Reviews For Deus Ex Machina
Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 06/12/08 19:17
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

Ah, so thestrals came from a cruely treated Pegasi? What an excellent idea. Very well written. I always love having explanations of things, it's hard to just accept things as they are, so this is going on my mental 'gap fillers' list to explain the existance of thestrals.

Reviewer: BringPadfootBack
Date: 04/25/07 15:33
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

I'm sorry if this is offensive, but I really did not understand this story very well. How does it fit into the Maurader era?

Reviewer: crazy_purple_hp_freak
Date: 02/07/07 13:41
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

Wow! That was such an unusual but intriguing story! I only felt that I understood the concept of the Thestral right at the end, but I like the idea that Thestrals are derived somewhat from mythological creature such as the Pegasi. It gives them a more solid background, and in a way I feel as if I can understand their nature better.

I love the description and imagery in this story. It’s fantastic and extremely vivid – you’ve done a great job in setting the scene and also in picturing the horses.
We assumed that she found her end under the white foam on the breaking waves around our island.
This was such an intense line. I could really see in my mind the image of the waves lapping the shore, perhaps with shadows in the water.

Characterisation in this story was fab. Did you have a particular person in mind for Thais’ father? The first person perspective made events seem so realistic; it allowed us to see so many insights into Thais’ life, and that of her father.
I knew why Alkaios detested father, but I could only guess why father was able to keep him here. He had to know something about Alkaios’ past or some other secret this kind man was too ashamed of to tell me
This tells us straight away what sort of person the father is – he seems very nasty and manipulative, and from the references to drunkenness, I can see that he probably has quite a volatile temper too. I like the way that you add in repeated references to her father’s character, which builds up to give a powerful ending.

Apollo’s entry was a bit sudden but well timed. I’m slightly surprised that Thais didn’t question him or respond in any way. Was there no time perhaps?
“Photios is my creation and he must stay in this form to remind everyone what cruelty can cause. You, you’ll be free at last.” I wonder what he means by that last part. Does he mean that Thais is free from her father’s ‘tyranny’ over her/the household?

I love the ending of this story. They have white eyes and their skeletal bodies are as black as the night, a memory of the fateful night when Photios became the monster he is now. Though Thestrals, as we know in canon, are not really ‘bad’ creatures as such, I can understand why Thais calls him a ‘monster’. See Photios and the other Thestrals must indeed remind her of what ‘cruelty can cause’, and take her back to the time that Photios became this way. This part was just – wow.

Great story, *loves*
~Suzie

Reviewer: MorganRay
Date: 01/20/07 0:14
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

First, I really liked your descriptions in this piece. It was lovely, and you described everything so well that I could picture the Pegasus you described. Also, by contrasting the Threstals with the Pegasus, you created the theory that a Threstal is a dying, unhealthy Pegasus. The original take on mythology and magic was nice, but I don't know if you would consider Threstals monsters. They haven't been cruel to Harry or anyone, but if you look as Threstals as deformed and malnurished Pegasus, then, yes, I would say they might be considered monsters.

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 10/01/06 17:03
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

Wow. Cool take on how Thestrals became! I like how the characters are quite vague, but still profound, as is the story. It really sounds like a real Greek (Harry Potter-ish) myth! Also, it's good how the father is shown to be such a cruel man by side comments like the one on how he keeps Alkaios there. I do think that maybe Thais would be a bit more surprised to see Apollo appear, although I suppose with the father having just died and all the confusion and all... bit of a state of shock, huh? Anyway... good story!

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 10/01/06 17:03
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

Wow. Cool take on how Thestrals became! I like how the characters are quite vague, but still profound, as is the story. It really sounds like a real Greek (Harry Potter-ish) myth! Also, it's good how the father is shown to be such a cruel man by side comments like the one on how he keeps Alkaios there. I do think that maybe Thais would be a bit more surprised to see Apollo appear, although I suppose with the father having just died and all the confusion and all... bit of a state of shock, huh? Anyway... good story!

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 08/17/06 9:33
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

Joanna! I am so impressed - this was a lovely story! I loved how I kept being surprised by things - I was enjoying a story about horses, which I didn't expect in the first place :) and it turned out to be about Pegasus! And then I felt so sorry for Photios, you did a good job writing emotion into that situation. And finally the end - wow! Apollo - Thestrals! You never used the term, but it was a strong implication with great description. This was so refreshingly original - you are a wonderful writer. Keep it up and good luck with your future stories! ~Gina :)

Reviewer: Emily_the_Poet
Date: 08/01/06 1:00
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

Ah... the birth of threstrals. Very interesting Joanna. I particularly liked the use of Pegasus in the story. I was under the influence that pegasus is both the plural and the singular though. Guess I was wrong!

I liked how you built up to his death. I didn't realise until now that her mother forgot her wand as a punishment to Thais's father. I don't remember seeing how her brother died however.

Your portrayal of her father's death is rather confusing. I don't know what to suggest, but it made me go 'wait. What happened?' and then reread it. Other than that it was wonderful.

great job

Reviewer: GaryF
Date: 07/31/06 21:39
Chapter: Deus Ex Machina

Hello you! :-)

Somehow I came across this, and it's a wonderful story. I remember you telling me you wrote it.

I'd have liked more detail about the location, and more background on the characters to get a better feel for them, but still it was an enjoyable read.

Thank you and good morning.
I was impressed by your rdeus ex māchinā. Despite the title obviously hinting that there would be such an ending, I wasn't expecting a God to suddenly appear, which is always good.

Aren't Gods omniscient? I know I certainly am. Why does Apollo say "Apparantly" - there should be no apparent about it.

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