I have been watching your livejournal site since you announced a new chapter on May 28th. However, it seems like the chapter didn't out itself yet. Please, pleaseplase, have mercy on us and share your beautiful words with us.
well... i read this story some days before and i think it's amazing. i always thought that Lily had fallen for James soon.even before 7th year. that's what i believe after reading DH. but she had waited for him to deflat his head. and i realy like these interludes and that you have not made another Hermione out of Lily. it's something new. i'm waiting for you to update SOON.
this is just truley inspiring. For Lily Evans of course, but for myself also. I can relate to this in a really odd way, and it's nice to see my mind out into words :P
it's the first part of the story
and it's already mind blowing!
this - i can tell - is going to be
an amazing lily and james story :)
i can't wait to read the rest!
Wow wow wow. I just finished reading the whole thing so far! I love this fic. It has to be one of the best I have read here on MNFF! Well done! Please please please update soon because I am DYING to find out what happens next. Also, I love the fact you have included Frank and Alice. You are VERY good at charaterisation.
this was so ggod. i can't wait for you to finish this story but i want it to continue forever.
excellent! update soon, I miss this too much.
i LOVE this fan fic!!
I think that this is the best fan fiction I have read ever. And I've read a lot. The way that all of the relationships mature is incredibly realistic. Please continue! Honestly, the last time I followed a fanfic that was really well written (still not as good as this, but hey) it was in 2005/2006 and there was only one chapter to go before the end.... and the person never updated... I'm still scarred.
Oh my lord! For a moment i thought they were really going to have sex. You are a wonderful writer! Please may you post more?
This interlude is so great! I love how you are working in Order of the Phoenix. I can't wait to find out how James and Lily get in on the secret! That'll be really exciting when everyone knows and they have all joined.
It's also nice to read a little bit about Alice and Frank. The way you made their personalities is fantastic. Frank is serious but loose, and Alice is really trusting and fun. I love how they have a lot of trust in each other and their relationship. Alice wasn't worried at all that Frank was having an affair or anything (that's what I got out of it anyway) when she asked what he had been doing. She was just curious. They're really cute! The perfect couple! :)
I'm happy you updated; I was getting pretty nervous. I thought maybe you dropped the story! That would be my worst nightmare 'cos I absolutely LOVE your work! The story is excellent!
awww!!!frank and alive are so cute!!! please continue!! love this story!! SOO amazing!!!
I very nice little snipit of those two. Loved it.
I did nanowrimo too (& finished!), so I know what you mean, it does tire you out a fair bit! I love nano though :D.
Oh. My. Gosh.
I'm in love with this story. I love how in-depth you've gotten with all the characters. I admit, James and Lily are by far my favorite people to both read and write about, but....wow....just wow...
You've got an amazing amount of talent. I look forward to reading the res of this. :)
as usual, excellent! update soon, I miss this too much.
Ah... a Frank/Alice chapter. Well, to tell you the truth, it's sort of a relief actually. No, I'm not bored with your fic, but I've been reading way too much of James/Lily lately and it became too much. But then I saw the update, and, well, I had to read it. I can't skip the old fics, now can I? And then I see that James and Lily are just mentioned, it's all Frank/Alice, so that was cool. Anyway, let's go on with the review. =]
I love the relationship between the two. They seem just so... perfect for each other. Like a classic case of meant to be. Alice can't sleep without Frank. Frank comes and tries to smile to reassure Alice that everything's fine and he's in good spirits, but he right away catches that she hasn't slept at all. She's not the complaining kind. She just states something, that she can't sleep when he isn't home and Frank apologises even though it's not his fault. After wards she asks what happened and he says that he'd talk about it the next day and she agrees without arguing. It's give and take both ways. They've got such an easy going relationship.
Later, when Alice finally says what she really wanted to talk about... I thought that she would ask something like whether he was having an affair or something, but she didn't. She just asked him a question and waited for an answer. She didn't start suspecting or screaming and making a scene when Frank was thinking whether to tell her about the Order or not. It shows how close they are, how implicitly they trust each other that it sort of hurts to keep secrets from the other half.
Also, I really like how they aren't all physical. Like they're alone, are engaged, but they kiss only once... and it's like sort of a brush of lips... no long kisses. When Frank comes home, they just hug, and then she is just ruffling his hair with her fingers and he's satisfied and comfortable. That's it. It proves that there is more to their relationship, that they aren't all touchy touchy. They talk. They have feelings for each other and understand each other. They do, truly love each other. In short, their relationship is natural and perfect.
One thing, it's very minor, and I don't know why, but I like how you have Frank having long hair. Like I said, I have no idea why this little detail struck me, but it did. Maybe because in most of the fics Frank is supposed to be the serious one, physically as well as mentally. But this clearly isn't the case over here, he's... balanced.
Over all, I really liked reading this chapter. It wasn't really serious or angsty or fluffy. Just the right amount of everything. Great job!
P.S. And congratulations for winning NaNo. (Y) I barely wrote anything in mine though I did participate. >.< Lol.
I really do enjoy this story. It is original and mature yet it still retains the easy flow of words that all classic novels/stories do. Cannot wait for the next chapter! :3)
Is good to have you back and Congratulation! Good chapter by the way, is allways good to know was going on in others members of the order life.
Aw. Frank is so honest and I love that. He and Alice are so cute: more please! Great twists, keep up the good work.
This is such a beautiful story-- Keep writing!
great chaptern i loved it. ur an amazing writer and this story is amazing.