Reviews For One Step Closer
Reviewer: MJ_Padfoot
Date: 05/16/07 20:43
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is way good! I love it! MJ

Reviewer: KitKat517
Date: 06/20/06 14:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

Good. I liked it.

Reviewer: hufflepuffgal
Date: 06/19/06 16:55
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! Good job. I like the was it was writen, the 4 line verses. I can't exactly picture Harry saying this, though. It seems like most of the time when he expresses emotions it's in an angry way. But, of course, this poem couldn't have been written about anyone else. Maybe if it had been wrutten in 3rd person, intead of 1st, it would have made more sence to me. But this is just a suggestion. I still really like it. I just can't picture Harry saying it, but I can picture someone else saying it, telling about Harry. Although that might mess up the flow of the poem, I don't know.
Anyway, that would be the only thing I would change, but you don't have to if you don't want to.
Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Yeah, that's fair. I don't know if he would say these things out loud either. Maybe they're just thoughts. Thanks for the review, I appreciate you taking the time to tell me what you thought.

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