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Name: mugglegurl (Signed) · Date: 09/02/06 21:48 · For: Runs in the Family
I just want to say that I've been enjoying this story immensely. It's really well written and the dialogue and imagery are perfect :D

And you're right-- Draco and Luna are oddly compatible.

Name: PotterGirl360 (Signed) · Date: 08/12/06 22:05 · For: Runs in the Family
Brilliant! Please put up the next chapter asap!!!

Name: stormy_lovegood (Signed) · Date: 08/08/06 17:37 · For: Arrival
Luna has silver eyes and dirty-blond hair.... i like it. luna lacks a little of the dreamy feeling, bu otherwise it's stilll in character.

Name: stormy_lovegood (Signed) · Date: 08/08/06 17:29 · For: Arrival
Luna has silver eyes and dirty-blond hair.... i like it. luna lacks a little of the dreamy feeling, bu otherwise it's stilll in character.

Name: anAnachronism (Signed) · Date: 08/02/06 17:22 · For: Runs in the Family
Hmm...interesting life Draco has led. I like your characterization of the Malfoys very much. None of the physical abuse, but the subtler and more damaging mental abuse. It's also interesting to see how Luna's changed, no marveling over the existence of some particular imaginary chimney imp, or persian rug parasite, but just the straight facts.

Name: anAnachronism (Signed) · Date: 07/31/06 20:11 · For: Wake Up, Luna
Oh, this is very interesting. Ingenious new plot idea! It's all very well written. I can't wait for another update.

One small grammar point: “He was bound to remarry,” Luna remarked, trying to sound offhandedly. The 'ly' in offhandedly doesn't work as it indicates an adverb and adverb only modify verbs or adjectives, not nouns such as Luna.

This story is going in my favorites. Please work on the update! :-)

Name: Khrys (Signed) · Date: 07/24/06 23:22 · For: Wake Up, Luna
Hey Bethany,

This story is becoming more and more interesting. The twists and turns you are throwing at us are amazing. No wonder your plot bunnies are going wild.

Your characterization of Draco was dead on during his rant about S.P.I.T., which is, by the way, hilarious. I'd like to think it's that you intended it that way, or it could be because it's late on Monday night and I haven't been sleeping well lately, who knows.

The descriptions of the bedroom, bed dressings and such are excellent and I can imagine being in the bed next to Luna. I'm simply amazed that you can maintain such a high level of quality with all of your stories!

Author's Response: Oh poor twists. I might even end up warping the entire story x_x Haha yes, I did intend for S.P.I.T. I wonder what it might stand for. Thank you!

Name: LaDy_GeM (Signed) · Date: 07/24/06 23:13 · For: Wake Up, Luna
Interesting storyline you've got going here. I've never read anything quite like it...it's great. Keep up the good work and hope you update soon. XOXO!

Name: marauder_since_1993 (Signed) · Date: 07/22/06 9:27 · For: Changes
Good story, but Evan Rosier was dead before Voldemort went after Harry in 1981 (he took part of Moody's nose), and Narcissa Malfoy isn't a Death Eater.

Author's Response: Ah thank you for your correction. Evan is indeed dead. I must check my canon before writing, eh? Narcissa, however, died protecting her husband. She's no official Death Eater, but she'll always be one to me.

Name: Zhisuku (Signed) · Date: 07/21/06 2:30 · For: Changes
Cool story, update soon!

Name: Accio_Brain (Signed) · Date: 07/19/06 19:45 · For: Changes
Wow. The Ministry never learns, do they? I love the idea of the Ministry hunting down and killing the Death Eaters. That is so characteristic of them. And I guess I got my answer about Snape and Draco's parents. And Luna was married to Ron? Wow. My mind is swimming here. This is really well written and it held my interest throughout. I can't wait for more!

Name: Accio_Brain (Signed) · Date: 07/19/06 19:40 · For: Captivity
Ooh, the plot thickens. I can totally see Draco hiding. Even though Dumbledore was killed, Draco was supposed to do it and I could see Voldemort taking his revenge on Draco anyway. This makes me wonder what happened to Snape and Draco's parents. I never thought I'd feel sorry for Draco, but he's a mess here and I do feel bad for him. I'm intrigued and off to read the next chapter!

Name: Accio_Brain (Signed) · Date: 07/19/06 19:24 · For: Arrival
Nice cliffie! This looks to be very interesting. It's great to see how Luna ticks and her internal motivations. I'm intrigued by the 'magical Muggle' and wondering what the strangers want with Luna. I don't really have any criticism except for a few commas that could be added. This is a great start!

Name: Poultrygeist99 (Signed) · Date: 07/11/06 8:43 · For: Changes
So quietly, the Ministry began to kill any and all individuals bearing the green snake on his forearm. Creepy!

Nice job. I'm looking forward to the next installment.

Name: Meryl Montgomery (Signed) · Date: 07/10/06 17:49 · For: Arrival
"..she barely noticed the two cloaked strangers standing between her and her room until she bumped into them.

Looking up, she smiled politely and opened her mouth to ask for entrance into her room."

If you're honestly worrying about portraying Luna correctly, I'll have to hit you over the head with a loaf of bread. That last sentence was completely her. You've got her character just right.

Name: BrierRose17 (Signed) · Date: 06/30/06 16:31 · For: Arrival
Hmmm. I was just thinking... Who is the second stranger. (assuming Draco is one)



Name: BrierRose17 (Signed) · Date: 06/29/06 23:50 · For: Captivity
eeeeE! This is such a great start. (both chapters) I've always believed Draco is good at heart... so this is my kind of fic. Keep up the great work!

Oh, and I'm making a banner for this fic for the BA monthy challenge. : D

Name: Khrys (Signed) · Date: 06/27/06 21:24 · For: Captivity
Please don't discontinue this story! I did see your Author's note. Again, I am hard pressed to find anything to constructively criticise in this chapter. I love the emotions and feelings that you bring out of Luna and Draco as they interact. I can feel Luna's pain as she slowly awakens. You have written the scene of dawning comprehension perfectly. I can imagine putting the pieces together myself, just as Luna did. Wonderful!

Name: Khrys (Signed) · Date: 06/27/06 21:19 · For: Arrival
Wow. You have an amazing way of making the whole scene jump off the pages and come to life. The Ron twist was superb. I often forget that Luna could be paired off with anyone other than Neville, which is a bit ridiculous if I do say so myself. I love how you have caputered Luna's excitement over her new position at her father's paper. I don't have anything too constructive, since your chapter is so beautifully written. The only thing I have to offer is that I would like to know more about the reason behind the bartender's glare. I am assuming, though, that you will deal with that in a later chapter. I am looking forward to the next chapter!

Name: kumydabookworm (Signed) · Date: 06/27/06 21:13 · For: Arrival
You portrayed Luna's grief over Ron very well. The reader gets the idea right away as to what happened to him.

I would've liked to learn a bit more about the interviewee. But the Horned Screwzit reference was classic, and you left off Antiquus's hatred quite well. (Did you know antiquus was Latin for old?)

Great piece, Beth.


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