Reviewer: Afifa
Date: 04/03/08 6:22
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

omg! It's awesome! Sirius-ly. No flaws or anything. It's perfect and bloody hillarious! =D I just can't seem to stop laughing. And I absolutely love Ron's essay. =)

Reviewer: StrangeBella
Date: 12/02/07 17:12
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

This is one of the better short stories I've read so far. I love Ron's essay! Nice and creative. Keep writing!

Reviewer: I_LUV_MOONY
Date: 08/06/07 18:46
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

Ha ha, very nice! Certainly made me laugh! I hope Ron has finally learned his lesson about copying homework.

Reviewer: izzyblue24
Date: 02/04/07 10:52
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

That was really good I liked it a lot! keep up the good work!

Reviewer: Fauna
Date: 08/07/06 21:05
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

That was funny.

Reviewer: lildommi
Date: 07/29/06 3:50
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

cool story

Reviewer: Sperk Carm Evans
Date: 07/19/06 19:53
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

WOW!!! I loved it.. definately!!!!! It's... incredible haha a recipie of how to make a Gryffindor... that's what I call greatness and creativity in all of it's glory!!!!!

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 07/18/06 18:24
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

Lol. I loved Ron's "essay" ... recipe at the end! Short, funny story.

Reviewer: kumydabookworm
Date: 07/17/06 21:09
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

I loved the imagery in the beginning. I also liked how you fit Harry into the "fine, I'll let you look at my essay" personality that we usually think of Hermione as. This was very, very funny, and a cute portrayal of us lovely Gryffindors.

One problem I noticed was that I'm SURE that Snape would have found an excuse to give Harry a detention along with Ron, and that didn't happen in the story.

Wonderful piece (could we expect any less from you, Beth?).

Kumy

Author's Response: Hehe, you're right. Snape would've found a way, but he'd have to sit down and read the entire essay.

"Ah ha! Harry's 'G' in this sentence is crooked! Detention!"

Thanks so much!

Reviewer: Lainie xox
Date: 07/17/06 17:31
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

Aawwww. That was good! I haven't read anything humourous in a while, and yours was just great.

One nitpicky thing though.. wasn't it due at midnight on Friday.. so well, it depends on how you define it I guess. And depends on how teachers seriously mean "at midnight". Hah.

Very good read indeed. I loved your easy description, great characterization (especially of Ron), and how everything looks like you did it quite effortlessly. =)

Author's Response: Ah I was trying my hardest to show how ridiculous Snape was to expect an essay at midnight :)

I find Ron the easiest to characterize. Glad to know I can do so relatively well!

Reviewer: hogwartsduchess
Date: 07/17/06 13:43
Chapter: The Perfect Gryffindor Spirit

Iíll see the two of you later after dinner. This sentence sound awkward, Beth. I'd remove the later or the after dinner, because both together just sound odd.

Other than that, I loved it. An excellent response to your own challenge. I particularly liked the part about the toast!

Toasters for the Cup!

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I've corrected the offending sentence :D

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