I've enjoyed reading this story and think that it is well-written. Maybe the mention of Christmas in the title has something to do with your trouble in attracting new readers?
constructive crittism???????!!!!!!!! there is nuthing to critize ur story is great keep it up
jeeze i have not laughed that hard in a while. lol i love ur story keep writting
awwwwwwwwww i love it keep writting
what is the special progect??? great story so far keep it up
i second that,no chance, love the story, it is already on my favorits
awsome start i have 11 more chapters to read so cant type to busy
oops! i forgot to tell you how great this story is, and how you should hurry up and write some more! i loved the part where they went back to harry's house. it was really nice. keep it up!
i've re-read the first chapter as well, and i definately dont think you should change anything. theres absolutely nothing wrong with it and if you have a couple of dilligent readers, then you should stick with them! this is my favorite story, and i dont think you should change the first chapter because the mood you set was perfect, it made me want to keep reading! when you accomplish that you shouldnt change that for more readers.
I've seen that pattern with my fanfic too. I read your first chapter again and it looks fine to me. All first chapters have to have some background setup in them to make the story work and I think you have a good balance between setup and plot advancement. Don't get discouraged--Ms. Rowling herself said the first chapter of SS/PS wasn't the most popular thing she had written. You're doing great!
Awesome chapter! I love this story, I don't think you should change the first chapter, if people don't see how good it is, they must be really thick. lol. But if you want more readers how abot trying to post your story on other fanfiction sites. Such as: fanfiction.com or harrypotterfanfiction.com Anyways, I can't wait until the next chapter:)
I love ur story and if other people cant see how awesome it is then they arent worthy!!
The story keeps getting better. I think you might put some of the things that happen later in the summary of th efirst chapter... I dunno just as a glimpse of what happens. Just a suggestion.
gr8 wrk again, hope u update soon, maybe in the 1st chapter u can hav some kind of flashback, not from ahrrys point of view, just a bit of fiction that could tie in wiv the rest of the story...?
Fantastic job, great excitment level. Can't wait for the next chappie.
This story is amazing, I couldn't stop reading! Keep up the good work!
keep it going!
AAHH! when are you going to finish???? please do!! ive been waiting so patiently....
Author's Response: New chapter on the way!
This is a great story! keep up the good work!
WOW! I have now read 10 chapters, and I just wanna say... WOW! Great! Cool! Awesome! I love it!!