Reviews For One Small Mistake
Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 08/16/06 18:36
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi HermyRox12!
Nice job! Congrats on winning the challenge! At first, I didn't understand why this story wasn't in the Great Love category. Then Clarice sabotaged Mandy and Charles, and I figured it out. But then Clarice married Charles, and I wondered. And then she lost him, and I understood. The ending was good, a sort of "full circle" kind of thing. It was sad too: I do feel bad for Clarice. I wonder if you wanted readers to feel sympathy for her?
I like how you pulled small pieces of the HP universe - Aurors, Dolohov, Charles Potter, etc - into the story in subtle ways. You also write first person well, and I'm someone who prefers third person. :)
I hate to even say anything, but I believe "Apperated" is spelled "Apparated." If you edit it, have fun with the extra
tags, lol!!
I enjoy being in Ravenclaw with you - nice job, and congrats again!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks! Welll, I wrote this challenge for regret, then saw that I mis-read revenge. :-) So, I changed it to revenge.

Yeah, Clarice sort of got the downside of life. But hey, life is not a fair, it's a circus! /cheesy pun. Anyway, I want them to feel sorry for her, yet still realize that she asked for it.

Yeah, first person in my favorite way to write. I explained that a bit in my thread, so I won't make you read it twice.

Stupid tags. I'll try and get rid of them. I really need to make sure my stories are truley perfect before submitting. Ah, well. Thanks for the reveiw, and it is awesome having you in Ravenclaw, and you better not leave any time soon. lol. Thanks for the congrats.

HermyRox12

Author's Response: Actually, I just edited it, and no tags! YAY! Thanks again for the review. ~HermyRox12

Reviewer: hermoninny
Date: 07/12/06 18:08
Chapter: Chapter 1

great story! keep writing!

Author's Response: Don't worry, more stories will come.

Reviewer: grim reaper
Date: 07/12/06 17:52
Chapter: Chapter 1

Interesting.

Author's Response: I hope that is a good interesting. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: comewhatmay
Date: 07/12/06 17:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

I liked it
I didn't understand the time line until the wedding invitation. good job!

Author's Response: Sorry that you were confused about the time line. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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