for the rest of her death. It's subtle, but at the same time, leaves a strong impression.

Not only was he handsome, in a way that was almost reminiscent of Riddle, but he was noble, kind, loyal, and very foolhardy. Ah, I completely love that you compared Harry to Tom. There's a disturbing amount of similarities between them, I think, that don't get noticed very often. It was very astute of you to pick up on them.

(Myrtle wondered if this might have something to do with the fact that she’d seen him without any clothes on in the bath.) I laughed out loud when I read this. Dear Myrtle.

So enough of the first half, moving to the second. I liked this, though not as much as the beginning. Your dialogue between Myrtle and Cedric is entertaining and clever, for the most part. But some of the adjectives and adverbs you use are getting old. Silver and pearl, for example, are each used multiple times. Otherwise, though, it's good.

I liked the touch with the glasses, although being a girl who wore glasses for a long time, it'd be nice if he could appreciate her looks without them. I do like the implications created when we learn that he only really likes her because she looks like a little like Cho. She's still not getting completely accepted for herself, which I think is very much a part of her character...she's never going to be really and truly happy.

So all in all, very good job! I enjoyed it. Oh! And I completely love your penname. From Patricia Wrede's series, right? Enchanted Forest Chronicals? Those are some of my favourite books! =D

Author's Response: Wow, that's got to be the longest review I've ever gotten--thanks for taking the time to give feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed the way I portrayed Myrtle...it was fun to write. As to Cedric suggesting that he only likes her because she looks like Cho: Cedric, in the books, came across as a sort of shallow person, so I would assume that looks are very important to him. I wear glasses too, so I'm not saying they're a bad thing. ;) And I know silver and pearl are overused...but I didn't feel like breaking out the thesaurus to look up different ways to say "transparent" and/or "white"...ah well. And yes, my penname is from the Enchanted Forest Chronicles. I love those books. :)

Name: Emerald Jean (Signed) · Date: 09/18/06 21:47 · For: Cedric Haunts
wow! thatw as really enjoyable! you have a really good writing style! i read your one, i don't know what it's called, about dudley and minna - that was really neat! i can't wait until you add more! anyway, as i said, this was really neat! it makes sense, and i think i always knew that moaning myrtle was going to find a "true love" haha! i'm adding this to my favorites. -emmie

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm glad you liked it, and my other story as well. :) Thanks for taking the time to review!

Name: Meryl Montgomery (Signed) · Date: 08/10/06 16:17 · For: Cedric Haunts
That was truely adorable. It's nice to know Myrtle won't be alone in her U-bend anymore. A good match. =D

Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, Myrtle now has someone to hang out in the plumbing with...heh.

Name: sinbad (Signed) · Date: 07/30/06 23:58 · For: Cedric Haunts
What an interesting story. I always thought Cedric was too young to die, and here you are giving him a sort of afterlife. I think it is sweet that Moaning Mytrle and Cedric found each other. I also believe this story is more accurate in ideals that what first appears, often in sudden, violent deaths a ghost is created which should have been obivious and yet was neglected until now.

Author's Response: Yay! Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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