I saw your excerpt in the forums and came looking for your story. =]
So far, I’m really intrigued by this fic. It’s very interesting.
I like that Deanna is writing to the reader; it makes the story more unique than some of the others that I’ve read. Deanna is a very well-round character, not perfect or too beautiful- she has quirks and is relatable. Her writing (or I guess your writing =]) is very entertaining, and it makes this easy to read. Her experiments were interesting, and I liked the one about the word association with Pure-bloods. Very creative.
So, great start, and I’ll be reading the next chapter when it gets validated!
I saw your excerpt in the forums and came looking for your story. =]
So far, I’m really intrigued by this fic. It’s very interesting.
I like that Deanna is writing to the reader; it makes the story more unique than some of the others that I’ve read. Deanna is a very well-round character, not perfect or too beautiful- she has quirks and is relatable. Her writing (or I guess your writing =]) is very entertaining, and it makes this easy to read. Her experiments were interesting, and I liked the one about the word association with Pure-bloods. Very creative.
So, great start, and I’ll be reading the next chapter when it gets validated!
Very nice. I rarely review on first chapters (and I mean rarely, since I'm lazy and can normally only be depended on to review loyally to just a couple of fics, though I'm often playing catch-up) but I am so struck by this story I feel it more than warrants a few lines. In other words, I'm not afraid that you'll get writers' block after this one chapter and abandon it and me in agony. Plus, I hate to see a really good story with zero to few reviews. And I think this is a good first chapter, the foundation for a great story. First, the premise here is unique and still very do-able. You haven't set yourself up with some incredibly complicated ordeal that must be worked through before you can even start the story, but it’s not dull either. Deanna is interesting, she had faults (quirks, actually) and you bring them out immediately, honestly, but without forcing them down the reader's throat (very uncomfortable *grimace*). Two, this is not the typical diary. I suppose it's not a diary at all, but rather a correspondence with oneself, something very fresh and new. I look forward to chapter two and sit intrigued already. (By the way, Texas rocks!) A wonderful beginning, keep it up!
~Ellie