That was.... wow. And.... wow. I really liked how passionate Draco and Ginny were about each other- even the breakup seems passionate- and the stanzas are perfect this short. One is confusing though "Betrayed hate thoughts". The words just don't go together like the others do.
Sigh. I wonder what would happen if I told my parents I wanted a poem for my birthday.
Ooh, I like this. I'm a D/G shipper myself, so it's always nice to read about the pair. I like the format of this, the small, descriptive stanzas. After "Green, red colors," I got the sense that the first word applied to Draco and the second to Ginny, but I could be wrong there.
Author's Response: No, you're absolutely right. Draco's a Slyth, Ginny's a Gryff, hence the colors. Thank you, dear, for your wonderful comments! *huggles*
Lovely. This was just absolutely wonderful, Anna. I love the short poignant stanzas. This is my kind of poetry. Rhi is very lucky. I would love to get a birthday surprise like this *points out her birthday is on November 9th*
Author's Response: Thanks, Christina dear. I would never forget your birthday. darling! Thank you again for the lovely review!
I'm glad I've gotten here before Miel, considering she'll surely be more useful than I could be! However, I am in awe of this powerful poem. Really, I am.
It's short, but it really expresses the emotions that both of them are feeling. First the words, the colours, and the conversations, then the kisses and ecstasy, then the calm, confusion, and downfall. It kind of left me gasping. I really enjoyed the format and everything you managed to fit into there!
There was just one place where the format was disrupted: Betrayal, hate misunderstandings doesn't work because 'betrayal' and 'hate' don't describe misunderstandings. It might work better if you used 'Betraying, hateful misunderstandings' instead.
Gah. This is love. I'm proud of you. And you newfound fire&icelove.
Author's Response: *huggles* Do you know how pleasantly you surprised me? I love your review better than my own poem, lol! Darling, thank you so much for reviewing it - it made me so happy. Thanks a million for pointing that out because I had trouble with that area too. I'll go fix it now with your wonderful suggestion. And yes, Draco/Ginny is another loveable ship. I'm actually in the pre-writing of a long chaptered fic with that ship. *loves* Thank you for the review! You are love.
I liked this poem. It was very short. When I read your summary I was wondering exactly what this poem would be like. I thought it was going to tell a story. I wish it had, although I do like this too. It's just that I don't know anything about this "relationship". I was sort off hoping this poem would explain more. I liked your poem, it's just that it didn't answer my questions.
Author's Response: Thank you. However, it did tell a story in a way. In the beginning, their relationship was going perfectly. Everything about it. They were happy. They were satisfied. But then something horrible happened. A trick or rumor, perhaps. Draco didn't trust Ginny anymore. The rest of the poem tells how their relationship deteriorated. Hope that clears things up! Thanks for the review!
Nicely done :)
Author's Response: Thanks!
Author's Response: Thank you!