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Name: Fly to Dawn (Signed) · Date: 08/02/06 8:42 · For: The Last Autobiography of Masami Yamamura
Oooh, a Japanese character - interesting!
I love the part about the samurai. Being Japanese myself, I think the 'dying honourably' way of thinking is very Japanese. You managed to make Masami into both a true Gryffindor and a true Japanese girl!
Time for nit-picking...
Did you know that according to Japanese legend
There should be either an 'a' before 'Japanese', or an 's' at the end of 'legend'.
'Calico cat' is an Americanism, Brits usually call them 'Tortoiseshells'. The Calico cat being lucky isn't too much of a famous legend, but it might be from where Masami's family comes from - it depends.
'Tyra Portman' sounds like a combination of two names from famous stars. 'Tyra' wasn't a very common British name during the time period she lived, so I would consider changing that.
"...though some people do practice..."
This should be 'did practice' unless Hermione actually speaks it in dialogue.
I also saw the name 'Alexis Finnegan'. 'Alexis' is an American name, so I would consider changing it. Perhaps to some Irish name to go with her father?
Overall, it was well-written - well done!


Name: queendiva4evr (Signed) · Date: 06/26/06 10:41 · For: The Last Autobiography of Masami Yamamura
Beautiful!! You repeated the word revenge a little too much (use vengeance instead?) but it has certain flare.


Name: grangergurl (Signed) · Date: 06/25/06 20:24 · For: The Last Autobiography of Masami Yamamura
First review!! *does happy dance* I'm so glad it got in. Congrats!


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