Cool as! I really like this, keep writing! well done, 10/10!!
Wow Sirius is a true friend only he would do that in a time of need lol. I wonder what Lilys group is gonna do to the Maruaders or if the Maruaders will get them first. Good Chapter
Let's see...sorry it took me so long to get to this. Wisconsin... *shrugs apologetically* The first thing- there's one spot were Marauders is lowercase. And then..."muggle-borned" You don't need the 'ed' at the end. And I hope you don't mean Molly Weasley? If you think about it, there's about three years between the time LIly gets out of school and she dies...Molly can't have seven kids in three years....it's impossible. Or if it isn't, it is for the Weasley's. There's more space between the kids. I suggest changing her name so people (like me hehe) dont' get confuzzled.
HAHAHA! The Sirius-smacking-James bit was good. Haha. And then the fight. Very nice. good cahpter. :-) What time do you have to be at Quick Start? I'm there 1.30-2.... ciao
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good but Work on your tenses :)
it very good, i loved it.
i really wanna read more of this, i loved the idea, you r a great writer, keep up the great work, and i hope i read more of it soon
Author's Response: Thanks a lot!
this was a really funny chapter, i liked your portrayal of all the different characters. they were perfectly in character, but it was still original. did that make any sense? well anyways great story, please update soon!
Author's Response: That made perfect sense..hehe..thanks so much!
It was okay, more good than bad. I think it should have been longer though, but good job still! Keep Writing!!!
Author's Response: I wished it was longer too...but I didn't really know how to start it off. I think my other chapters are longer though...Thanks for the review!
Great first chapter. I like how Slughorn gave Sirius props for his attempt at faking the potion lol. The title isn't refering to a love trinagle is it?
Author's Response: Thanks Ryan! Didnt u read the summary? Its going to be a crazy love triangle!
Yeah, I just reread the summary- it sounds veeerrrryy snazzy and catching. Good job! Now, you just have to live up to that name. Hahaa. You'll do fine. Congrats, by the way, Lils!
"He tall man wore his black...." I think that "he" should be "the". "Grindylow Love Potion" HAha. That was good. "Adding the wrong ingredients will get you now where." One word, one w. Also, "marauders" should be capitalized- it's a proper name- in this case, anyway. Um, also, Lily's not Head Girl? I appriciate the uniqueness, but I think everyone beleives that Lily's the Head Girl in her seventh year. Other then those few things, It was a great start, Lils. See, it didnt' take too long to get up. :-) I liked the few little jokes in it, like "shoe horn" and "Snevel Weivel" Hehe. Good job, I'll look forward to it...
Author's Response: Thanks Emmi..but dont count on it being good..you know how I procrastinate a lot..hehe