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Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 02/29/08 18:26 · For: The Duel
Wow, a disturbing thought, Gryffindore actually invented the cruciatus curse that the dark wizards are most fond of. I suppose adding it to the list of unforgivables would do that. Anyway, brilliant fic, I liked the lion.

Name: writeastory (Signed) · Date: 02/25/08 4:59 · For: The Duel
nice one! I'll try to beat it with one of my own 'separation tale'

Name: fragment1441 (Signed) · Date: 02/13/08 20:21 · For: The Duel
that was unbleviable!!!!! i dont know if its possible to get any better!! plzzzz make a sequel!!

Name: Celic (Signed) · Date: 11/09/06 14:30 · For: The Duel
Very good. I am writing a story of there begining and how hagwarts came to be. I like the spell with the lion, that was brilliant.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Good luck with your own.

Name: Lilacflower (Signed) · Date: 10/08/06 19:56 · For: The Duel
Brilliant! That portrays the fury of the two men fighting against eachother. I think that this was very worthy of the award.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I am so glad you enjoyed reading the story. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: lilyevans91 (Signed) · Date: 09/27/06 11:39 · For: The Duel
oh god...that was sad! very good portrayal of both characters, and it's a very believable version of what might have happened. i like your writing style, too. simple but powerful, and you really get the feeling of the story through with not that many words. great job, this deserves to be in the featured!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I've always wondered what happened between the Founders when Salazar left. I never imagined that he just slipped away silently into the night. I've always thought there had to be some kind of final confrontation. I'm glad you liked my version of this. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Name: ProfPosky (Signed) · Date: 09/22/06 13:59 · For: The Duel
I haven't read htis since you were just finished, and I have to say I liked it then but I like it even more now! I never saw before are how liket he Marauders Salazar and Godric are, i like that he realizes he has to add his lteast crurse ot the list, and I like that they are not being called "Unforgiveables" yet, because it shows that somethings developed with time... Do you realize thta not naming the other curses on the list leaves open the possibility that there were other curses we may or may not know about that the Founders considered as bad or worse?

Picking the story up where you do is interesting because it literally IS all over but the shouting, and yet you make the shouting worth reading...

Really marvelous! I'm glad I read it again...

Author's Response: Thank you so much PP! You did such a fabulous job betaing this for me too. I had never thought about the Marauders and the Founders being alike, that is a very interesting observation. And no, I hadn't realized the fact that I left the list so ambiguous, but now I love that I did, even if it was on accident. Thank you so much for all your kind words! They make me smile : )

Name: potterweaslygranger (Signed) · Date: 09/21/06 23:53 · For: The Duel
a very disturbing take on Godric Gryffindor... it's almost like you switcthed Salazar and Godric's personalities pretty well written 9/10

Author's Response: I think there is a little bit of Slytherin in each of us. I see Godric as also being very loyal to his friends (he is with Helga) and I think it is hard for him to let go (that Gryffindor pride). He couldn't deal with the fact that his friend was abandoning them. There is a reason Salazar and Godric were best friends. They each had something that appealed to the other. Ok, enough rambling. Thanks for your review!

Name: LRS078 (Signed) · Date: 09/21/06 22:49 · For: The Duel
and ya always thought it was the Slytherins that came up w' unforgiveables......hehe, nice twist. Don't tell me AK is his too? j/k Nice one shot....

Author's Response: Thanks! I do love the idea that Godric came up with Crucio. I don't know who came up with AK ... hmm, maybe one of the ladies? Thanks for reviewing!

Name: Samuri Rose (Signed) · Date: 09/20/06 9:17 · For: The Duel
SO good!
Samuri Rose xxx

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Name: _Hermione_Granger_ (Signed) · Date: 09/18/06 0:25 · For: The Duel
hmm. ..Good story. are you adding more?

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it! I don't have any plans to add more to this story. Sorry. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: electronicquillster (Signed) · Date: 09/03/06 15:30 · For: The Duel
Wow, Amy. This was very powerful, right from the get-go. As a reader, I could feel Godric's angry urgency as he stormed through the castle.

Now, nitpicks first so I can get on to the praise:

He quickly passed the room the required three times... I'm guessing that should be the room HE required.

...that is so unlike you.” Salazar taunted. Should be a comma after you, not a period.

And I think there probably should be quotations around Crucio, though it's also emphatic for the scream for them not to be there. /crit

Now, this was very, very short, but I find nothing wrong with that. It's the culmination of a long ordeal, and I think this is pretty spectacular. Godric seemed to go a bit over the top with calling Salazar a coward so many times, but I think it's completely in character for him to do that.

And the end was pretty amazing. That Godric pulled out the Cruciatus Curse was shocking, and his own horror and shame at its ultimate results was so perfect for the end of this story about two friends who fell out. I give this a flipping ten! And I'm going to add it to my favorites.

Author's Response: Mar, I have no idea how to respond to this. Thank you so much for the kind words. I was shocked by Godric as well, but I loved the idea of him coming up with the Cruciatus Curse, because it is so different and unexpected. I went back and read through it and I agree that I probably could have found a better word other than "coward" to use. Thanks so much for the review and favorite!!

Author's Response: I went back a reread the first section too and the sentence is correct. It should be "He quickly passed the room THE required three times..." because in order to use the room of requirements you have to pass it three separate times. Thanks!

Name: Cherry and Phoenix Feather (Signed) · Date: 07/29/06 1:24 · For: The Duel
Wow. Just...wow.

I've never read a satisfactory magical duel before, Amy...but this is great. You managed to convey their emotions and personalities extremely well through the insults they traded. Also, you could tell that they were both proud and noble men, in that they didn't stoop to below-the-belt insults.

“You will face me and me alone Salazar. No creatures to do your dirty work for you.” I found this line deliciously ironic, as we all know about the Chamber of Secrets.

I like the little tidbits you threw in about the Founders and their deeds. Helga most certainly would have been the one to suggest the no-Apparition charm, as it it is a very...practical idea. Salazar inventing "Impedimenta" was a nice touch, as well--reminded me of Harry trying to use "Sectumsempra" on Snape.

Godric inventing "Crucio"...oh, Amy. That's absolutely delicious in terms of story, but it makes me feel very hollow and sad inside. Which, of course, means that it's absolutely fabulously written. That is something that not many writers would have thought of, since Godric is the Founder we like to think of as the good, noble one--it was a lovely bit of "dark side" characterization you threw in there. And it was brave of you as well, I think. Not many people would want to read such a thing about our beloved Godric Gryffindor. But then again, not many people would write a fic prominently featuring abortion, either (did I mention that I absolutely adore and really, really respect you for writing that?), but you always go the extra mile with your subject matter.

A very well-done fic, and it's going into my Favorites.


Author's Response: Liz, I have no words. Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Not surprisingly, Severus was my inspiration for Salazar, simply with more pride. The line you quoted above is one of my favorites in the whole story.
You know I couldn't help but put our dear Helga into this story. Helga is the more practical one of the bunch. As for Godric, I've always thought there was a darker side to him, as there is to everyone. He and Salazar were best friends and I've never seen Salazar as completely good. I think the darker side of Salazar appealed to Godric. I just loved the idea that the brave Gryffindor is the one who created such a horrible and damaging curse.
Thank you very much Liz. I only hope my other stories will be able to live up to this review. I am still pretty much speechless.

Name: mgle_teacher (Signed) · Date: 07/27/06 1:23 · For: The Duel
You know...you should really consider continuing this plot. It's quite interesting.
I was surprised that you chose to have Godric Gryffindor be the creator of the Cruciatus Curse. That's quite original. I loved it.
I wonder are the other unforgiveable actions the two other curses? And why did Salazar leave? Because of the pureblood vs. muggleborns/halfbloods being allowed into Hogwarts?
Again...good job. Loved it.

Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful words. I was surprised at Godric being the creator of the Cruciatus Curse as well. I thanked my Muse for that little bit of inspiration. As for the other unforgiveable actions, I was refering to the Unforgiveable Curses, but I'm not sure how complete the list is at this point. Probably the Imperius is on there, not sure if AK has been invented yet. Why Salazar left is anybody's guess, but yes, this was his break with the school and his friends forever. Personally, I think there is a little more to it than the pureblood vs. muggleborn issue. Unfortunately, JKR is the only one who knows for sure. Thanks for taking the time to review!

Name: Emily_the_Poet (Signed) · Date: 07/26/06 23:46 · For: The Duel
You were very creative. The spells were a nice touch and so was the confrontation. I never thought there final confrontation could be so, for lack of a better word, difficult. I always imagined Salazar just slipping away. I also didn't think Godric would be so forceful in trying to get him to stay.

Your story was wonderful, and your ending had a finality to it that was difficult to describe. I enjoyed it very much.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I had never thought much about how things worked out between Godric and Salazar, but I had a feeling that Godric (being the reckless Gryffindor he is) wouldn't simply let his best friend slip away. I didn't intend for Godric to be so forceful, just adament in trying to work things out. I see him as being very loyal to his friends, I think that is why I put him with Helga. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for taking the time to review!

Name: Alanius (Signed) · Date: 07/26/06 4:06 · For: The Duel
A bit ... short.
Worth reading, though.

Author's Response: Thanks.

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