I thought this was really nice. Fluff at the end, but overall, the fic was more dark.
I liked how you portrayed the characters. I can see each of the acting that way. I also liked how you gave Ron and Hermione hope even after the death of two people closest to them.
The only point that I need to disagree on his Harry being closer to Hermione than Ron. Harry and Hermione were platonically in love, but no one can ever replace your first, best friend. I really think that Harry would be closer to Ron than Hermione.
Nicely done. =)
Author's Response: I meant to portray it as Ron and Harry being best friends, but of the two, Hermione was closer to Harry. *isn't sure if what she's saying makes any sense* Thanks.
very good and not to fluffy
very good and not to fluffy
Author's Response: thank you very much!
Wow. That was so sad, and cute, ande awesome. Do you have anymore stories. Ill check but if you don't you need to and thats not a request, thats an order. No just joking but seriously that was so good!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much. This is the forsr R/Hr I've attempted to post, so I'm glad it turned out okay. lol.
Third time's a charm! *hopes that review finally works* *tries to remember what she wrote the past two tries*
I. Love. It. I had tears in my eyes from about halfway through to the end. Ron's last line pretty much made my heart melt. I loved Hermione's description of Harry talking about life after the war and about her dueling Bella. It had a lot of emotion and was a great bit of characterization. Wonderful job!
“Why can’t we ever do this right? Why do I keep messing things up?”
I love this line to no end. It's just so Ron! It seems exactly like something he would say in this sort of situation. Very good job with his character.
This fic really is lovely. You did a great job with emotions and descriptions and I just love it! I'm so proud of you! From "A Rose Without Thorns" (which was a very fine first fic) to this! *sniff* My little Tiffy is growing into a fabulous writer! Awesome work! *loves*
Author's Response: Aww Rach. You flatter me too well. =)
sniff sniff. beautifull.
Author's Response: = )
sniff sniff. beautifull.
Author's Response: My nickname is sniff!
Hey Tiffany! First of all, it's about time I've given you a long review with everything on it. ;) And, the scary thing is, I don't know what the "everything" is yet, so... yeah. Me babbling shall be on it. Check. Totally loving of you for perfect Hermione characterization shall also be sprinklede within. Check. A few slices of concrit, but not so much that that's what the whole review tastes like. Check. A bit of begging, but that's sprinkled sparsely in the middle, and, most importantly, the whole review is seasoned with silliness. Now, let's get to it! Mwahaha!
Okay, so first stop. When I saw that you had updated with a new one shot, I went "OMGYAYSQUEEMUSTREADOMG". And, I did. Your work has only gotten better over time, and I think that this illustrates how much you have grown as a writer. *hugs* Yeah. Okay. Back to review now. It was really interesting how there was [heavily] implied Harry/Hermione, but turned into Ron/Hermione in the end. I've seen it before, but never with this much... want, anger, angst... oh, loving it. Absolutely loving it.
I've always been convinced, ever since I started reading your fics, that you are a true romance writer. You can create more tension [whether it be sexual or emotional] than anyone I have ever seen [or read for that matter... I wonder what one would say in one of those situations? Gah, babbling. Sorry]. Just... a few of these lines illustrate that so well: "“What are you doing out here?” he asked, his eyes narrowing. The heat of his breath was visible when he spoke into the December cold." And this: "...She saw defiance, arrogance, and stubbornness, but mostly she saw his refusal to believe that she could love him after all these years. It was a realization that caused a knot in her stomach, a revolution that tugged at her heart strings..." One of those *guh* moments when reading. :)
Unfortunately, I have to do my nitpicks... sigh. But there are only two of them! First off: "“I was absolutely distraught. Harry bought me to these woods, and told me how much better life would be after the war." "Bought" should be "brought", correct? “We saved the world. And all I feel is sorrow and regret.”" I'd combine the two sentences. Other than that, nothing I could spot!
Excellent dear -- look foward to seeing more stuff from you soon!
Author's Response: When I saw your review I went "OMGYAYSQUEEMUSTREADOMG". Moving on, thanks for the review. I'll go back and edit the mistakes you found. But this really brought a smile to my face. Or it could be the fact that Lei is reading this OVER MY SHOULDER. Thankssssss amigo!
That was sad...which is a good thing.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks.
omg!! that was amazin!! its soo sad yet full of hope!!
Author's Response: *dances and tips hat*
This fic is so great! It's detailed, perfect grammer (that I see of), and it's so realistic. It's one of the best fics i've read in a while.
Great, no magnificent job!
Author's Response: Gracias! = )
Aww, that is so cute. And I think, even though you show Ron's sensitive side, that you kept them both perfectly in character. I loved it. 10/10 from me! =)
Author's Response: I like writing Ron, I dont think people normally explore or expand his character as much as he can be. I'm glad that you picked up on my attempt to showcase what we all know that Ron has in him. Thanks.
A vow that ensured both of them that life was worth living. Even after the world went cold.
And that's how Harry or Ginny would have wanted it, just like Frodo wanted Samwise to live a long and happy life in the Shire, when he had endured too much to ever enjoy again life in the world he had saved :)
Author's Response: Sure is. Thanks for reviewing. = )