Update soon please! This is really good. ~MJ
This is good. I cannot wait to read more! ~MJ
I like this story. Please update soon!!!!!! ;-)
Hey--my name's Amanda too! But I don't have blonde hair. It's brown. And I can't say what color my eyes are, because they change from mixes of grey, blue, and green. Yeah, weird, I know. But hurry to update -- I wanna see -- well, actually, read -- what happens!!!
A little mistake that I have to point out: When people Disapparate, it makes a 'pop' sound, but when they Apparate, it makes a 'crack' sound. Sorry, I'm a stickler for grammar and spelling, just had to point that out! Sorry!
Oh, I love it! I like the twist with Remus declining Head Boy before making Potter the new one. I can't wait for chapter three!
i loved the chapter! update soon so i don't throw a tantrum!
Aaargh! Ferex House is such a jerk! I was fuming after I read that! Still, fantastic chapter. The one thing I didn't like was that McGonagall just told Lily about Remus like that. There's no way she would have blabbed his biggest secret without making sure it was ok. She would have left it to him to tell. Aside from that, I loved all of it! More soon!!!! =)
Interesting...I love your theory on how James became head boy; I always thought it was out of the blue. At least you made it seem relistic. One thing I'd like to point out, though, is Sirius' charaterization. Despite what fandom likes, Sirius wasn't ever a 'ladies man'. While I've seen worst fics where it goes overboard, I would suggest watching how Sirius acts around women. He might be loud, funny, prankster that was known for it, but it doesn't mean he was the most popular kid in school and had all the ladies swooning over him. Just a reminder.
Oh, also, a little word confusion I caught: The four Marauders, wearing black tuxedos, stood at the front of the church as the flower girls and maids of honour came down the centre isle. The italic word should be the world 'aisle'. And isle is an island.
Otherwise, very good!
oooh what's happened that lily's so surprised about? i wanna know!! anways, great story and really well written, i can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: You'll have to wait and find out! :D I'm so glad that you like it! Updates are commin!
very good, i love it, i want more plz, i just love it
great job
Author's Response: thanks so much! chapter 2 is on it's way!
