Reviews For Deal Me In
Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie
Date: 08/18/07 17:28
Chapter: Deal Me In

Whilst perusing your fic list, I was having trouble picking which fic to read first, because I adore the Black brothers and there was just so much love screaming to be clicked on. But eventually I decided on this one, eager to see how you would portray Orion and Sirius together.

I love the idea of them playing cards. I don’t know why, I just do. I think perhaps it’s a tad unlikely Orion would play somewhere like The Leaky Cauldron, though; in my mind, he would want to be somewhere more…respectable, I guess, more high-end. Obviously we don’t know if somewhere like that exists, but it would be interesting to explore. Anyway, the cards. You start us off wondering what Orion is trying not to think about. And then Sirius comes. I love that he’s ‘sitting…where Regulus should have been.’ Just that little detail adds in a whole new dimension to what Orion is feeling, and to the relationship Sirius and Regulus had.

The little touch about Orion’s heart attacks was awesome. It starts out teasing, but shifts to morose, what with him worrying about his sons. And Sirius asking about him worrying about him. Oh man. But then, of course, the mood quickly turns uncomfortable. I love the bit about people like Andromeda, Alphard, and Regulus being able to hold Sirius back. It’s very telling.

Cygnus is an excellent character to have included, I think. Because he’s there to bring up all the uncomfortable things, like Regulus’s funeral. In spite of himself, a smile tugged at one corner of Orion’s mouth. Sirius wouldn’t send his brother off in a conventional way, but he would send him. Perfect, I love that. And, as an aside, I also love that perhaps Remus liked Regulus, at least sometimes.

My only critique for this has to do with the interactions between Sirius and Orion. I feel like maybe they’re too readily open with each other. And it probably has to do mostly with my own interpretations of their characters, but I think they would be more guarded with each other. Angrier, even. To me, Orion seemed too much like a real father to Sirius, when in actuality he hadn’t seen Sirius in years. I think their encounter would probably have been a tad more awkward, bordering a thin line; Sirius would have been more cynical and sarcastic. But again, it could just be my ideas of Orion and Sirius respectively.

Grammatically, this is great. I really love your writing as well. Keep it up! I’ll have to read more of your fics in the future, for sure.

Reviewer: Crysta_bell
Date: 08/11/06 6:55
Chapter: Deal Me In

i really liked that, short and sweet but perfect for the situation. Well Done!

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 07/29/06 1:31
Chapter: Deal Me In

I really like the descriptions of Orion's feelings. There aren't a lot of fics about him out there (in fact, I haven't seen any until this) and it's quite refreshing to hear about someone who has so little to do with canon. Poor him, though. You can really feel for both Orion and Sirius.

Reviewer: Little_hoole3333
Date: 07/18/06 15:49
Chapter: Deal Me In

......I can't find the words to express myself. It gets annoying, sometimes, when this happens. So, can I just say, it's a really nice story?

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