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Name: Dumbledore Prince (Signed) · Date: 08/12/06 23:57 · For: one shot
Hi Anna! *waves*

This story was pretty original. Congratulations for the Order of the Hospital Wing: First Class. It was very well-deserved!

Normally, I don't go to review OC centred one-shots because there's not much character development. But your fic is definitely an exception! I like Teagan's bold personality and her intention of redeeming the Department of Mysteries. Her occupation as a journalist seems just right for her, considering her Gryffindorish bravery.

I also like the hesitancy of the Unspeakables (especially the older one). It seems just right for their profession, and their secrecy is just right for their occupation.

Last, but certainly not the least, I liked your explanations about the various rooms, and the brain escape.

Author's Response: Another review?! *gaspshockdie* You're too much, Mini! *grins* I'm very glad you liked this fic because it took me forever to type up! Teagan is my baby, I am quite fond of her. Thanks for both the review and the congrats! *hugs*

Name: Gryffinpuff (Signed) · Date: 07/28/06 14:52 · For: one shot
Hooray! A fellow Hufflepuff in the HHWP! I really enjoyed your descriptions of the rooms. You painted lovely pictures in my mind, making me feel like I was walking right along side Teagan. I also loved her character. I think you show her personality very well throughout the entire story. I would have liked to see you create reasons behind the rooms, some explaination for their existence. What purpose do the brains serve, and what is the mysterious reason behind the death chamber? But, seeing as your character was meant to have a limited scope of understanding, I suppose your Unspeakables could only give us so much ;) Fabulous job! Good luck with the scoring. FOR PHILBERT!!!

Author's Response: Yes, FOR PHILBERT! I want that Cup. Looking back on this, I do see what you mean, but the truth is I was so tired of writing such a long fic and wanted it over so I left those parts out. It would have certainly been interesting, though, you're right on that. Thank you so much Ashley, love, for reviewing this. It means so much!

Name: coppercurls (Signed) · Date: 07/27/06 20:49 · For: one shot
Anna, this is great. You took my suggestion from skel-grow and fleshed it out into this beautiful story (even better than I imagined). I like the way you have the two conflicting personalities of Mr. Vickett and Mr. Maggs. It shows that unspeakables are not all the same mindless and mysterious clones- good job. My only concern is that Mr. Maggs is a little too negative to Teagan. I can see him wanting to intimidate her, but when they are depending on her good review, his outright rudeness seems a bit out of place. He should woo her, not insult her. On another note, the early Daily Prophet clippings give a wonderful introduction to the piece. It shows without telling, and is a creative beginning and tie in. I particularly like the confidentiality of the negative quotes- it shows how people are still just a little afraid of the DoM. Your description of the planet room is beautiful, the scene is well played, designed to awe and impress. The brain room is well done, but the dialogue seems a bit forced on occassion. It might run more smoothly if you intersperced your description of the room and Teagan's reactions to it in with the monologue that Mr. Vickett is giving, rather than leaving them as two seperate entities. However, I love the scene in the Death room, that is easily my favorite of them all. It is descriptive, poignent, and convincing- bravo. The word choice made me feel like I was there. The time room was described well, but I wanted a little dialogue, something to break up the endless description, even Teagan voicing her thoughts out loud. Again, the entire story was well written, you obviously did your research. Well done.

Author's Response: *huggles* Thank you for your lovely comments and nitpicks. Especially the nitpicks. It'll help me as I write more stories. I knew something wasn't quite right in the Time Room - thank you for pointing out exactly what you didn't like. I'll see what I can do with it. Infinite thanks and squees and hugs. Without you, I don't know where this would be!

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 07/27/06 16:21 · For: one shot
Hi there,
I remember this story from the SCU! Nice job! I like how you set up Teagan's visit to the DoM. The first two articles in the Daily Prophet were a neat way to introduce the story. I'm not sure if the Minister for Magic himself would be so closely involved, but its always fun to see a canon character. You did a really good job describing the DoM from the point of view of someone who had never been there before. Even better, you wrote her reactions as someone who was taking internal notes for the big article she was hired to write. Teagan seems like a fun character. Do you see her leaving the Daily Prophet to work in the DoM someday?? Because I do! :)
Good luck in the HHWP and keep up the good work! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you -- it means so much to get a review from you! I liked your ideas, so I used a couple of them. Ah, yes I can. Teagan is my baby, She's very interested in the DoM and who knows? Maybe she will become an Unspeakable one day. As for the Minister -- the reason I included him that much was because for something of that nature to happen: a Brain leaving the DoM, he would have to be involved more in the matter. At least, that's my opinion on it. I'm glad you found it interesting and realistic! Thanks for the beautiful review!

Name: Emily_the_Poet (Signed) · Date: 07/27/06 2:09 · For: one shot
This sure is an interesting take on the department of mysteries. Most I've seen so far have been from an unspeakables point of view. To put a story in the point of view of a journalist is very cool indeed. Especially considering the way that horrible Skeeter woman is.

I enjoyed your story. It flowed well, and was fairly interesting at the same time. However, what are her wildest dreams?

Author's Response: Thank you, Miki! Her wildest dreams are writing an large article on something she enjoys. Something that fascinates her. Most journalists write about things that are going on -- and they don't have to like them. But Teagan is writing about something that interests her, and she's having fun in the process.

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