Reviews For A Fair to Remember
Reviewer: BookofSecrets
Date: 09/20/08 12:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

You've done a really nice job of setting up this story. I am definitely interested in finding out how the following chapters will play out.

You have done a particularly nice job with characterization and adhering the canon characterization at that, and you've done so while still holding my interest. 

I hope to see in future chapters that you have diverged from the tried and true details pertaining to each character to further develop each one. For instance, I think it would be far more interesting to see Ginny beef up her hex arsenal with more than just a great Bat-Bogey hex. 

I also like that in the beginning of the story you created a really tense scene to get things off with a bang. What struck me, though, as really skillful was that you then turned around and balanced out that tension with some stabs at humor. The line about Arthur Weasley and Hermione and the cotton candy gave me a good snicker! I'm really looking forward to more storytelling after the style you've started out with!

Reviewer: Pinkcess of the Abyss
Date: 09/19/08 4:34
Chapter: Chapter 11

Hey, I've read the entire thing, but I'm reviewing this chapter because it has the least reviews. *laughs*

I really enjoyed this little story! It's light and fun, but it still has actual substance. I loved the OC Daisy, which is rare for me, my only issue is Olive skin, but that's just this thing I have. (I'm pretty sure Olives are green and I know Olive is a term used for lightly tanned, sort of, but I still see green people whenever someone says that.) You really can ignore that though; I'm just strange.

I have a little critique that I feel you should know, if only for future knowlege. It is just English stuff really.

First of all, we don't have bills. We don't even call them bills. We call them notes. So, you'd have a 5 pound note, which is the equiverlant of a 10 dollar bill. That is the smallest note we have. Our "equiverlant" of a one dollar bill is a 1 pound coin, which is actually worth two dollars. (Just so you can get the amount things cost into perspective, although England is usually more expensive. As a rule we don't really have big wads of notes/bills, and at fairs it would tend to be heavy buckets of coins.

Another thing that isn't really important, but I figured I'd tell you anyway. Cotten Candy is called Candy floss in England. I don't think we have funnel cakes at all. I've only ever seen them in America, but they might be in England now. (In all fairness my local fair wasn't all that great...) You didn't put it in, but we don't really have corndogs either... Just on an interest note. Oh, the trash can is called the rubbish bin!

I've only really told you the terms because it might be useful in further stories, the only thing that actually bugged me was the "two bils" to pay the game. Call it English pride, we really do love our pounds. I would advise on some stories to get an "English" beta, those who can change terms for you to make your story more authentic for being set in England. You'd be suprised at how many differances there are.

I really do hope you write that spin off with Daisy. I can't wait to read it! It sounds like it should be a fun read. Great job! Take care xx Chicky.

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/04/08 15:20
Chapter: Chapter 2

good chapter, but i bet it gets better!!

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/04/08 15:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

good first chapter. im not sure if thats exactly how the bat-boogey hex works, but thats ok. i think snape is good though! and i hope harry changes his mind about him!!

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 03/04/08 15:06
Chapter: Chapter 1

i dont get how this is AU but i quess i''ll find out...oh! and i dont think that snape is bad!! and i hope that u dont either!

Reviewer: lilyevans489
Date: 01/06/08 0:14
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was good. That was Great. The only thing tha could make it better would be a SEQUEL!

Please don't leave everyone hanging! This is a great fic that could go so much futher...

Reviewer: Astronomygirl
Date: 11/17/07 17:22
Chapter: Chapter 6

Tell me ab out it. Boys can be so
confusing sometimes! I like a boy in my class, but I don't know if he likes me back, because he keeps sending me notes in class, then he acts like theres nothing going on, when I pl;ainly know there is! Ugggggh! Well, anyway, the chapter was great. I really liked it. please keep it up.

Reviewer: Astronomygirl
Date: 11/17/07 16:52
Chapter: Chapter 4

Wow, I can't believe that a muggle actually saw Freg and George disapparate. That sure was a twist in the story. Well, anyway, I still like the story so far. Please keep it up, but I only ask that you don't have Harry loose his temper with Ginny again.

Reviewer: singeroftheheart
Date: 08/07/07 0:14
Chapter: Chapter 12

wut? u cant just end it there. thats stupid. i liked it but it was stupid to just end it w/ ppl wondering. unless ur gona write another one....

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 07/27/07 13:18
Chapter: Chapter 12

This is a wonderful story, please write that spin off of Fred George and Daisy!!

Reviewer: potterscouse
Date: 07/22/07 16:48
Chapter: Chapter 12

bit boring, patchy, very inconsistent, pls dont write anymore


Author's Response: Wow. What a well-thought out review. Nice.

Reviewer: simplegirl
Date: 06/27/07 7:53
Chapter: Chapter 12

was this the last chapter?
hope not.
liked it.

Reviewer: moon_girl_175
Date: 05/31/07 13:06
Chapter: Chapter 12

thaat was so cool. are you having a sequel? I hope so.

Reviewer: jakgarden
Date: 04/01/07 14:54
Chapter: Chapter 6

They are in England. they would call cigarettes "fags". other than that I am enjoying the story.

Reviewer: amy14
Date: 11/26/06 6:28
Chapter: Chapter 12

Are you planning on a sequel? Pleeease?

Reviewer: Moony 62442
Date: 11/19/06 18:00
Chapter: Chapter 12

I didn't mean that as a 3-way ship by the way! Yuck, that would be gross. (no offense to people who write those types of things!)
~Moony

Reviewer: Moony 62442
Date: 11/19/06 17:58
Chapter: Chapter 12

You should do a sequel! That was great. Poor Harry... Oh, but just so you know, Remus says Voldemort's name. Sorry, just thought that you may want to know. Anyway, great job and good luck with your Fred/George/Daisy fic!
~Moony

Author's Response: I'd originally had Lupin say "Voldemort", but thought perhaps I'd have him say something else, because of present company. But I went back and changed it, because it DID sound better. Thanks! And THANK YOU for ALL of your reviews for this story! :)

Reviewer: EmilyJayne
Date: 11/14/06 9:46
Chapter: Chapter 11

Your getting there! Keep it coming!

Reviewer: Indigoenigma
Date: 11/11/06 0:05
Chapter: Chapter 10

Goodness, this is really shaping up into something interesting! Thanks for updating!

Reviewer: Indigoenigma
Date: 11/11/06 0:04
Chapter: Chapter 10

Goodness, this is really shaping up into something interesting! Thanks for updating!

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