I think your poem here is well done (and-- bonus points-- correct.) Super-duper. I was totally drawn into Snape's narrative. It was so delightfully... Snape-y! Bravo.
My only criticism-- the phrase 'until need be' in the third to last stanza has been used incorrectly. It needs an object. Its a pity since it fits in so perfectly.
More, more, more!
Author's Response: thanks!
Very good, but I still think Snape is evil.
Author's Response: Yeah, he probably is but what if he weren't?
Hmm...I don't know...Snape just...ugh! Nice job...
Author's Response: Thanks.