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(Signed) · Date:
01/26/08 8:45 · For:
Selena's Choice: Part II
Wow, that was just so powerful. The emotions are raw and one can feel for Selena. The conflicts inside of her it's heart wrenching.
I loved the way the story slowly develops. Just hinting slightly as to what was to come. Her nervousness in the beginning as she tries to find reassurance in her mind, the way Roger unknowingly gives her some, it is all so very well written.
I loved how you demonstrated the quote at the beginning all throughout the story. The conflicts she has to battle herself with are so powerful, so emotional. Her tortures were great, in the sense of how you portrayed them, that is. Not that is great to see someone tortured, that is for the Dark Lord only. ;)
I like the way you used the dementors to give some back-story, besides only torturing her. Bellatrix felt a little in the way, if you know what I mean. She felt, to me, as though she shouldn’t have been there. Though I know she must have enjoyed torturing Selena, I felt as though it was better to leave that to unnamed Death Eaters. But that is only my humble opinion.
One thing I really liked was that you didn’t make her be in love with Roger; that you really left him as a good friend and nothing more. When you introduced Michael, I liked how the descriptions make it seem as though it was Roger.
Carolina, poor Carolina. That was a major low blow from Voldemort. Poor little girl. What that must have been for her we may never know, or maybe we will if you write it some time. ;)
This was a very good story. I think I shall be reading some time the story from where Selena comes from.
(Signed) · Date:
02/26/07 2:40 · For:
Megan, I love it! It's quite a lot darker than what I usually read, but it's extremely well-written and wonderfully thought out. Sad though it is, it really was a darkly enjoyable read.
I have no criticism excpet that you have a messed up html tag in chapter 2.
"You’re being selfish, you know. The voice was back. ,i>You’re not refusing the offers because it’s “not the right thing”; you’re just selfish. You don’t want to appear like a traitor . . . You’re self-centred and egotistical, and ---"
Also, I really love how you used the dementors to show Selena's past. It was really very clever! =)
Anyways, I enjoyed your fic a lot. You're a brilliant writer, so keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks, Fenrir! I'm very glad that you liked this. The darkness of it was my favourite aspect, and I had a LOT of fun writing it *loves Dark Lords and Death Eaters*
Also, thanks for pointing out the tag; I went back and fixed it! As for the Dementors, I love using that technique; it makes it so easy to tell important pieces of a person's past, without having to think up lengthy scenes and whatnot.