Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 07/26/06 17:28
Chapter: Saving Face

Oh poor Lucius! I didn't like Molly to start with, and you're giving me whole new reasons to dislike her. That was horrible! The baby could have been his. What right did she have to decide it was Arthur's and give him no say? Sorry, for the little rant, but as you can see, this chapter got to me. Very well done!

Author's Response: Well, Arthur is of age, and Arthur will not do anything drastic if the child doesn't particularly look like him, and Molly is being both practical and sensible. She can't go by love, because she loves both. So -- she's going for the guaranteed good father of the two. At the moment, Lucius is a minor and has little say in any decisions of this sort, and he is, after all, Lucius. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: fawkes_07
Date: 07/26/06 15:39
Chapter: Saving Face

OUCH!

Didn't see Malfoy's ring coming at all.

Great story.

Author's Response: You really didn't? Cool. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: 90glassslippers
Date: 07/26/06 15:11
Chapter: Saving Face

I saw it coming. Lucius needs to grow up and get a life. Everyone gets heart broken. It is unavoidable.

Author's Response: Well, yes, and everyone has to respond to it for a while, too. He didn't see it coming, or refused to -- I thought one of Lucius Malfoy's defining traits was seeing the world as he wished it to be for his convenience. Cold hard reality could only come as a shock. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 07/26/06 1:27
Chapter: Snowed In

Well, this could certainly explain some of the hostility between Lucius and Arthur. This is a different take on Lucius and Molly, I have never read anything quiet like it.

Author's Response: You betcha it could! Thanks for the review -- again! I don't think I've seen anything quite like it either, so had to try it myself once the bunny came along.

Reviewer: 90glassslippers
Date: 07/25/06 23:13
Chapter: Snowed In

Molly! That naughty girl!

Author's Response: Sad to say, it's fun to be a naughty girl for a bit, and potentially addictive. For Molly to be as protective a mother as she is, I thought she might have needed a little experience in being naughty in her past. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 07/25/06 23:11
Chapter: Sampling

Wow! When I'm reading this I forget that these people are actually Lucius and Molly! You write their young versions very different from the adults we meet later on. But it's all very very interesting!

Author's Response: Hmm. I'm trying to decide if that's bad or good -- they may have changed a lot, or they may be OOC. *think, think* Hopefully you still find them vaguely plausible as younger versions of tough-but-kind Molly and manipulative Lucius. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: gryffindorgoddess36
Date: 07/25/06 22:16
Chapter: Snowed In

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Author's Response: Wild! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 07/25/06 21:33
Chapter: Snowed In

Just so you'll know I read it. I honestly don't know what to say. Well, other than "Does Arthur think they are exclusive?..."

ProfPosky

Author's Response: At what point in time? comes the answer. Good to see you here -- do you see any good Greek influences floating about?

Reviewer: fishy girl
Date: 07/25/06 19:09
Chapter: Scheming

woha!!!!! that is the wierdest combo of people in the history of the world!!! who would of thought?

Author's Response: I, apparently. Thanks for reviewing; I love digging up a rarepair and trying to make it work. Readers of these efforts are appreciated hugely.

Reviewer: fawkes_07
Date: 07/25/06 18:58
Chapter: Snowed In

Boy, I have a bad feeling about how this is all going to end...

Author's Response: Can't be good, can it? *chuckle* Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: BlondieFangurl
Date: 07/25/06 18:57
Chapter: Snowed In

hahahaha, Lucius is so naive. Even more than me. *sigh* Not really.

Author's Response: He has his moments, no? I believe the word is 'hubris' in his case -- that overconfidence the gods simply must shoot down for good balance and Greek literature.

Reviewer: queenofdarkness111
Date: 07/25/06 3:11
Chapter: Stalking

great!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: queenofdarkness111
Date: 07/25/06 3:01
Chapter: Scheming

wow!sure didnt c DAT coming. nywayz full points for imagination

Author's Response: Thanks! I do tend to put the oddest people together and try to make it work.

Reviewer: 90glassslippers
Date: 07/24/06 17:56
Chapter: Sampling

I agree with the idea that Lucius fanced Molly, but I doubt that Molly would have the heart to cheat on Arthur.

Author's Response: But would she have the heart to turn down someone so clearly besotted with her? Thanks for reviewing, and I'm glad Lucius, at least, seemed within his character.

Reviewer: BlondieFangurl
Date: 07/24/06 17:30
Chapter: Sampling

I don`t know how you can write them together without it ending like a crack pairing. Also, it makes sense if you read the beginning of CoS.

Author's Response: CoS did indeed inform this little romance. The end will be posted soon, and you can decide whether or not it is crack -- but I'm aiming for not. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: BlondieFangurl
Date: 07/21/06 15:06
Chapter: Stalking

Lucius reminds me of myself. So much you had me blushing with similar memories, especially the unsent letters. Good that you wrote him in a nice light. Though my hair is radioactive blonde, I must say I wish it wasn`t so out of controll.

Author's Response: I had such fun trying to imagine Lucius at sixteen or so. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: BlondieFangurl
Date: 07/21/06 14:21
Chapter: Scheming

I knew it was Molly the second I read the red hair part. But we all know how this will turn out.

Author's Response: *cackles* Thanks for reviewing! It isn't the end, so much as the journey...

Reviewer: wishiwereaweasley
Date: 07/20/06 19:36
Chapter: Scheming

Oh joy! I am a huge fan of the Blue Eyes series, as unorthodox as it is. I would never have thought up this pairing, but that just makes it better, and it creates a lovely irony. To think that both Lucius and Draco fall for Weasleys Or Prewetts, rather.



I have a little difficulty seeing Lucius pining after someone, but there are already signs of it being more of an unhealthy obsession type of thing, and that is something I can easily see.



A couple of my favourite bits, because those are always good to hear:



Gregory Crabbe was older and bigger, but had all the brains of a Muggle farmer’s dung-fork. I actually laughed out loud. Trust Lucius to know nothing about Muggles than that their farmers have dung forks. The only makes the insult more effective. Oh, and are we to assume from this that Vincent Goyle was Greg Crabbe's good friend and they named their sons after each other? You have no idea how odd it is to see Gregory with Crabbe. In fact, the whole scene with the chocolate was great. I like your Andromeda quite a lot.



Everything Lucius goes through to rationalize his feelings is just perfect. He keeps getting more and more desperate. I loved his thoughts about Arthur: a hopeless enough prospect by any reasonable and adult standard but competition all the same. A little harsh, perhaps, but very like Lucius. And the offense of her name. What a terrible common name Molly is! I have to admit. Molly Malfoy is pretty awful.



At the risk of being annoyingly nitpicky (and actually I only found this one thing!), here's my one thing: They visibly filed away the lesson: bargain, politely, with Lucius, even if he is younger and smaller than yourself. I do love this sentence, but the commas around 'politely' were really distracting to me. If the goal was to emphasize 'politely' you could maybe italicise it. *shrug* Just a suggestion.



In more general comments...your writing is simply fabulous. Everything flows incredibly smoothly. Especially your transitions. Example (so I can attempt to make myself clear): Most people would just have started with Lucius thinking about Molly. But you started with Lucius bothering Crabbe and led into it that way. It makes it more natural and shows more about his character at the same time.



Interesting quotes at the beginning, too, I'm interested to see more of what they'll mean as the fic progresses. Oh! And do I detect a bit of Shakespeare at the end there?

Author's Response: Good call on Crabbe and Goyle -- it amused me to believe they've been doing this for generations with the first son every time. Best-friendship, and a certain absence of creativity, in the genes.

I started writing the scene with the fudge just to set up the character of Lucius at that age, devious and rather nasty but also under all those pressures of Slytherin House to keep position and save face. Falling for a Gryffindor with nothing going for her but the fact that she's sweet enough to give him a chance is threatening to that position and that face-saving; he's going to need to be very careful if he does want this girl. If he has to strut his stuff this much over a bit of candy, what would he have to be willing to go through to actually pursue Molly? Of course, I also started writing this scene because Lucius was being coy about who, exactly, his first love was. I had to write quite a while before getting the soft red hair and the fact that Arthur already was dating her. Meanwhile interesting things were happening, so I kept them. Thanks for the review!


Author's Response: Good call on Crabbe and Goyle -- it amused me to believe they've been doing this for generations with the first son every time. Best-friendship, and a certain absence of creativity, in the genes.

I started writing the scene with the fudge just to set up the character of Lucius at that age, devious and rather nasty but also under all those pressures of Slytherin House to keep position and save face. Falling for a Gryffindor with nothing going for her but the fact that she's sweet enough to give him a chance is threatening to that position and that face-saving; he's going to need to be very careful if he does want this girl. If he has to strut his stuff this much over a bit of candy, what would he have to be willing to go through to actually pursue Molly? Of course, I also started writing this scene because Lucius was being coy about who, exactly, his first love was. I had to write quite a while before getting the soft red hair and the fact that Arthur already was dating her. Meanwhile interesting things were happening, so I kept them. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 07/20/06 18:03
Chapter: Stalking

Nice! Awkward Lucius is adorable! And I love that Molly nicknamed him Lucifer. This is very amusing. Well done, as always.

Author's Response: I'll keep writing it: being sixteen is horribly awkward no matter who you are. Even Lucius needed practice before he could talk anyone into anything, though Molly is having her own difficulties with being eighteen and flattered. *Visualizes what Lucius would have to say about being 'adorable' and laughs* Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: fawkes_07
Date: 07/20/06 16:17
Chapter: Stalking

Ooh, that silver-tongued you-know-what! Yikes! Love it!

Author's Response: He's working on that silver tongue, at least, when he hasn't put footprints on it. I'm glad you're enjoying the read!

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