Reviewer: Marauder by Midnight
Date: 07/21/06 16:33
Chapter: The Flying Lesson

Haha very amusing story!


I enjoyed seeing Lewis rescue the girl first. It helped you avoid the cliche of a damsel-in-distress story.


You did well in keeping your story light yet exciting at the same time. The jokes and the descriptions blended very well! I'm only disappointed in not knowing Juliet's name ;)


Zebedee was a very creative name! Made me smile.
That is true Gryffindor spirit!


-Bethany

Reviewer: the nutty imp
Date: 06/17/06 12:25
Chapter: The Flying Lesson

Excellent characterization and you've set up the feel of this quite well. It's a light piece about Euan and I love the details you've given about his nervousness -- showing his thoughts and knowing his actions - this showed his bravery even more.

I do suggest the the last sentence be italicised because it's a direct thought. :)

Love how you used a little known character and developed him. Most people would have written about better known canon characters - Creating one is and centering the story around him is definitely hard and you managed it :)

Author's Response: Thanks nutty! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 06/16/06 18:45
Chapter: The Flying Lesson

Aww that was cute. I liked how well you described his escalating nerves. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thank you!

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