First off, I want to say that I can't believe this story only has a few reviews! It's very good, and I, personally, can't believe that I hadn't read it.
Next, like I said, I really liked this story a lot, and I think you did a very good job in making it believable and emotional, though its length was short. The story isn't bogged down too much with rambling details, yet there is still enough there to create a vivid-enough scene description and whatnot, so I want to applaud you on achieving that.
Also, Adela Jackson is a wonderful character. I found it very easy to relate to her feelings of loneliness in this story, like when she's looking through the photo album and, slowly, becoming more and more depressed as her thoughts dwell on those she's lost. The scenes were done remarkably well.
My favourite part, however, is definitely the ending bit. I absolutely loved the part where she climbs into bed fully clothed and covers herself. "She just wanted to sleep, because in her dreams, no one was dead. In her dreams, she wasn’t alone." I think that was the most vivid part of the story, for me anyways, mostly because it is so real, if you know what I mean. That particular bit makes Adela seem realistically believable and incredibly human; well done!
Also, in mentioning the ending, I have to say that the scene with her grandmother was done well. The last paragraph, particularly, is wonderful, and I just love the last sentences; they really pull at a reader's emotions and soul -- ... she was strong enough to overcome whatever life threw at her, even loneliness. It was the one word that gave Adela hope. By mentioning that hope in the very end, you give the reader a sense of relief, because they see that she's not just condemned to despair forever ... there is a good ending to the story.
All in all, well done, Melissa, and a late congratulations on this wonderful entry winning.
Author's Response: -squees- Long review! Thank you so much for all your comments- it means a lot! I'm glad you liked it, and a huge thanks for taking the time to review! :]
This was very poignantly written. I really felt for Adela and the ending was very satisfying. I feel happy, oh so happy...
-runs off humming-
P.S. Review 1 of 2 for August Review Challenge Prize.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, Kumy! :]
That was touching. A very thoughful and provacative view of a person with so much loneliness in her life it overwhelms her... I had a phase like tha, though not nearly as extreme.
I felt I could really relate to your wonderful story.
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you liked it; I was trying to make it relatable. Thanks for reviewing. =]
That was very beautiful. I loved the scene when she is crying in bed. Very real - very good. Wonderful! :D
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it.
First review for first story!! *squees* It's really good!!!
Author's Response: Yay, my first review! Glad you liked it. =]