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Name: puffpastry (Signed) · Date: 04/04/07 17:17 · For: Chapter Thirteen: Through the Bones of the Living
please update this soon!

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/30/07 17:27 · For: Chapter Ten: Or Their Stretched Purpose Slacken
Where's Ginny? Since Ron is five months older than Harry, he would have been twenty months old that October. Ginny would be an infant or Molly still pregnant. Minor nit picky point in a good story.

Don't know why I'm surprised that Peter is hiding out at the Weasleys.

Name: I lovesmesomeHarry (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 22:22 · For: Chapter Thirteen: Through the Bones of the Living
oh little Bill what are you up to? Great chapter.

Name: cazthenorthender (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 10:54 · For: Chapter Four: Of Storms Too Hot For Keeping
Well, I've read up to this point this afternoon and I must say that so far I've been very impressed. I love stories with the Marauders in and the detail and characters in this fic are fantastic, really convincing. I like the dark tone to the story as well and am looking forward to reading more! :)

Name: MaraudersAffair (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 3:33 · For: Chapter Thirteen: Through the Bones of the Living
Oh, this was absolutely wonderful! I love how you wrote Bill, all small with a high-pitched voice. And McNair -- the BASTARD. I really felt scared for Pentunia -- and McGonagall! Ahh! Great chapter. :D

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/22/07 14:52 · For: Chapter Nine: The Wounded Air Roared In
Good dialogue between Remus And Sirius. I never could understand the soap operatic feeling that it's all my fault of Sirius and I'm glad you allowed Remus to give him a good talking to.

Even though I think Sirius' response borders on the melodramatic you at least have him consistant in his impulsive and somewhat selfish behavior. If Sirius' desire to kiss Remus is the first time he's felt this it makes Sirius' character believable--that is it's easier to fantisize about a slash relationship then it is to deal with the grief of a dear friend.

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/21/07 9:25 · For: Chapter Seven: Between the Dawn and the Day
Good chapter, even if Remus was being manipulated.

Minor nit picky point, I wonder if Fawkes would just apparate into a house rather than tap at the window.

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/21/07 8:58 · For: Chapter Six: And All Their Sorrows In Your Face
I like your portrayal of Lucius in this chapter and in the previous chapter he was in. It makes sense that he would actually care for his wife and child.

I have to keep reminding myself that at this point Shacklebolt probably isn't a member of the Order. Good portrayal of someone (Crouch) who is so bent on justice that he ignores the facts.

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/21/07 8:38 · For: Chapter Five: Down the Grey Sky
the comparison between Sirius and Bella, very interesting. It makes one think that if Black doesn't go to Azkaban for the murder of the Potters it will be for Peter's murder.

I like how you note Remus' previous isolation when he felt that others thought that he might have been a spy.

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/20/07 9:11 · For: Chapter Three: Auguries of Innocence
Sirius Black doing Black magic? Consequences could be tragic.

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/20/07 9:00 · For: Chapter Two: That Cannot Sink or Cease
good chapter

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/19/07 17:14 · For: Chapter One: This Clearing In The Trees
I may have already said this before but I find this a fascinating alternative Universe story.

Name: puffpastry (Signed) · Date: 03/18/07 13:33 · For: Chapter Twelve: After a Thousand Reversals
I really really like this story. it's very well constructed and the writing is fantastic! the only minor criticism i might have is that some paragraphs in earlier chapters were a little heavy, but this is also possibly due to my lack of intellect and attention span! keep up the good work and i can't wait to read the next chapter!

Name: I lovesmesomeHarry (Signed) · Date: 03/13/07 1:19 · For: Chapter Twelve: After a Thousand Reversals
I missed this story! I don't know how you manage to convey such suspense in a story but I love it! Great Job!

Name: computer mouse (Signed) · Date: 03/12/07 13:35 · For: Chapter Twelve: After a Thousand Reversals
please update your chaptes faster; i really like your story and the ship, but it takes soooooo long!!--thanks

Name: anAnachronism (Signed) · Date: 10/07/06 15:24 · For: Chapter Eleven: That A Ghost May Him Ha
Aw, they kissed. I have a huge smile on my face from that little moment. Post the next chapter soon!

Author's Response: More is in progress, I promise! Thanks for the feedback!

Name: MaraudersWolf (Signed) · Date: 10/03/06 18:53 · For: Chapter Eleven: That A Ghost May Him Ha
THANK YOU! Good things do come in small packages and this proves it! I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and am immensely looking forward to the next - not only because of the cliffhanger that you left us with, but also because of the excellent writing. The schoolteacher in me is a tough critic, so those stories that impress me are ones with writing worth reading! (Whew! Those last four words are a bit of a tongue twister!)

I share the thoughts of mgle_teacher - great description of how magic is a part of a person's being. So many other stories make it sound like it's just skills learned and practiced like a sport, but it's more than that and your description shows that.

I also agree with mgle_teacher about the paragraph about "pureblood" society - that their "superiority" may not be because of blood relations, but because of their environment. As a teacher myself (and research in our "muggle" world is now showing), the environment that one is in affects their learning just as much as their genetic background (that "nature vs. nuture" argument). I've also wondered if their "superiority" might have a basis actually in the fear of discovering that they are no better than anyone else.

Finally, Remus and Sirius are my top two characters to read fanfiction about and you have done an excellent job with each of their characters. You are working with information we know, but also developing two very fine men that I can't wait to read more about.

Looking forward to the update!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! This chapter was short, but I couldn't resist the cliffhanger. I suppose that makes me evil. Thanks also for the kind words on the pureblood issue. I've always thought that there had to be some kind of reason for the prejudice. Slytherin has always struck me as too practical to dismiss a whole section of wizarding society out of hand. 'any means to achieve (his) ends', right?

Name: mgle_teacher (Signed) · Date: 10/03/06 18:08 · For: Chapter Eleven: That A Ghost May Him Ha
"I want to see how it's connected to you," he explains. "I need to know how deeply..." His voice trails off.

I liked that sentence up there and the way you described the magic flowing through Remus - I've read other fanfics describing how magic people can sense/see the magic auras/fields of other magic people...like it's an extra trait...but you did a great job in describing it.

Remus has wondered since sometime in their fifth year if this apparently inborn grace is what the old families mean when they talk about pureblood superiority; if this is why they refuse to allow the Decree For Reasonable Restriction of Underage Sorcery to be enforced in their homes, if this is why they create houses like this, lined every which way with magic.

I also liked this paragraph - You don't necessarily make it sound like "purebloods" feel superior due to their blood but perhaps to the fact that they envelop themselves in it since childhood...I once read in one other fanfic regarding this topic and the main character pointd out that magic was a gift that should be practiced and honed...like a skill - if you don't take care of it well... yeah. You know what I mean.

You did a great job with this chapter. I can't wait to read more!
And one last thing: OMG What a cliffhanger!!

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! Sorry about the cliffhanger -- but I couldn't resist.

Name: superzoyotte (Signed) · Date: 10/02/06 14:22 · For: Chapter Eleven: That A Ghost May Him Ha
grrreat !! Keep going !

Author's Response: Thank you! Update soon, I promise!

Name: mgle_teacher (Signed) · Date: 09/14/06 19:27 · For: Chapter Ten: Or Their Stretched Purpose Slacken
OMG! you're making it a slash?!
I love Sirius/Remus! I hope you venture into a flashback of "third year" or whatever. It would be nice to see the awkwardness. lol.
You're doing a great job!

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