This is so good. I myself prefer freeverse poems. Ones that don't rhyme. I love the continued reference to monster and handsome, it's a great contrast. Really, really excellent.
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! I obviously do like good free verse poems (which is why I liked yours and wrote mine), but so many are bad that it's not the most promising genre of poetry. I had oodles of fun with the alliteration in this one, and with the repetition. That kind of stuff is much harder to fit into prose.
I love the ending of the poem, it ties together Voldemort's and Harry's fate.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I really loved the moral, too--it's what I built the story around.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. It was very simple and easy to read, yet at the same time beautifully poetic. You really took a good message and illustrated it beautifully throughtout your poem. The way you end it with that moral really is amazing. This is a great work of poetry you should be proud to have written. Great job!
Author's Response: I love doing poetry. I have quite a bit of it in my original works. I originally planned this poem as a short story, but realized that the storyline wasn't big enough, so I did a poem. Sadly, HPFF rejected it because they don't do poems. I'm really glad you reviewed it, because I have the feeling that a G-rated poem isn't going to be wildly popular among the fanfic world :)
How darkly ironic! Wonderful job...you have great word choice. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I originally was planning to do this as a regular story, but then realized that it would be too short to submit to this site, and that the plot really wasn't developed enough for a one-shot. So I turned it into a free-verse poem and submerged myself in alliteration. I'm quite pleased with how it turned out.