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Name: hpgirl_91 (Signed) · Date: 06/26/07 23:47 · For: Lilies and Explosions
wait sorry im confused! why did Lily poke Remus in the eye with a fork? what? great story so far just kind of confusing sometimes with going back in time and such. :)

Author's Response: Didn't I already explain? I believe it was an accident. Could've sworn I wrote that somewhere. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: hannahisme (Signed) · Date: 06/26/07 10:47 · For: Epilogue
ok now that was
i didnt know it was possible to love a fic as much as the boks themslef
well done

Author's Response: Thanks! Wow, that's quite a compliment.

Name: DracoMalfoyManiac314 (Signed) · Date: 06/21/07 21:31 · For: Epilogue
this is one of the best stories ive read in a longg timeee lol :]

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed. :]

Name: LaylaEarth (Signed) · Date: 06/14/07 6:24 · For: Epilogue
This was awesome! I was in tears during part of it;you're an excellent writer. One could almost mistake you for J.K. Rowling!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Ha! I assure you, if I was even in the same league as JKR, I wouldn't be writing fanfiction. Thanks for your kind words!!

Name: Auror Tonks (Signed) · Date: 06/07/07 13:09 · For: Epilogue
i luv this fic!!! its soo gd! but i dont usually lik fics wit ron dying in them, hes mi fab character. but urs is so gd, its okay. it was really clever the way u did it through memories. can u hurry up wit ur tabby story. its takin ages and its really gd as well. i luv ur fics.

Author's Response: Thank you! And I know how you feel... I didn't like killing Ron off either. And please be patient. I have a life outside of the computer, and right now that's taking up my time.

Name: LaneTechFreshie (Signed) · Date: 06/06/07 20:17 · For: Where is Remus?
Huh...I didn't know a leer was defined that way...I just always thought of it in the 'malicious" definition.
It's also kinda weird how i happened to review right when you happened to be online. :-)

Author's Response: Yup. I looked that word up in the dictionary ages ago... Like you, I didn't think it was used in the right context. And getting reviews as I'm online has happened before. It's kinda cool. ;)

Name: LaneTechFreshie (Signed) · Date: 06/06/07 20:11 · For: Epilogue
*gulp* Great opening. I don't think I could've had Harry's constraint. Brilliant.
-*squeaky voice* RON'S DEAD!? NOOOO!!!!> Oh...that's sad.
- Good ending, but i think you should go over something in these last two chapters; where Lily dies. In the previous chapter, Sirius sees Lily dead first, and then in this one, we see her dead in the nursery... *goes back to check* Oh.. I guess Sirius does stumble through the house. Maybe make that a bit more clear. And does Sirius enter through the front door? Because I dont' think it makes sense that the nursery would be right off the front door. If sirius entered through the back door... well, that would make a bit more sense.
-All in all, good chapter, good story, just makes sure you go over the little things; there are readers out there that will look for them. :-)

Author's Response: The house in in rubble, so Sirius doesn't go through the front door. I think I mentioned that. And I'll have to take the time and edit through it someday. >> Thanks for reviewing!

Name: LaneTechFreshie (Signed) · Date: 06/06/07 20:03 · For: Father, Son, and Spirits of the Past
"...the much younger Healer said, leering at Sirius." ONce again, I don't think "leering" is quite the right word; it makes me think that the younger Healer doens't like Sirius. Yeah, and judging from the next sentence; she doesn't NOT like Sirius.
- And, I think that they scene where Sirius sees James and Lily isn't quite emotional enough. I mean, it's said, but not quite as heart wrenching as I think it should be. But, i guess I shouldn't be criticizing you; I've got a scene like that of my own that i have to write in the future. OI.
- Good chapter, can't wait to see how Harry reacts.

Author's Response: It wasn't supposed to be too emotional. I mean, it was for me, but Sirius had revenge on his mind and couldn't think of the enormity of the fact that his best mate's dead. Thanks for reviewing again!

Name: LaneTechFreshie (Signed) · Date: 06/06/07 19:54 · For: Of Quidditch and Weddings
-Hmm...I think it's kinda wierd that Remus was laughing one sentence and then three later, he's crying after the Quidditch game... But, maybe that's just me.
-"Two links of her hair in the front..." Don't hate me for criticizing so much, but I think that "links" should be "locks". "Links" makes me think of sausage.
-Hehe. I love how Remus is passing tissues to Peter. Hehe. That's great.
-Good chapter- I hate Writer's Block too.

Author's Response: Ugh. Writer's block = my worst enemy. And thanks for the lovely con. crit. again.

Name: LaneTechFreshie (Signed) · Date: 06/06/07 19:47 · For: The Sirius Way to Hit on Females
-"Remus gabbed his thumb over his shoulder." I think that should be "jabbed". WIth a "g" it's "gah-bed." Like gabbing people... LIke talking...
-“Do you have anymore memories with Snape?” There should be a space between "any" and "more" or else it's "anymore" like " I don't want to hear that anymore."
-"But Ron, Hermione, Ginny and Remus weren’t paying attention to the heated argument between Sirius and Remus..." I think that last "Remus" should be "Peter"- Remus has his nose in his book and Sirius and Peter are arguing.
-"...and at Sirius- who was leering at a young woman across the street." I dont' think Sirius would be "leering" at the woman; a leer is a facial expression's that's not kinda. Snape leers; Sirius "smirks flirtily" or "smiles handsomely", or something like that. He doesn't leer.
-*bursts out laughing when Sirius runs into the lampost* OH, that's great. *sniffle and giggle*
-I think you should add a little note to the beginning of the last memory that it was snowing, because Sirius' snowball kinda comes out of nowhere. Plus, I don't think Sirius would sit down in the middle of a snow covered street; even if he was trying to hit on the girl. Unless the snowball was magical- if it was, clarify that.
- Other then those few mistakes, good chapter. Very good story too. LIke the memory ideas, even though the relationship between Lily and James in Hogwarts is a bit vauge, but it's good.

Author's Response: Thank you for all the corrections! I'll have to fix them, when I stop being lazy enough to sit down and do it. As for leer, it can also be a suggective look. According to dictionary.com , a leer can mean: To look with a sidelong glance, indicative especially of sexual desire or sly and malicious intent. So, yeah...

Name: AccioChocolate4 (Signed) · Date: 06/05/07 16:05 · For: Father, Son, and Spirits of the Past
For most of this chapter I was just sitting here balling my eyes out. great job and Im looking foward to reading your other stories

Author's Response: Thanks! And I cried too. :'(

Name: rowenaravenclaw1 (Signed) · Date: 05/22/07 17:11 · For: Epilogue
*cries* that was beautiful!

Author's Response: Well, thank you! I try.

Name: LilyDaae (Signed) · Date: 05/07/07 16:58 · For: Epilogue
loved the chapter and i love this story!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Name: ginnyp_harryp (Signed) · Date: 05/06/07 22:23 · For: Father, Son, and Spirits of the Past
that was such an emotional chapter! you go from super happy in the beginnning to really sad at the end :[
although i didnt get why you wouldnt let harry comfort ginny..i mnea they could have spared a couple seconds... :P

Author's Response: I love H/G, but this story isn't really about them. It would've been unnecessary and would've distracted from the real story.

Name: odyessus (Signed) · Date: 05/06/07 18:44 · For: Father, Son, and Spirits of the Past
woah- that was amazing! It actually sent shivers down my spine! this chapter was brilliant! cant wait for the epilogue!

Author's Response: I'm glad I'm not the only one who got the chills when reading this.

Name: LilyDaae (Signed) · Date: 05/06/07 16:19 · For: Father, Son, and Spirits of the Past
great chapter!!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!

Name: Ritter (Signed) · Date: 05/06/07 14:42 · For: Father, Son, and Spirits of the Past
Awesome chapter and a great story! I love how you described all the memories. Awesome job, keep writing!

Author's Response: Only an epilogue is left, and I'm going to post that soon, after I do some editing.

Name: LilyDaae (Signed) · Date: 12/02/06 21:02 · For: Of Quidditch and Weddings
really great chapter! can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it! It took me a while to write, since I wasn't quite sure where to go with it, but I'm glad the result was satisfying.

Name: Moony 62442 (Anonymous) · Date: 12/01/06 21:01 · For: Of Quidditch and Weddings
Over so soon? Oh well... this was great and I can't wait for the next chappie!

Author's Response: Yea, it's a short chapter, but I hope to make up for it with the next one.

Name: dancergirl117 (Signed) · Date: 12/01/06 20:00 · For: Of Quidditch and Weddings
This chapter made me cry. The fact that Remus was crying after the memory of James flying was completely terrifying and completely heartbreaking at the same time because we've never seen him emotional like that. GAH this was AMAZING! I LOVED IT! =D

Author's Response: Thanks! Oh, wait for the next chapter. It's a real heartbreaker.

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