it's good! I like it! I'm a poet... sorta, lol. I don't like my poems, but my friends do, lol. and this is definetly poet material!

Author's Response: thanks!

This was an interesting poem. I have a few suggestions, though. These are just an opinions, and I'm not saying my way is right. Here they are:

1) If I were you I would't have put so much space between the lines. I wouldn't have put any space between the lines, and only one blank line between each of the stanzas. But that's just me.

2) I have a question about one of the lines in your poem. It reads: I told him I wouldn’t. I was wondering if you ment to say I told him IT wouldn't. I enterpreted your meaning as she was saying she wouldn't break up with him. My way means that breaking up wouldn't protect her. Either way is fine, though.

3) Ok, last of all I'm just verifying. Her scar is a broken heart, correct?

Author's Response: thanks for the suggestions. when i wrote it there weren't that many spaces, i don't know what happend. Yeah, her scar is her broken heart.

this is great it made me cry. i luv it.

Author's Response: wow, thank you!