Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil
Date: 08/11/06 18:43
Chapter: A Meeting

Great story! I like how you give us all the background information. You also have some good details. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thank you, I was aiming to try and fill in a lot of the blanks that Harry doesn't see, without contradicting the books. Hope you'll keep reading it, the next chapter has been submitted for validation so will be up soon.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil
Date: 08/03/06 11:58
Chapter: A New Recruit

This is a good story. You are undoubtably a talented writer. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks very much :)

Reviewer: Starmaiden
Date: 08/02/06 23:03
Chapter: A New Recruit

Well done! I have to tell you that I attempted to write this scene a long time ago and failed miserably. You, on the other hand, have pulled it off quite well.

I quite like the double-teaming that Kingsley and Arthur pull on Tonks. Great attention to detail ("Don't ring the doorbell", the fact that the Ministry technology is always behind non-government life, the false lead on the highly wanted criminal). The memo that starts the chapter is excellent -- just the right tone of pompous nonsense, with a touch of legalese.

One minor point: Arthur Weasley usually refers to You-Know-Who, and flinches when Harry says "Voldemort." I don't know if the others use his real name, but I don't think so.

Good job on the characterisation and pretty much everything. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! And especially thanks for the heads up about Arthur - I'll have to go back and edit that!

Reviewer: num
Date: 08/02/06 22:20
Chapter: A New Recruit

This is a lovely story. It's fantastic to read something that stays true to the books! Please update as soon as u can

Author's Response: Thanks, I work very hard at staying true to canon. Any slips you notice I will be happy to hear about! I will update very soon - probably today ;)

Reviewer: MoonysMistress
Date: 08/02/06 20:56
Chapter: A New Recruit

Ooh, good characterization! They're all very well in-character. And great use of canon! Plus, it's Remus/Tonks...who could resist? I'll add this to my favorites and keep an eye on it! :)

Author's Response: Thanks a lot, hope you continue to read and enjoy this one!

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil
Date: 07/30/06 12:50
Chapter: A New War

I agree that this is a great beginning. You have very good descriptions. Keep updating!

Author's Response: Thank you! Updates on their way :)

Reviewer: travelgirl
Date: 07/30/06 10:46
Chapter: A New War

great begining. Very descriptive of emtions.

Author's Response: Thank you - I really try hard to get inside the characters' heads and show their emotions.

Reviewer: harryforever
Date: 07/30/06 9:55
Chapter: A New War

This was a really great intro.. all of the characters seemed so true to the books.. it was awesome! I also have to say that I am a HUGE Tonks/Remus fan, and i can't wait until this is updated... great job!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot, I'm glad you like it so far!

Reviewer: silver_tears
Date: 07/30/06 8:35
Chapter: A New War

I'm glad to read a brilliantly written first chapter, with buckets of potential. And it's also interesting to read the missing scene before Book 5.

The characterisation is awesome -- well done. I liked the idea of seeing more of Sirius *sniff* and Dumbledore again.

Also you did a fantastic job in writing the beginning of the plot -- One could never get too much Lupin/Tonks.

Well done and keep up the good work! :)


Author's Response: Thank you very much! I have submitted chapter 2 and have several more already written so keep reading!

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