I like the form of the story cause its a lot different and you don't see it a lot.
I have to say that was an amazing piece. I was skeptical at first, but really I wasn't expecting the ending. However, it is poetic. Lovely, simply lovely.
WOW! it was so fun to read, I loved it great job! It was sad but wonderful!!!
a rose to you @-->----Rain
Awww! that is soooo sad!
wow that was really cool! i like it!
806 words. and still, you manage to bring me to tears. i mean, it helps that hg/ss is one of my favorite ships, but this is amazing. great job!
aww, so sweet! i got a little teary at the end
Author's Response: Thanx, Ecca
aww, so sweet! i got a little teary at the end
an interesting take on a hermione/severus fic. the point of view was different but a good story. continue writing and give the creativity bunnies a carrot for me
Author's Response: Thanks, i'll make sure it's an extra big carrot... lol, Thanks again, ecca
A first rate, lovely story!
Author's Response: thanx, ecca
Eerie. I liked it though. It was very cute that you gave Severus' son his looks, excluding that terrible nose. Hehe. Anyway, good job!
Author's Response: Thanx, well i dont think that Severus would want his own children inheritaing his nose. Ta, Ecca
Hmmm, did she die of a borken heart? Nice progression through her various emotional states. Grief and rememberance take many forms and are triggered by the slightest things.
Author's Response: umm.... did she die of a broken heart? Welll, in a way yes, although i dont thnk it comes down to something as simple as that but it certainly a contributing factor in this case. Hope that explains... thanx, Ecca
*tear* that was amazing...*snif* please write more!!!
Author's Response: thanx, i've currently stopped writing as work and studies are rather hectic atm, but once the chaos dies down u'll hear from me again. Ecca
Oh my. I have tears in my eyes. You did a great job of conveying the emotion Hermione felt at the loss of her husband, even ten years later. For me the sentence structure was a little odd, but I see what you were trying to do. It had an ethereal feeling the entire time, which didn't quite work, but the emotion you conveyed was stronger than the awkardness of the sentences. That is a compliment, I promise!
That last paragraph is just beautiful. I love how you start it out the same way you began the first one. Its wonderful. Though I am curious to know why Hermione died so young. She hasn't even hit middle age for a witch.
"Your 57 year old self is there, you're finally at peace." I love this sentence. I can see the warm smile crossing Hermione's lips as she realizes that she will never have to spend another day without her beloved. You did a wonderful job!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. The emotion was a very hard part to portray in such a fierce and strong way. But i tink, well i hope that i have captured true love in Hermiones' eyes. As to the sentence structure, while some of it was intentional, others not quiet, i spose in the end it came down to reaching my own goal of 100 word moments. I toyed with alot of different ends, but this is the one i liked most. In my mind, i can see Snape making comments to Hermione about letting him go and getting on with her life, but Hermione deals with it as all true Grriffindors do , by wearing her heart on her sleeve. As for Hermiones' age, i considered her living to the ripe only age of 170+ but in the end i think that even the current 17 year old Hermione realizes that her time on this earth is perhaps limited. My Hermione spent over 30 years devoted to one man, both in life and death and i think its only wherever Severus is that Hermione is tryuly at peace, well thats what my romantic side is telling me.lol. On the other hand, when we think about Hermiones' heritage, her muggle background, our average lifespan is around 80. Although it is quiet plausible that her magic will extend her life, i lke to think that our love is directly linked to our health (again my romantic side) and that Hermione's feelings are so deep that its not that she cant live to be an old and dodery McGonnagall like woman, its that she dosent want to, her kids a fine and healthy, they have someone to turn to and its finally Hermiones turn to return to her someone. I hope that makes some sense, if not, well what can i say... Once again thank-you for your comments, Regards, Ecca
oh my....How moving...very well done. Bravo. I have to wipe away the tears befoe my boss sees.....thank you.
Author's Response: Thankyou so much Viktoriangodess, you have just made my day... i hope you boss didnt catch you lol, ta , Ecca
I am not really a fan of Hermione/Snape, but i gotta say, You wrote this beautifully. I love the way you give us this little moments, so normal and still so special. Very well written, very nice!! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thankyou, i wasnt a fan of this ship until i stumbled upon a fanfic accidently, then read a few more and it got me hooked although i think Hermione and Ron are brilliant togehter Hermione/Severus just has that unique little something about it. Thanks Again for you comments
I love the ending!! Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks. What can i say, im a romantic at heart. If you liked this i recommed that you read A Perfect Day on Ashwinder (It may be here as well, not sure) its brilliantly written. Ecca
nice... do u have any idea who the person is that married severus? just wondering... now time for constructive critiism! u shoud have made it a teensy weensy bit longer. but thats it. =) anyways not bad for a first... considering ive nvr done one... lol
Author's Response: Thanks, i had thought of making it longer but i wanted only unique moments for hermione, i had toyed with a bit on when they first got together, but then decided that i liked it better when they were all after Severus' death. Anyway thanks again, Ecca