Beautiful. I liked the scheme of it. I think it portrays Ginny's feelings perfectly. I was just wondering what Harry had hated to see.
Excerpt: But your eyes intimidated
So sure, so strong, burned and hated
What they'd seen.
What did Harry hate to see there? (Sorry if this is a dumb question. I bet the answer is obvious.)
I like this poem, BUT (of course - always a but) I think in some places you could have added more detail. But since this is a poem, that isn't really needed. So that is just my opinion.
Also: Somewhere it says
I like it!
I like it!
I liked it. I thought it was good how you rhymed it, but it didn't sound like that first grade rhyming, it sounded professional. You're really good!
I really liked this poem. I liked the pattern, long line, short line. That was cool. I just didn't like the last 4 lines. But besides that it was great.
Author's Response: really? the last 4 lines are my favorite! lol
wow very nice.
this poem flows very well.
keep up the good work!
Oh my god. This is brilliant. I have gooseflesh popping down my arms now. That's meant as a compliment, by the way. It always happens when I'm reading something great.