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Name: Celestial Melody (Signed) · Date: 08/01/06 20:11 · For: Isis
It's interesting...I've never read this kind of story before; it definitely is original. Yes, you are right...Isis is usually portrayed as the benevolent type--the mother and all that. Here, however, she seems more like Bellatrix Lestrange than the Mother of the Fertile Nile.
It's an odd character twist...but it involves many of the deities of Egyptian mythology and I really like that, :).

Name: Celestial Melody (Signed) · Date: 08/01/06 20:04 · For: Prologue
Ooh, he's cruel...even to those who follow him the closest. Poor Bellatrix; she really needs to find someone who will appreciate her.
So, I'm assuming this is the first "meeting" of the Death Eaters? Or, rather, the time that Voldemort and Bellatrix recruit them? So this means that...wow, the whole gang is here! Lucius, Peter, Crabbe and Goyle, Rookwood; what about Bellatrix' husband? Is he here, too?
Overall, very effective. And it ties in well with what Bellatrix screams at the Ministry in the fifth book; when they take she, her husband, Barty Crouch Jr., and one other to Azkaban.
She says that she was the Dark Lord's most faithful/loyal Death Eater. I like how you've tied into that, :).
Bellatrix is portrayed very well here, too. She is insanely loyal...almost to the point of obsession. Kudos to you!

Name: Sekhmet (Signed) · Date: 07/28/06 16:16 · For: Isis
*Revels in the ancient mythology* I love it! What a beautifully crafted chapter. Your praise of my own story means so much more to me now. I am thoroughly fascinated! I can't wait to see what you have in store!

I really love the way you make the gods come to life. I was so amused to see that the young magician sending the message to Isis was Thoth! To think of the god of wisdom as a young boy just cracks me up. I also really love the way you have incorporated those ancient words into the story, too. It gives it so much more depth, I think.

I'm intrigued to see why Re was so distrubed by Isis' warning. I'll be waiting on tenterhooks for the next chapter!

Author's Response: *giggles* I like Thoth as a young boy too. Thanks so much!

Name: Sekhmet (Signed) · Date: 07/28/06 15:53 · For: Prologue
I am terribly excited about this story you have cooking here. I LOVE ancient egypt. I have a fair amount of knowledge of the mythology. I am fascinated to see what you are going to do with it.

I love the way you set the stage for this historical fic. Your descriptions were so vivid. Your beginning is wonderful!

Author's Response: Hehe I think my beginning is the best chapter of the entire story xD Thanks though!

Name: 90glassslippers (Signed) · Date: 07/24/06 16:14 · For: Prologue
Hmmm... Intriging

Name: sayiansirius (Signed) · Date: 07/23/06 13:33 · For: Prologue
Wow this was very good Beth. The style of writing is good but I had to read a couple sentences over because I've never read a fic like this before. I like you wrote everything. The Death Eater's fear, Bellatrix showing "human" emotions. The only thing I actually wanted to see was Lucius...i'm guessing you'll introduce him later?

And if I'm not mistaken, because I still can't quite understand your summary, is this gonna be about Voldemort trying to take over?

I'll definately keep reading!

Author's Response: Why thank you! Truth be told, I think this is the best chapter out of the entire story...This is only a prologue that leads into the story.

No Lucius, I'm afraid.

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