Reviewer: kelly_58
Date: 06/02/07 17:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

you got your character's name from a '
'great and terrible beauty' correct?
love the story!

Reviewer: anvil sized hint
Date: 09/23/06 10:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

AWW! It's so good yet so sad at the same time. :) I love how Luna was in the story. It is so sad how you feel the character's pain. It's so powerful.

Reviewer: Sneaky_Rhae
Date: 08/13/06 21:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

Sorry that this is so very late.

I thought that this was a very sentimental and poignant story. Often we do not realize the gravity of our actions when we are young and end up regretting things. It is lucky that Jemina has a grandmother that is willing to share with her the life lessons she has learned. I also like how you tied Luna into this, she is one of my favorite characters.

Minor quibbles, you switch from "Mom" to "Mum" and have a "had" where there should be a "was" but overall I think this is great!

Reviewer: nikkiolapotter
Date: 07/19/06 19:02
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great story, but the beginning didn't really catch my attention. Good job in description!

Reviewer: Willow Rosenberg
Date: 07/19/06 17:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aw, Luna. Love.

Hey-did you get Jemina's name from "A Great and Terrible Beauty'? Love that book. :-)

Author's Response: That is exactly where I got her name.

Reviewer: Harriet
Date: 07/19/06 17:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

Gemma Doyle is a character in the book A Great and Terrible Beauty, did you know that? No time now, but I would like to read your story later!

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 07/19/06 16:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

Short and sweet. Okay, not sweet exactly, but a very good story. You did use "mOm" once and "mUm" once, too, but that's really a small thing. I would've liked a bit more background information, perhaps, on the relationship between the girl and her grandmother as well as between Lana and Luna. I like the emotions of the old woman who hasn't fogiven herself for something she did so long ago mixed with the emotions of Jemina.

Reviewer: Leahr
Date: 07/19/06 16:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

Awww, that's really sad. But where was Ginny in all this? Didn't she defend Luna? And why hadn't she seen Luna for that long, then? Great story.

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