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Name: SIRIUS WILL NOT DIE (Anonymous) · Date: 08/04/06 18:40 · For: Chapter Seven: Between the Dawn and the Day
I love this story! I think this is one of my favorite stories on here!- Ems

Author's Response: Thank you! Hope that you continue to read and enjoy.

Name: charlie black (Signed) · Date: 07/31/06 0:01 · For: Chapter Six: And All Their Sorrows In Your Face
hey, im new to this, but i've got to tell you that this is very good.
i like how you're staying true to character.
you're not making it easy for sirius to be cleared, and i think that's better because i think he'd be bored with easy.


Author's Response: Thank you! I hope that you keep reading, and that you continue to enjoy it.

Name: MaraudersAffair (Signed) · Date: 07/30/06 23:25 · For: Chapter Six: And All Their Sorrows In Your Face

Arg - Luciusí thoughts were very interesting when he was getting dressed - how he was going to kill all the aurors he could until he died - it was great insight into his character that I donít see often. I wonder how upset Narcissa will be when she finds out that Lucius gave her sister over to the Ministry. God, Crouch and Fudge both majorly suck . . . *broods*

Great chapter by the way. XD

Author's Response: Thanks much! Although I agree with you that Fudge is horrible, in this case the guilty party is his predecessor, Millicent Bagnold.

Name: hearyoume (Signed) · Date: 07/30/06 15:56 · For: Chapter Six: And All Their Sorrows In Your Face
Oh my gosh! Moody is amazing; I've always had a lot of respect for him, and I believe he'd do the same things.
I also love your portrayal of Lucius - I can see him caring for his wife and son, yet being selfish and cunning enough to do whatever it takes to uphold the family name. He's very, very smooth.
Then there's Sirius, and I think you're doing a wonderful job writing him as well. His emotions are just so like the Sirius in the books, and nothing whatsoever is remotely OOC to me. The same, of course, goes for Remus, whom I also adore.
It's also extremely heart-breaking to watch the effect that all of these tragic events have on everyone. Remus is having such a difficult time, yet Moody is so good at keeping his cool despite everything that's going on... And overall, it just puts things into perspective, and sort of made me realize how much pain and heartbreak that everyone (the Order, Sirius, Remus...) had to endure.
Oh, and Phineas Nigellus? Awesome :D His lecture to Sirius was perfect. I love how he's just oozing with sarcasm and scorn for Gryffindor's desire to be brave and honorable. I especially loved his (sarcastic) closing remark about how running out and getting caught would certainly avenge his friends and care for their son. It reminds me of his lecture to Harry in the OOtP.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I will admit that I like Lucius a bit more now than I did when I started to write him. I'm having a great deal of fun with this whole story, but he and Phineas are particularly fun to write.

Name: barefootintherain (Signed) · Date: 07/30/06 15:01 · For: Chapter Six: And All Their Sorrows In Your Face
who's bagnold? and if he plays a huge role soon in your story...i dont want to know

Author's Response: Millicent Bagnold was Minister of Magic before Cornelius Fudge, according to HP canon. I've taken the liberty of assuming that she was Minister through at least the end of the first Voldemort war.

Name: hearyoume (Signed) · Date: 07/30/06 14:50 · For: Chapter Four: Of Storms Too Hot For Keeping
Hm, let me make sure I understand. Rodolphus and Bellatrix believe Voldemort may be alive, so they're going to try to track him down. But first, they want to find the Secret Keeper who betrayed the Potters, hoping to find some clues? And Bellatrix, Rudolphus, and the Malfoys all know that Sirius wasn't the one who betrayed James and Lily, but don't know for certain who did. However, the logical choice would be Pettigrew, but he's supposed to be dead. So Bellatrix and Rudolphus are in search of Sirius to learn about Pettigrew and/or Voldemort's whereabouts?
Haha, I'm sorry :/ My brain is somewhat slow today due to lack of sleep, but I just wanted to see if I had everything straight... it was very good, by the way. I laughed when Moody told Remus about Bellatrix and Rudolphus getting shot... *Next*

Name: barefootintherain (Signed) · Date: 07/30/06 13:31 · For: Chapter Four: Of Storms Too Hot For Keeping
i like the way you showed moody being sensitive....istead of the dark prat he usually is shown as

Name: hearyoume (Signed) · Date: 07/24/06 0:13 · For: Chapter Three: Auguries of Innocence
Wow, the French was impressive! (: I love how the shop names and conversations were in French - it kept it realistic and I didn't forget he was in Paris.

Author's Response: Thank you! I was just glad that I remembered that much of it, honestly.

Name: mgle_teacher (Signed) · Date: 07/23/06 21:57 · For: Chapter Five: Down the Grey Sky

Here's a site for Latin words. You can even translate English to Latin. I think you'll find it useful in this story and in future endeavors.

On another note, I've been reading your story since it began (and following ardently) and I have to say I really like it. I find it quite entertaining and pretty believeable. I don't usually like AU's because characters tend to fall under the range of OOCness. However, your depiction of the main characters is great/accurate specially the one of Sirius Black.

I like the characterization you use for Sirius Black. He's definitely one of my most favorite canon characters, and you keep him true to his canon character while adding/playing off more aspects that he was probably prone to.

I like that you stay true to Sirius' physical characteristics and even manage to play with those in turn during Chapter 3 when he went to the Parisian Knockturn Alley. It was fascinating to read how he used a charm to disguise his facial features yet still be thought of as a "bastard Black" lol. Creative. =]
You obviously are putting a lot of thought into his character.

I also loved that you stayed true to his Black family background and made Sirius use the mannerisms of his father, the arrogance, the sneers, it was great! I liked how Sirius was able to fall back on that to pass by undetected, and most importantly it is believeable considering who he is. I mean, it is how he was brought up and even if he tried to reject it his entire adolescence it is a vital part of him and who he is.

And it shows in your plot as wells. For example, the fact that Sirius is using black magic to find Pettigrew is something I entirely believe Sirius falling back on for survival/revenge. He was brought up a Black, and his actions speak for his surname. Even if he is a Gryffindor, he was raised around the dark arts, and it is believe that he obviously has a fair amount of knowledge on the subject. And it is nice that you are showing off his skills in Potions, and Charms because I honestly don't think other fanfics show off his intellectual side very much. Yet, you also give him a certain amount of apprehension in which he's not too sure about his own skills...Lovely! You wrote a great scene up there with the creation of the ink that will be used in the Vitae Invenire. =]

And the dialogue that you use with Sirius is great as well. It is believeable that he knows far many more languages than English, since he comes from an aristocratic type family. He probably learned French when he was younger. And the way he carried himself in Paris (dialogue wise) with Arnold and then the other shop guy was very well thought out. He would definitely treat one man with more respect than the other and it shows in the way he spoke to them. And you show the right amount of wittiness, and famous Sirius Black temper when he snaps at Phineaus. Even though, he did try to maintain composed and dignified. Loved it.

The inner dialogue he has with himself is really good characterization. He's not overly angsty, or broody. He's cold, calculating, with a tad amount of guilt and sorrow over the loss of Lily and James. Yet, he's also smart, witty, and fun. But for now he's mostly cold, calculating, and angry...but that's still great.

You are doing such a splendid job with your plot, story, and characters. You're definitely staying true to Sirius' persona, and I hope you keep it up. He's such a great character, and I feel that sometimes he is misunderstood and badly/poorly written.
Good job, keep it up, and I will definitely keep on reading.

mugglemathdork (on Forums)

Author's Response: Thank you so much. This really is my save-Sirius fic, and I'm very glad that the characterization is working. I'm currently wrestling with chapter nine, but updates are already pending here. :)

Name: hearyoume (Signed) · Date: 07/23/06 15:47 · For: Chapter One: This Clearing In The Trees
Blood magic, like when Voldemort used Harry's blood for his resurrection? Interesting...
The imagery is amazing. And I'm such a baby, I got teary-eyed in the beginning, but good job making me cry already (lol).
I'm so sucked into this that I can't stop reading...

Author's Response: The idea behind it is sort of similar -- that's one of the magical themes I'm planning on doing a great deal with. (The more I write of this story, the longer it seems it is going to be...)

Name: hearyoume (Signed) · Date: 07/23/06 15:31 · For: Prologue: Your Brother's Hand
Um, wow! I love your writing style, and your choice of words is perfect. It's so articulate, and I was completely captivated from beginning to end.
On to chapter two...

Name: MaraudersAffair (Signed) · Date: 07/18/06 22:01 · For: Chapter Five: Down the Grey Sky
for all of his self-sufficiency, Sirius is not used to doing things alone.

That is exactly how I envisioned Sirius - it was like a light blub going off in my mind when I read it. Again, I totally love Remus in all of his heart-broken, confused but still strong glory. Phineas' speech about Sirius and his family really got me thinking - I kind of wished he would accept his family. I mean, he is the last male Black - they need him to continue the name. Damn . . . I just realized that canon-wise, Sirius is already dead. The Black family is screwed . . . I really liked how you described all the details about the potion making - brilliant!

Great job! Please continue!

Author's Response: Thanks much! That line came as a sort of revelation to me, too, in all honesty. Updates pending, and I'm almost finished w. chapter nine.

Name: lullaby_heart64 (Signed) · Date: 07/18/06 14:02 · For: Chapter Five: Down the Grey Sky
Wonderful...hope to read more!

Author's Response: Update is pending! :)

Name: MaraudersAffair (Signed) · Date: 07/12/06 14:32 · For: Chapter Four: Of Storms Too Hot For Keeping

Bellatrix got shot - I hope it was in the ass! It still amazings me that someone could be so vicious as to torture someone into insanity. God, I hope she dies at the end!

Honestly, I was disappointed in the chapter until Remus showed up - I couldn't care less about Lucius and his problems. I mean, just because it plays a big part in the plot . . . pssh - whatever! Ahahaha! I love your Remus, have I said that already? :D

Author's Response: i was hoping someone else would have that reaction to Bellatrix's injuries. i thought that it was almost...poetic, y'know? and psh - who needs plot? seriously, though -- thanks for the review, esp. the positive comments on remus. he's been written so wrongly so often that i always approach his pov with a little trepidation.

Name: ElvishDeath (Signed) · Date: 07/12/06 1:35 · For: Chapter Four: Of Storms Too Hot For Keeping

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Name: Aldebaran (Signed) · Date: 07/11/06 18:30 · For: Chapter Four: Of Storms Too Hot For Keeping
I completely adore this story. It's told in a very observative way. I like how it is told in the Present at all times, which keeps the reader involved into the story. I'm also very fond of the narrating fashion: how it changes the narrating depending on whom this part of the story of focused on: for example, when the object of the story of Moody, you use words sure as 'lad', whilst when it is Sirius you use expressions as 'damn right'... I don't know if you did it on purpose, but I must tell you that this is an hability that you should develope on! You have a very unique style of writing. I've added this story to my favourites, and I will be eagerly waiting for updates! Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: thank you so very much for the kind words. this story is very much my baby, so it's good to know that things are working out properly. am taking your review off to gloat over now. thank you!

Name: MaraudersAffair (Signed) · Date: 07/11/06 3:01 · For: Chapter Three: Auguries of Innocence
So, with your introduction of Lupin I have decided that this is my favorite fic on mugglenet. This whole chapter is brilliant - the way you weave french and english together - it gives off the impression that the author is intelligent and knows the characters and what will happen to them. I was frustrated because I didn't know what the shop keepers were saying - I think you should put the list of translations before the story instead of after. Unless you were going for confusion on the readers' part -suspense, maybe? Oh, Lupin is heartbreaking! I really do hope Sirius and Remus are a couple - that would be so awesome! Wonderful writing, please continue!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm sitting in front of my computer blushing right now, I swear. I'm so glad you're enjoying the story - and thank you for the suggestions re: the French. It is very difficult to find the right place to put the translations, I will admit. At the moment, I'm working on ch. 8, so I can promise that there is more to come.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm sitting in front of my computer blushing right now, I swear. I'm so glad you're enjoying the story - and thank you for the suggestions re: the French. It is very difficult to find the right place to put the translations, I will admit. At the moment, I'm working on ch. 8, so I can promise that there is more to come. (goes to write more)

Name: MaraudersAffair (Signed) · Date: 07/11/06 2:25 · For: Chapter Two: That Cannot Sink or Cease
The first paragraph was just perfect! The pale flames are still shining in their sconces, though Sirius can see sunlight shining through the edges of the heavy velvet curtains. I loved that description! Phineas' opinion and POV of Moody was great - I loved how they interacted. Very good!

Name: Prof Jack (Signed) · Date: 07/08/06 19:23 · For: Chapter Two: That Cannot Sink or Cease
Interesting plot idea. It should be interesting to see where it goes from here.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. This forum is very slow to update; I'm actually seven chapters in, all of which can be found on my website - http://auberus.livejournal.com/4362.html I appreciate the review!

Name: I lovesmesomeHarry (Signed) · Date: 07/05/06 15:35 · For: Chapter Two: That Cannot Sink or Cease
It's sad because I know he's not going to win, but I still want him to!

Author's Response: well, he just might win in this fic. (i consider this my save-sirius story.)

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