Reviewer: WeeMan9
Date: 02/18/07 22:58
Chapter: Chapter 5: Introspections

Thank you for finally updating!!! This is the only story that expands on Hermione's relationship with her parents. Every story has the same old cliched version of them; it's just refreshing to have a different perspective on it. Same with Tonks, I'm impressed you have expanded on all these thoughts and made them your own. Well done, and keep up the great work.

Author's Response: Thanks for enjoying this so much, and being so patient with me! Chapter 6 is proceeding apace; just need to find time to write and sort out a few plot tangles here and there. I'm having fun with Tonks; too many people write her as a ditzy schoolgirl, and she's not. She is one seriously tough young woman. Please be patient a little longer; after all, I've got to get this thing finished before July!

Reviewer: Julybug
Date: 02/14/07 11:30
Chapter: Chapter 5: Introspections

Brilliant, as usual. I really love the interaction between Remus and Tonks - very realistic, yet you really feel the heat and sexual tension between them. They have business to discuss, but also want to pounce on each other. Order business as foreplay - excellent. The Hermione/Tonks discussion, also, really realistic and true. Good on you. :)

Author's Response: Always nice to hear from you. All too many writers treat Tonks like a bumbling schoolgirl, and she's not. And I did say that Remus loves her for her incisive mind, her other charms notwithstanding.

Reviewer: paracelsus
Date: 02/08/07 22:04
Chapter: Chapter 1: Criss Cross

This is a wonderful story. I like the way you have filled out some of the canon characters like Kingsley and Tonks.Your backstory of Hermione's family is perfect. Now that I've read it, it's hard for me to imagine her coming from any other kind of home.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it. This is why I like fanficition so much: you get to fill in the holes JKR leaves in her narrative. And I'm very glad I was able to make something you find so believable.

Reviewer: WeeMan9
Date: 10/22/06 18:29
Chapter: Chapter 4: Consecutive Seconds

Fair enough, as long as you keep up the amazing work.

Author's Response: No problem.

Reviewer: WeeMan9
Date: 10/19/06 23:01
Chapter: Chapter 4: Consecutive Seconds

Yes! Tom Waits kicks ass! So does your story.

Author's Response: Yes he does! And thanks for the review, I'm glad you enjoy it. I really am working on the next chapter, it's just a matter of finding time to write and keeping my computer from crashing.

Reviewer: Julybug
Date: 08/26/06 1:03
Chapter: Chapter 4: Consecutive Seconds

You know I think this is getting so brilliant. And you gave us a cliff! Yay cliff! And food... of course. Excellent, keep them coming (and I'll try not to get jealous of the speed of your chapter acceptance vs. mine...)

Author's Response: Ya know, I wish I could do something about that: I'm used to at least a week's lag time (gives me more time to write), but this... sheesh! Of course, you get hung up for weeks on end. Luck of the draw, I guess...

Reviewer: muggleclaw
Date: 08/25/06 22:15
Chapter: Chapter 4: Consecutive Seconds

Great chapter, I love how you're developing the Hermione and Travis's relationship with each other. Keep it up! :D

Author's Response: Nice to hear from a loyal reader (both of them!). This is the linchpin of the whole story, after all, and it's going to be a real roller coaster. Keep your hands and arms inside the plot line...

Reviewer: Julybug
Date: 08/09/06 14:22
Chapter: Chapter 3: North of the Sunset

Bloody brilliant, of course. Very clever with the notes... I just love that. I think the background stuff with Travis is great, gives him so much depth, and insight into Hermione's behavior as well. I can hardly wait to find out more about Maude. *tee hee hee, I get to read it first!*

Author's Response: Hey come on now, you should take some credit for the tasty goodness here! That's another hard cider I owe you...

Reviewer: muggleclaw
Date: 08/09/06 2:11
Chapter: Chapter 3: North of the Sunset

Ok, I'm hooked. We know so little canon about Hermione's family, and I'm really into your concept of her parents being a way more complex than two plain old Muggle dentists. I really like Travis in particular--giving prim and proper Hermione a recovering-alcoholic swears-like-a-sailor martial-arts-buff dad is definitely unexpected. I appreciated the Monty Python references as well. ;) I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: I came up with Travis as a response to a question: why is Hermione so obsessed with academic success and following the rules? It struck me that this is something often seen in the oldest children of alcoholics. It would also explain why she's been steadily separating herself from her parents' world. Then I had to develop a plausible backstory for Travis and Maude, and things just went from there. Travis is one bad mofo, but Maude's going to surprise you too...

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 08/03/06 16:53
Chapter: Chapter 2: Thirteen O'Clock

"I thought he was with Hare bloody Krishna, 'til he blew up my car."

AAAARGH, this is so good, and I'm so freaked out by the story... I'm going on vacation tomorrow, and I know this is just going to go through my head the whole time, waiting for the next bit.

Author's Response: Next bit's in queue; the plot will thicken, and thicken again, Keep checking back. I'm having a blast writing this thing, and I'm glad you're enjoying it.

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 08/03/06 16:48
Chapter: Chapter 1: Criss Cross

Wraaagh, I'm hooked!

This story's excellent, even better than I expected. I love the Monty Python references, being somewhat obsessed. And the best part... well the coconut song. I speak German fluently, so I sort of blinked and said to myself, "Wait a minute, that says 'I've got a lovely bunch of coconuts..."

Author's Response: Danke schoen! Keep reading, there's more! This is a pretty intense story, so the humor keeps things from going overboard. And that bit with the cash point machine was exactly the sort of thing I imagined happening to poor Arthur. Arthur will redeem himself later.

Reviewer: Julybug
Date: 07/24/06 16:32
Chapter: Chapter 2: Thirteen O'Clock

Excellent! Well done - that evil rat bastard Death Eater didn't stand a chance against Travis the Toughie. And poor Hermione - she's got a lot to deal with now, eh? Can't wait for the next chapter. :)

Author's Response: Yeah, the Grangers are a tough bunch. You mess with them at your peril. And you'll see the next chapter before anyone else!

Reviewer: Julybug
Date: 07/11/06 14:32
Chapter: Chapter 1: Criss Cross it is. Yes, the cliff. It's scary there, but that's the fun, yeah? Very nice, good stuff. I like the fish thing, too - I don't think I'd mentioned that before. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Ol' Draco's got a sick sense of humor, don't he?

Reviewer: eshak
Date: 07/01/06 14:20
Chapter: Chapter 1: Criss Cross

Good story, TJ. Keep going. I'm looking forward to the next update.

Author's Response: It's coming, I promise! My beta is a captive audience for this month! Just have to get time away from the kids...

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