Reviews For Imaginary
Reviewer: SweetStar
Date: 07/15/06 16:53
Chapter: Chapter 3

hey
just began reading this ff. and i really like it please continue it soon!!

Reviewer: aintcrazy4you
Date: 07/14/06 17:00
Chapter: Chapter 3

I'm sorry I haven't reviewed for a long time but I really do liek this story. Hopefully chapter 4 will be validated soon.

Reviewer: ElectriCgirl
Date: 07/14/06 14:20
Chapter: Chapter 3

This story is great! Where are the other chapters?? I hope there's more, keep it up.

Author's Response: Don't worry, there are plently more chapters to come.

Reviewer: NoxSomnium
Date: 07/14/06 14:01
Chapter: Chapter 3

Bother, I got interupted and now I can't remember what I wanted to say. Why does Remus think it would be cowardly to ask for help? Sometimes it takes a lot of strength (especially for the proud) to admit they need help. Not to mention, it's better for the bullies if someone stops them, and for the others who are being bullied. What about all those people? I know that sometimes adults aren't very effective in stopping bullying but they should be allowed to make the effort anyway.

Ah, we catch a glimpse of Lily. And Blake acts like a big brother. Except oddly he seems very self absorbed half the time and the other half he's all over Remus. I don't understand him, but then, I haven't had very long to seem him yet.

Wasn't Larry Wilkins mentioned in one of the books in passing? His name sounds really familiar. I'm so glad you're moving so fast with this story. It makes me happy. :)

Author's Response: That's just Remus's way of thinking, he doesn't like asking for help. However he will have eventually. Blake seems self-absorbed? Weird... I didn't think I made him come off that way, but I guess he could be from a certain point of view. I don't think Larry Wilkins was ever mentioned, I thought I just randomly made it up.

Reviewer: FeatherTrader
Date: 07/08/06 12:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wonderful fanfic so far. It’s left me with plenty of curious questions. Like, I’m curious to what house Larry Wilkins will be sorted into. I think it was an interesting (although slightly uncanon) idea to make Remus be a sort of loner going into third year. I did find a few nit-picks that really don’t effect the flow of the story, but still should be mentioned.

“But there’s always that very likely chance that you’ll find those few people who will milk it for all its worth… which is why you must keep it a secret, your true identity.” ‘its’ should really be ‘it’s’ since you are referring to it is, instead of its being possessive.

Also, when you are referring to something that belongs to Remus, it should correctly be written, ‘It was Remus’ book.’ And don’t forget, when you’re talking to someone, you would have a comma. Like with, ‘Yes mum.’ You would have a comma between yes and mum.

‘“Oh I’m sorry,” she apologized, taking it up herself to straighten her son’s shirt.’ One of the small (and only) brit-picks I can pick up on is the generally switched ‘z’ which is preferred by Americans, to the softer ‘s’ which is usually written by people from Britain.

I love your style, especially your personifications. This chapter is just filled with them. It really adds a lot to the different descriptions. Instead of the bricks just separating, they politely separated. Really wonderful.

Author's Response: Hey thanks for the review and taking the time to find mistakes. I'll check those out and fix them up. I hope you like the next chapter and the rest of story.

Reviewer: FeatherTrader
Date: 07/08/06 12:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wonderful fanfic so far. It’s left me with plenty of curious questions. Like, I’m curious to what house Larry Wilkins will be sorted into. I think it was an interesting (although slightly uncanon) idea to make Remus be a sort of loner going into third year. I did find a few nit-picks that really don’t effect the flow of the story, but still should be mentioned.

“But there’s always that very likely chance that you’ll find those few people who will milk it for all its worth… which is why you must keep it a secret, your true identity.” ‘its’ should really be ‘it’s’ since you are referring to it is, instead of its being possessive.

Also, when you are referring to something that belongs to Remus, it should correctly be written, ‘It was Remus’ book.’ And don’t forget, when you’re talking to someone, you would have a comma. Like with, ‘Yes mum.’ You would have a comma between yes and mum.

‘“Oh I’m sorry,” she apologized, taking it up herself to straighten her son’s shirt.’ One of the small (and only) brit-picks I can pick up on is the generally switched ‘z’ which is preferred by Americans, to the softer ‘s’ which is usually written by people from Britain.

I love your style, especially your personifications. This chapter is just filled with them. It really adds a lot to the different descriptions. Instead of the bricks just separating, they politely separated. Really wonderful.

Reviewer: some_kinda_superstar
Date: 07/07/06 22:00
Chapter: Chapter 2

great chapter! why does james seem to dislike remus so much? its cool though, keep writing!

Reviewer: NoxSomnium
Date: 07/07/06 17:00
Chapter: Chapter 2

Hmm. Curious Sirius behaviour. This sentance is all tangled "Madam Pomfrey would also like to implore upon that notice as she had never had so many students in the Hospital Wing in one year"
I'm not sure what you were trying to say. Good chapter.

Author's Response: Since Dumbledore said before that Filch wants no more dueling in the hallway, Madam Pomfrey's asking too because she had a lot of people in the hospital wing because of it.

Reviewer: superstar
Date: 07/07/06 15:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

good so far

Reviewer: MaraudersAffair
Date: 07/07/06 13:35
Chapter: Chapter 2

Ahahahaha -- you gave Remus braces! Wonderful!

Author's Response: Yep Moony's got braces. His teeth are a running gag throughout the whole story actually.

Reviewer: some_kinda_superstar
Date: 07/06/06 6:05
Chapter: Chapter 1

nice! i really liked it. can't wait for more!

Reviewer: some_kinda_superstar
Date: 07/06/06 6:04
Chapter: Chapter 1

nice! i really liked it. can't wait for more!

Reviewer: some_kinda_superstar
Date: 07/06/06 6:04
Chapter: Chapter 1

nice! i really liked it. can't wait for more!

Reviewer: NoxSomnium
Date: 07/05/06 16:55
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hmmm. Interesting. Why doesn't Remus (or why don't you have Remus) responding to being bullied? Why doesn't he want anyone to know, or defend himself? Precisely that is. You already have a great deal of depth, at least in him, for one chapter. Good going. So, don't take forever writing more.

Author's Response: Don't worry, it'll take a few chapters, but he will respond to a bully in particular.

Reviewer: NoxSomnium
Date: 07/05/06 16:55
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hmmm. Interesting. Why doesn't Remus (or why don't you have Remus) responding to being bullied? Why doesn't he want anyone to know, or defend himself? Precisely that is. You already have a great deal of depth, at least in him, for one chapter. Good going. So, don't take forever writing more.

Reviewer: MistressOfWolves
Date: 06/30/06 2:14
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh my...I LOVE THIS! You have seriously made a brilliant fanfiction so far. I hope it goes well!

Reviewer: aintcrazy4you
Date: 06/27/06 17:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

Cool very cool. Can't wait till chapter 2 is validated. Keep writing.

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