that was really good. Good idea about the son helping in the birth, but wow, how many grandchildren!

Author's Response: Thank you! I am very glad you enjoyed the story. As for Grandchildren.... 16 by my count. Though, I can tell you in my mind, The Weasleys are done there, and neither are the Potter's for that matter. I have notes for an epilogue and included in that are even more. However, before I get to an epilogue or a sequal to this story I need to get my other story back on track. Please check it out and let me know what you think.

do a sequel dude...it could be interesting wot u do with the new potter yougins who have such 'powerful' magic.....

Author's Response: Oh, I have lots of thoughts on just what I would do with a second generation of Potters. And while I have considered going forward with a sequal to this story (which really only started as a one-shot concept), I have also much work to do on my other story "Heart of the Hero." I have been unavailable for much of the summer, and am moving, but I hope to be back at writting full force, very soon. Please check out my other story and let me know what you think, and once I get back on track with that, I may also start exploring my ideas for a sequal to this one. Thanks.

There are some interesting concepts in here to open. For one thing you're introducing about 20 original characters all at once. The only way for your reader to try and keep up is to associate them directly with their parents and hope you continue to give lots of clues as you write along. That said, I think you handled the intro fairly well. I didn't start skimming or become bored with it.

Having James have a telepathic moment put me off for a bit, but he's a baby wizard and they can wish things, and I'll buy it.

There were a couple of errors I spotted when reading. Some inappropriate words, if where you meant of, ect. And there was one logic error. You said that Bill died in the war, but you also said Bill helped varnish her new table for her home that was built after the war. How can both be true unless they took a break from the war to varnish a table for a house that hadn't yet been built.

All the quibbling aside, this is a good beginning with a lot of promise.

Happy writing.


Author's Response: The children are mostly for impact as you will note that they don’t largely figure into further chapters. I wanted to impress upon the reader that the Weasley's had prospered after the war. I am pleased that I didn't bore you.
As for James’ telepathy, I am operating under the assumption that he is an extraordinarily powerful wizard, owing to the fact that his parents are rather special in there own right’s, his father being Harry Potter, and his mother being Ginny who is the seventh child, and the only Weasley girl child in seven generations. That and the idea that wizard children can generate spontaneous magic based on there desires. If I continue the story in a sequel James will be quite a normal wizard child by the time he starts Hogwarts, his childhood powers waning as he grows.
You noted a logic problem, and you are quite right, it was meant to be Fred rather than Bill in that sentence… I have fixed the error, thanks.
As for ‘ifs’ in place of ‘ofs’ and the like, I read it through a couple more times and didn’t catch any of those errors. Perhaps you are available as a Beta reader? (If so please let me know.) In any case I am glad that I met with your rather tentative approval, and I hope you enjoyed the remainder of the story. Unless you threw up your arms and left the room during chapter three… Happy reading, and thank you so much for the review!

this was a great chapter I love the names you chose they are GREAT!

Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing my story. I am so happy you enjoyed it.

That was a good chapter. I love your stoyr!

Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful comment.

You know what's funny? My name is Abigail (Abby) and I more than anything, my favorite thing to do in the world is sit in the tree near our lake and read for hours on end! And, my grandfather, uncle, cousin, and 2nd cousin are all named James Arthur, in sequence. I just thought that was really funny, I still do whenver somebody names Harry's kid James Arthur. Great start! Loving the story!

Author's Response: That is a wonderful happenstance! I do hope you enjoyed the rest of the story as well. Thanks for the comments!

AW! so cute! lily and molly potter that was kind of a tongue twister but i loved them. actually maybe it was just me now it's not so hard, ok, PLEASE!! make an epilogue! hope to see it waiting to be validated really soon. by the way i thought james was absolutly adorable!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your kind comments throughout!

I liked the whole story, but the name Molly is a bit out fasioned, don't you think so?

Author's Response: Fashion is what we make of it... these things change... And after all we are talking about the Wizard World, where named tend to be a bit different anyway. Hope you liked the whole thing.

yay! I love happily ever after fics! awaiting a sequel...

Author's Response: Me too! I always want things to be great in the end... I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm thinking about a sequel with the girls first year at Hogwarts...

Very nice story. My only suggestion would be: Be careful to separate one person's comments from another. You had Harry and Hagrid in dialogue in the same paragraph. It got a little confusing as to when it changed from Harry to Hagrid.

Would love to see more of James, perhaps as he grows and learns to refine his gifts. Keep up the great work.

Author's Response: I'll check that out. Maybe I missed a paragraph break when I posted... Thanks for the comments and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.